Caramel has worked temp jobs in Ponyville since he moved there, but one day a letter arrives, informing him of a financial windfall large enough for him to open a bakery of his very own! His bad luck finally seemed to be on its way out when a friendly visit from the town apple suppliers turned into a demonstration of how seriously they take the little red fruits in this town. Little does he realize that during his struggle, he'll uncover a devious plot that threatens all of Equestria, starting with Ponyville.
Chapters (1)
'What ponies don't understand is..." *Draws from a big cigar* "You don't cross the family."
Damn.....The Apples are asses
A little fast-paced and, of course, Apples are a little OOC, but quite enjoyable. I look forward to more.
Will definitely read and review later (much too early in he morning for me at the moment), but I just want to say that as of right now, the thing that's caught my attention the most, is this story's URL.
Story # 7857.
I really like the idea of this fic! Great one so far. Keep it up Bronius!
2614317 a looooooong time
Well, this is enjoyably menacing. I look forward to more, especially as Caramel discovers just how far the corruption goes.
Apple the Mafia FTW!
MOAR!
I like this idea! Big Mac as a thug is hilarious. Looking forward to reading more!
Well, there goes another pony we'll never hear from Again.
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Hmmmmmm.......
Reading this while listening to Where is the Love? is an interesting thing indeed.
Back to the story, this looks good. I'm gonna have to follow it. I had an idea close to this, a Saints Row crossover, but given my luck, Caramel would have an easier (and more sucsessful) time before the 80g luck.
I'm surprised they didn't threaten his cousin's business too, after all they have family everywhere.
(Avatar: that isn't my friend. That's not how she acts)
Any chance this'll continue anytime soon ?
3092824 it will continue, I just can't say when for certain.
"Now ya play by our rules, or ya might end up like that old pear farm on the edge o'town."
"Pear farm? What pear farm?"
"Exactly."
Mafia Apples.
Hello :)
It's a really nice story
I would love to read a new chapter of your amazing story, even if there is only one chapter at the moment. I like the Idea of the Bad Apples and I love Caramels Personality !
Somehow I would like a big collapse, a disorder or something like that later in the story for caramel. But it's just an idea.
And I would like to ask if you could inform me when you upload a new chapter.
In Germany (where I live) there is a little information to the readers, but not here, if I see it right. Or I'm too stupid to notice the small signs.
Does this site have such a thing? If so, could you tell me how to use it?
Thank you and good luck with the chapter
L.
(I know the Story is on Hiatus, but it's worth a try)