Luna's return from the moon was anything but easy. Severe memory loss meant that she knew nothing of her rebellion and subsequent banishment. Forcing her to rely on Celestia's story. But the Lunar princess is slowly regaining her memory. And with it comes revelation. The true reason for the rebellion, the lies told by her sister. Her daughter.
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Interesting.
Can't wait to see more.
I love this!
I come from "My little dilemma". just for that you enter my (frighteningly large) read later list for me to (try) to get to after i have finished cleaning out my updated favorites. can't wait to see what this story is like. now to actually read the description of the story
EDIT: hmmm this grabs my interest, moving up on priority list.
EDIT 2: ....tragedy tag, my old enemy. we meet again. i am now officially wary of this story. it will still be read later
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I assure you the feels will be moderated to a reasonable amount. Also thanks for taking an interest
Those bold 'are's should be 'our' instead. It happened at least in one other sentence before the one I quoted too. Also, it would be grasp with the our in front of it rather that grasps.
2016097
Homonyms, will be the death of me.
Oooh, I was missing out with this.
Um, please explain how do douse someone/thing with fire.
How about 'muted' her magic instead.
No space after the period.
'There' should be 'their'.
Should be alright
Luna's, possessive.
While I have seen the word 'vieing' used, the present participle of 'vie' is 'vying'.
Double 'and'.
Holy crap, I just close the tab, but it saved, phew. More criticism (more like minor edits) will come later on, right now, I am sleepy, but rest assured, I like it, the premise and the execution.
I am tracking this, I gave you your thumb, now can I have my family back?
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... bu- I-?!?!?! What is Strangelove doing?! Good to have you back on the team though. I'll inbox you link to next chapter on Docs BEFORE it goes active.
It's not bad, but Luna's speech isn't quite right. It isn't archaic enough and you shifted between the plural "we/us/our" (the correct way if writing dialogue for her) and the singular "I/me/mine".
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Well, this story is taking place between season 1 and 2. So in my head cannon Luna is still coping with having returned and as such, her speech is kind of a hybrid.
2146779 Ah I see.
wow celestia you should really trust your help more.
Oh and twilight when you find out what Celestia is doing buck some sense into her will ya.
I feel this is appropriate.
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I'm not sure exactly how that relates.
2159290 Lonely in editing? So ronrey? Just me?
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Nope. Lol, sorry if it seemed that way.
Obligatory read it again as editing means looking through it too thoroughly, if I missed anything, proceed to flame me. I can take it.
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Question: The first chapter mentions that the name of the filly is Cadence. BUT, in the storys interface, that is, the description, the characters showed are Twilight, Celestia, Luna, Nightmare Moon and OC (which I assume is Notte). If the filly is Cadence, then why isn't she showed along with the afore mentioned characters?
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Hmm. Good point. Must slipped my mind when I set it up. Thanks for the catch.
3722424 No problem! I personally preffer Mother Luna x Twi Daughter stories. But, so far, I'm quite likig this story.
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Well. Thank you. For the pointer and the fave. Hopefully soon I can put out another chapter
3723168 I sure hope so! I'm looking forward to it!
I really like this story hope to read more soon
5583597
Sorry, no such luck. I've kind of abandoned the fandom.
6837906 oh okay thanks for letting me know