For eons, Changelings have been thought of of creatures who cannot love, yet fest on it. But what if Changeling could love?
Chryselia, only daughter of Queen Chrysalis, Queen of the Changelings, has fled from from her home at the swarm, and has traveled to Ponyville to live out a new, exciting life.
Unfortunately, there are complications.
Chrysalis, Queen of the Changelings, captures rarity in an attempt to learn about her daughters whereabouts. meanwhile, decent grows in her ranks, as an old foe rises to take the power from the Changeling Queen, and then, Power over all of Equestria.
Love meets action and adventure as the Changeling Princess makes unlikely allies in an attempt to save her race as well as Equestria's.
Chapters (7)
just 1 question: why need to kill off Rarity? (or replace her, or whatever you want to call it)
great story, glad it went well, beririrangu its probably to make some sort of plot point.
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Im not going to kill her, but im a SpikeXRarity fan, and i will eventually add to the drama
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alright... I'm just saying that because of what was implied by the summary (or at least what I read as implied)
hmm as long as Rarity survives, im fine. Lol
Its good, other than some editing is needed.
Those changeling dicks had better not hurt Rarity! Imma get my shotgun.
Not gonna take very long for them to figure our Rarity isn't the princess and I doubt Spike will fail to see through the disguise. Nothing bad better hppen to Rarity either.
'Aight, finally got around to reading it. Seems fine, not one for shipping's much but i like changelings. Main revision would be that you spelt prologue wrong
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MEH!
hey all ye people who enjoyed this! in case yer wondering, i should have the next chapter up by Friday, and at the latest, Saturday night. thank y'all for readin!
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Just sayin' broO.o
I bet the real Rarity and the Queen are most likely to bust-in at Flutttershy's party if Chryselia isn't found out beforehand.
Hm...
If Rarity is captured and if what Chryselia says is true, Chrysalis obsessed about the Elements, I'm sure she'd torture Rarity for info.
As for Chryselia, I'm sure she'll have a bit of a hard time to be Rarity.
Its getting interesting……keep going please!
Nice bit with the forth wall joke. Though I wonder who would Spike pick later Rarity or Chryselia? In all honesty I'm rooting for the changeling.
2040009Same here bro, but I don't have the story thought out that far X3 javascript:smilie('
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2040033 As long as the story is good I'm willing to wait though I'm hoping for Chryselia.
I'm not that big of a fan of Sparity in all honesty.
I thought this was a 007 crossover from the title.
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Same lol.
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baaaaaah! im gonna change the name. *mutters about james bond* plus, its cheesey.
Good chapter but the disguise ain't gonna last forever. Eventually someone is gonna see through it.
I like it. ANOTHER!
There was some errors here and there, nothing too drastic, just some capitalization and minor spelling errors. Overall a good read.
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thank you very much! And there will be more in about 3-4 days (or less)
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GLORIOUS!
Now I want cake.
I am afraid your character is dangerously moving towards the stereotypical Mary Sue. Let me elaborate:
Character with a bad past:: raped by the guards (with no psychological trauma), beat up by other changelings and ignored by her mother until the moment she is gone; Octavia feels bad for her.
Octavia completely ignores the fact that Chryselia stole somepony's persona for her own, does not even try to make her confess about it, or even make her tell where the real pony is.
Chryselia develops a crush on Spike, and somehow ignores the fact that Spike has a crush on Rarity. Wasn't she able to detect emotions? Also, she can read somepony's mind through emotions? I don't know what emotions have to do with thoughts.
She somehow manages to imitate perfectly Rarity's way of talking, despite never having talked to her, much less studied how a refined mare talks.
Chryselia manages to escape her home even tho she was being chased by highly trained changeling soldiers with far more stamina and strength.
Now on a logical side: Chryselia states that she wouldn't eat apples since they taste "bad" and because they have no emotions. Why was she then drinking tea in the first place?
Octavia wouldn't reveal Chryselia's identity because she is loyal. Loyal to whom? She never pledged loyalty to her, nor she has a reason to. Why protect her? Maybe she feels bad for her, because of everything she went through. But and Rarity? Chryselia stole her identity and got her kidnapped, what abotu that?
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hmm. you have several good points. I'm not sure how to answer some, but I'll try my best. Keep in mind that due to school, I usually type these up late at night, so I'm not really thinking things all the way through.
First off, in my mind, Changelings can "eat" food, but it really doesn't help them, or quenches their hunger and what not. I would suppose that She is drinking it because Octavia was drinking it. Mostly, It was just so I could make a joke off of it.
Character with a bad past is incredibly cliche, but that's what I wanted to do, so if you don't like it, I cant force you too.
Octavia doesn't have to make her confess, she was right there, she already knows. hypothetically, they went over most of what you mentioned "off set." and again, I was typing that late at night, so again, wasn't really thinking clearly.
being a princess, and having a head start, she obviously *to my mind* would have the training and strength to out fly a few guards. But then, that does open the fact is easily taken down by other guards.
I do remember saying that Chrysalis was obsessed with the mane six. She picked up her skills from her mother. And, in the main show, changelings where able to magically imitate the voices of their chosen forms. Weak argument here.
saying that Octavia was loyal was totally incorrect, and the wrong word for me to choose. And, I once again use the excuse that i was dead tired.
All in all, I thank you very much for your constructive criticism. at some point, I will edit the story to incorporate all your actually rather helpful comments. I will keep them in mind!
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Sorry if my last answer came out as rude, it was never my intention to spit on your work in any way. I am actually rather surprised that you took my comment into consideration, considering the high amount of writers that tend to shut themselves in when being criticized.
I "like" it, i just feared that this would somehow turn into a wish-fulfillment fanfiction considering the bad past of the princess of the changelings.
You are completely right, i totally forgot about that detail.
I wish you good luck with your fanfiction. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you very much!
sorry this next Chapter is taking so long. I'm beginning work on a fanfic based on the video, "Friendship Was Magic," so it's a little time consuming. I'll have the next Chapter done by tomorrow, or Saturday. It's gonna be rather sloppy however.
You spelled 'cheesy' wrong in the description :3
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I knew that X3 (complete lie)
Interesting, but you have few misspeled words and errors with text edition
You want luna to kill the princes? its princess
You have written instead "Chrysalis" of "Chryselia" a awful lot of time in this chapter 4. I highly recommend you to correct that.
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Mind rephrasing that? I don't understand what you mean.
Uh...
They want Princess Luna to kill Princess Chyselia. Missing an 's' there.
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yep, fixing that now. Thanks!
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No problem, but it would have been hilarious to read if there were Changeling princes in the hive.
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Hmmmm....
Hello every pony! I'm temporarily putting this story on hold, (only for a week or so) so I can go back, and revise the grammatical errors, and mess with some of the plot holes, and see if I can't fix them, and make some of the stories less rushed. Thank you to all those who've read this!
lol, I was praying for a derpy moment but hey, Octavia works http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MLeicQZKuKw and just to help enjoy it more
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I got to wait now
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It's off hold as of now! Writing the new chapter! Yay!
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hurray for new chapters; can't wait to see it 
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There's yer new chapter bru!
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Yay, a new chapter
Tasty... with a hint of regret on her part.
Changling rule one: always check your disguise if you plan to leave anywhere, especially if you are copying anyone important.
I do feel bad for her though.
Another if you please....
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Soon...