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Brony2893


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You know what they say once you hit rock bottom...

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This story was 100% born of impulse and emotion.

I saw this picture and literally teared up thinking of this poor mare. I instantly decided I wanted this unknown, down on her luck pony to have a happy ending.
A massive thanks to Azu and Darastrix for their help. This wouldn't have been possible without them.

EDIT: I'm fairly sure somebody else already used this cover image for something, but frankly I don't care. It happens.

EDIT: If I had a dollar for each person who said this reminded them of Pretty Woman...

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Okay, to be frankly honest.

Fuck those stallions that use her, and also, I'm kind of grateful since they do pay her, which is still bad, but she needs the money- AAGGHHH

SO MUCH CONFLICTING EMOTIONS!

RAAAAGGGHHH

I'll just torture that doll over there!

*points at doll*

(I'd pay her 50 bits, and I'll only ask for a hug)

What can I get for 50 bits? :trollestia:

Oh god, I'm a terrible person. :twilightoops:

Anywhores, excellent story, dude. Nice and touching too. :pinkiehappy:

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How damn, you made that comment over 20 weeks ago. :rainbowkiss:

Azu

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this story has been in the works for a long time. :raritywink:

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i will kill you for this.

This is, I admit, one of the few things that touched my heart, and filled me with so much emotion.

You, mister, you better become a professional writer. Or else.

Hey, this story was better than it was when I read it like 19 weeks ago!

Yay for early reading privileges! :rainbowwild:

2722094 Don't worry. He will be one. If he doesn't, I'll set him on fire. :ajbemused:

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After you set him on fire, I'll do the sparta kick, k? :raritywink:

2722122 Sounds good to me.


...Then I'll destroy his pelvis with my own. And he will love it. :pinkiecrazy:

Just to be shure: This will continue right? If not, I swear I will write strongly worded PMs.

I am looking forward to seeing where you take this story. Good job!

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Holy Crap! I totally forgot about this story. I was wondering why I never got a new story to edit. Had me worried, I thought I pissed you off or something.

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That moment when you realize you posted something before sending it to your editor:facehoof::twilightblush:

But nah, we're still cool:raritywink:

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Yeah except I've already edited it(?) months ago, you just never posted it.

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My favorite kind of story. That moment whe inspiration doesn't just strike, it slaps you, forces a pencil in your hand and yells "Write this!"
That has happened to me once, and it was glorious.

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Than I guess I'll have to read it.

F***ing brilliant. Faved and liked.

Interesting! Can't wait to read more!

Hey, pretty good story here. I always say there just simply isn't enough character development for Rarity in the show, not enough to show her truly use what her Element represents to its full capacity, so it's nice to see something like this. In the show, she may be the Element of Generosity, but how often does she really show that? The only one that ever comes off the top of my head is in the series premier when she gives part of her tail for that FAAAAAA-bulous moustache. And she was pretty damned reluctant to do so. Here, although she had somewhat of an internal battle as to what to do, but in the end she still helped that poor mare, without very much hesitation on her part at all.

All-in-all, if it weren't for the fact she's helping a "mare of the night" as it were, this would probably be a good story to pitch to the MLP staff. Kudos to yous! :twilightsmile:

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Oh my gosh! Before I even read the story, the cover pic caught my attention. Like you I felt for Sunny right away. I went to save this pic, but I wanted to know her name first. So I gave in to curiosity and read. Plus I wanted to learn more about her and see what Rarity was going to do. I'm so glad I did! :twilightsmile:

Excellent story! :yay: I was on the verge of tears from the time Rarity met Sunny till the chapter ended. You had me worried for a moment when Rarity found out how long Sunny had been in the bath. Thank goodness my fears weren't confirmed.

Great job portraying both characters! I've already liked and fav'd this story and am really look forward to more! :raritystarry:

This story is one of the better ones I have read in a long time. You have me respects for writing about this topic and my like and fav for how you handled it

amazing just fucking amazing INSTANT FAVE

I was sad when I saw the picture... and even more so after reading the chapter. Chin up sunny.

Now this is unique, please MOAR! :flutterrage:

As of writing this, I am currently broke, homeless, and hungry.

This hits closer to home than you'd expect.

You have my fav and track.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2722814 I can cite examples of Rarity's generosity in Suited for Success, Sonic Rainboom, A Dog and Pony Show, and Games Ponies Play. Otherwise, I have to agree. :duck:

With that out of the way, this is truly Rarity at her best. I think the whole part with her debating with herself was a tad heavy-handed (she didn't need to outright say that she was the Element of Generosity), but otherwise, your portrayal is top-notch. It's also a very intriguing idea, and one that's worth exploring. :raritywink:

However, I just have one question. Is Sunny Spout a Blank Flank? I only ask because you don't seem to mention her Cutie Mark, and I doubt it has anything to do with her current line of work. If this backstory is revealed in later chapters, that's fine, but I think you should still tell us what her Cutie Mark is. :rainbowhuh:

On a related note, if it does have to do with her current line of work, eww. :pinkiesick:

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Her Cutie Mark was noted in a previous scene. Perhaps I should have expanded upon it a bit further:applejackunsure:

"incomplete"

thank you thank you thank you thank you

2723220 Yeah, I found it upon rereading. My bad. :twilightsheepish:

So, yeah. This is shaping up to be a nice little story. I'll be watching this with great interest. :raritystarry:

I'm hooked cant wait for the next chapter

Generosity is a marvelous thing.

This is.... Fascinating.
Show me more!

This touching story of best pony, brought to you by 2723220

Not bad, first story i read in a long time. I mostly write.
I hope this ends well.

oh how do the young ones say it these days? Deal with it? Yes, they can deal with it.

Did she just admit to being old?...

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Reading is just watching books, page by page.:raritywink:

I'm just waiting for Rarity to go all Patrick Bateman on her ass:

Oh, and loving the story so far! Really captures Rarity's generosity.

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Probably one of the best comments I've ever seen on a sad story. Keep being awesome, dude.

Nice. Rarity is such a nice pony, but I think she's a little clueless. I think his is going to be awkward city in the morning. That is if said pony doesn't try to sneak out,

Also, I realize what you're going (or so I think...), but calling it a random act seems like a stretch. It's not like Rarity rolled a die to see whether she would, she deliberately chose to "help" Sunny.

A beautiful piece of art so far, and I'm excited for some more. It's touching how Rarity's generosity is incorporated into the story, and the story is all-around filled with heart. Thank you for sharing your talents with us. :twilightsmile:

“I will write you a check for one-hundred bits"

It's actually cheque in this context

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“I will write you a check for one-hundred bits just to come to the hotel with me for the night,” Rarity stated as she grabbed the small checkbook and pen in her magic, bringing them closer. “It’s very simple, if by tomorrow morning you still feel too nervous about leaving Manehattan, you may keep the check and I will bother you no more,” Rarity paused to let the words sink in. “If you come to Ponyville with me, I will take the check to the bank and deposit it fully into a savings account for you. Either way, you win.”

Right 'ere mate

2724095 I see where you're coming from with this, but from the perspective of Sunny Sprout this is the last thing she expected.

2724152 Depends, in America he would be right, in Canada/UK you would be right, at least that's what I'm getting from the dictionary I'm currently looking at.

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