All I Have is you (it is all that I'm breathing for)
All I Need is you (Now I can't make it trough)
Finally, the rehearsal of the wedding was to take place. Princess Celestia arrived at Ponyville when Luna took over at night, and everyone decided the rehearsal would be held at Apple Acres, upon insistence of Discord. However, Shining Armor was missing, nobody had seen him for the past two days, which started to worry Twilight and Cadence. After all, Shining Armor was the Best Colt, but apparently, they would have to do the rehearsal without him.
The first in entering the barn, where Celestia and Discord were already waiting, were Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Rarity and Applejack, holding up their heads in the air with pride.
"Excellent work, girls," Celestia drew a smile on her lips and glanced at the entrance doors of the barn while the ponies giggled excitedly, "You know what to do next, everypony."
Cadence walked in next, taking her place as Twilight's Best Mare, but Spike had to occupy Shining Armor's place while he arrived, if he arrived at all. The next ponies in coming in were Pinkie Pie and Screwball, hopping happily as if it was them getting married. And finally, Big Macintosh and Apple bloom had offered to open the doors of the barn when it was time for Twilight to walk in.
They opened the door (before going back to bed, for it was late and they were tired), and Twilight was outside, waiting for her turn. Discord didn't take his eyes off his bride-to-be, smiling as she slowly walked to her designated place; he could already imagine her in her wedding dress and town, he just couldn't wait to join his life to this wonderful mare. When Twilight reached her place, Celestia was about to speak when Discord spoke first.
"Yeah, we know what's next, Celestia!" Discord twitched his tail in boredom and let out a big yawn, "Twi enters, you speak, we say the vows, and then you pronounce us colt and mare, and we live happily ever after!"
"Well, in this case, it would be, 'I pronounce you Draconequus and mare,'" Celestia smirked, to which Discord made a pout, like she anticipated.
"Oh, yeah, rub it in my face." he said, crossing his arms and trying to sound as hurt as he could.
"Daddy, can I go with you on the honeymoon?" Screwball inquired innocently
"Depends on what your future stepmother says."
Twilight blushed, "well.. Screwie, honeymoons are supposed to be a special time where a newlywed couple spends time with each other and... do what married couples do."
Screwball tilted her head and drooped her ears, which made her look quite adorable, "What do married couples do, future mommy?"
Everyone present grew nervous at that question, although Celestia kept her cool. She put a hoof on Screwball's shoulder, "I'm sure your parents will explain it to you sometime."
"I just hope we won't have to use dolls again, my little bubble," Discord giggled, remembering the first time he attempted to give her the 'Talk.'
Cadence, however, was still worried about Shining Armor, and feared he would commit a nonsense. After all, it sounded like he was willing to do anything to stop Twilight Sparkle from marrying Discord. Speaking of which, Rarity poked Discord softly.
"Hey, your 'surprise,'" she whispered, to which Discord panicked.
"Oh, I almost forgot!" He snapped his fingers, and a small box with a red ribbon appeared in front of Twilight, "I... made this for you, but I'm not really good at sewing, so...." he was getting redder by the minute, "Please don't laugh at me."
The others, minus Rarity and Spike, got closer to Twilight to see what was in the box; the purple Unicorn used her magic to open the box, and everyone was marveled at what was inside.
It was a lilac-colored scarf, with golden trimming, although it was crudely done, but intention is what mattered. However, what called the attention of everyone were the words on the scarf...
"STOP!!"
Suddenly, Shining Armor burst into the barn, a determined look on his face. Cadence, Twilight and the present ponies were shocked when the stallion charged into Discord, sending them both plummeting to the ground.
"GET AWAY FROM MY SISTER!" Shining Armor snarled in fury, to which Discord reacted by snapping a finger and lifting Shining Armor of him, and holding him in the air.
"What's wrong with you?!" he snapped, "You're going to ruin my hair!",
"Shining, what in the hay are you doing?!" Cadence snapped
"Why did you just attack my groom?!" Twilight added, incensed at her Best Colt for tackling her future husband.
"Because he doesn't deserve you! In fact, you should not even stand next to him in the altar! I should have told you this from this beginning, Twiley!"
Discord looked at his bride and shrugged, showing he didn't know what Shining Armor was talking about; Shining Armor used his magic to break free of Discord's, and stood between him and Twilight.
"I'm not letting you do any harm to her!" he snarled again, fiery determination in his eyes, "You may have gotten all of the others under your control, but not me! I know what you're trying to do!"
"What's gotten into you, Shiny?" Rainbow looked both confused and angry
Screwball just stood there, frozen like a statue; Pinkie Pie and Applejack rushed to her side to calm her down, at the same time giving Shining Armor fulminating glares. Really, why was he doing this?
"Everyone, he's being lying to you the whole time!"
"Shining-" Celestia attempted to make him stop, but he interrupted.
"No! You'll listen what I have to say!"
Discord narrowed his eyes and crossed his arms, "Fine! Then speak, and explain why I have been 'lying to them the whole time!' What did I do, according to you?"
"He never changed! He's still the same evil Spirit, and he'll always be!" Shining Armor continued.
The Mane six started chattering among themselves, and even Cadence was speechless. Twilight kept staring at her brother, frozen in shock and shame. She wished to disappear.
"He hypnotized Spike when he heard something about his plans, he brought his lover here under your noses," he pointed at Screwball, who by then was crying uncontrollably, "and he gave Twilight that blasted chocolate milk of his to control her so that she would marry him! In fact, he offered most of you something to eat or drink! He offered his cotton candy to Cadence and Applejack, then I saw him giving water to Rarity! It's all a fake!"
Discord snarled, "And what would I win if I actually had done what you say I did?"
"You tell me, It's your plan, after all!"
Discord closed his eyes shut in anger, but decided to leave it for other day; he wouldn't hurt his beloved Twilight's brother, even if he deserved. He set his eyes on Twilight, and saw tears were forming into her eyes. It pained him to see his bride like this, and he wished to comfort her, but apparently Shining would not let him a hoof step near Twilight.
"If you'll excuse me, girls, I think I need to punch somepony... Or at least something that looks like certain somepony," he gave Shining Armor a final glare before snapping his fingers and disappearing.
Shining Armor then yelled at the top of his lungs, "And I don't want you near my sister ever again, you hear me?!"
Saying this, he proudly turned his back on where Discord had been, proud of finally telling the truth to everypony. However, he ran into Twilight's much smaller frame; she was giving him a furious glare, and her ears were flat against her skull, he could swear he could see smoke coming out of her nostrils
"... Why...?" she hissed almost inaudibly, but her anger was notable by the stone of her voice.
"Twiley..." Shining felt a shiver running down his spine, and he couldn't even speak clearly, "A-Are you alright?"
He tried putting a hoof on her shoulder, but the the unicorn aggressively pushed it away.
"ALRIGHT?!" She screamed at the top of her lungs, "YOU JUST RUINED THE REHEARSAL OF MY WEDDING! YOU JUST ACCUSED MY GROOM OF NEVER HAVING CHANGED! YOU JUST EMBARRASSED ME IN FRONT OF EVERYPONY! AND YOU STILL HAVE THE NERVE TO ASK ME IF I'M OKAY?! WELL, I'M DEFINITIVELY NOT OKAY, THANKS TO YOU!"
Everypony gasped at Twilight's sudden emotional outburst; they had never seen her so angry before. In fact, it seemed as if she was a completely different pony; yet, they knew she had every right to be furious.
"Twiley, I was trying to save you!" Shining finally said, more firmly this time, "I saw him giving you his chocolate milk to drink! I went to the Canterlot Library and I read his chocolate milk, or anything he produces, can be used for mind control if he wishes to!"
Twilight narrowed her eyes. "And you based your hypothesis on something that you simply saw? Couldn't you have even come and ask me what I was drinking? Do you think I'm foolish enough to not notice if someone is trying to cast a mind-controlling spell on me? You simply drew a conclusion from old books from centuries that might as well be outdated! In case you didn't properly read."
"And in case you didn't read properly, that is not the only thing his magic can do! He was giving me chocolate milk because I had started to get the symptoms of a cold! And his milk can be used as a medicine should he want to!"
Shining Armor was speechless, "M-Medicine? You mean... he was curing you?"
Twilight flicked her tail as she snapped, "Of course he was! But in case this doesn't convince you of his innocence!" Twilight's horn and she cast a detection spell on herself and the rest of the Mane Six, but there was no reaction that showed any sort of mind-controlling or influential spell on any of them. They were all free. "And do you know what his surprise was?!"
Twilight used her magic to extend the scarf Discord had made for her, so that her brother could read the crudely-sewn words.
I love you, Twilight Sparkle
"But-" Shining Armor tried to speak, but was interrupted by Twilight, who by then had started to weep in anguish.
"How could you do this to me?! You knew how important this was to me! I thought you wanted me to be happy, but I see I was completely wrong! Are you getting revenge for your rehearsal?! I did have a reason to act like I did!! I knew Cadence since I was a filly, I knew how she was like, and it tipped me off to see her act out-of-character! But you didn't even know Discord more than one day, and you're already accusing him of things just because you didn't give yourself a chance to actually know him!"
"That's not true, Twiley!!" Shining spoke, "It's not revenge! I was trying to protect you! I tried to talk to you, but Discord always found away to keep me from talking to you! Even your friends and Cadence were manipulated by Discord to keep me form talking to them! There had to be a reason for that!"
Applejack frowned. "Well, how about he was being nice? In case ye forgot, he tried to be friendly with you too, but you never gave him a chance!"
"I can give you a quick-portation to Canterlot, Shiny. That way you'll have more time to prepare for the wedding."
"Want some, Shiny?"
"I'm Mr. Grumpy Armor! I would rather be polishing my armor than being here!"
"Come on, Shiny! Don't be a party-pooper! Let's make the conga!"
Shining Armor felt intimidated by all the hostility in the air, but he still managed to speak. "Twilight, I only wanted to protect you! That's what big brothers do-!"
"What?!" Twilight yelled, furious, "To ruin a sister's most beautiful and important moments?! To break her heart a few days before the most important day of her life?! To embarrass her like this?! If that's the kind of brother you are, then I no longer consider you my brother at all!!"
Twilight attempted to run away, but Shining Armor stopped her.
"Twiley, please..." he begged, but she pushed his hooves away
"DON'T TOUCH ME! I HATE YOU!"
When she was by the door, she stopped abruptly and gave her former BBBFF a tear-filled glare.
"AND YOU CAN FORGET ABOUT BEING MY BEST COLT!! IN FACT, DON'T YOU EVEN THINK ABOUT PUTTING A HOOF IN MY WEDDING!!!
Then she ran away in tears, completely crushed, taking the scarf with her. Her own brother had ruined one of the most beautiful moments in her life; perhaps he was getting revenge because she had done the same at the rehearsal of his wedding, but she had been right that time about 'Cadence'... But in this case, Shining Armor had judged Discord without knowing him, and that was angered her the most.
Shining Armor was frozen in shock and grief; his baby sister had just told him she hated him. She had cut him off her life. She had told him he was no longer her brother. He never thought he would hear those heart-breaking words coming from her. He slowly turned around in great pain, and saw that the Mane Six, Cadence and Celestia were still glaring at him.
Spike stepped to the front, incensed about what just happened, "Do you want to know what happened between Discord and me at the library?!" he hissed, "He wanted to give Twilight a nice wedding gift, and he asked me what things she likes! And I asked him to hypnotize me so that I would not open my mouth!"
Screwball stomped her hoofs as she yelled at the stallion, "What did my daddy ever do to you?! Why did you attack him?!"
Shining opened his eyes wide, "Daddy? You're not his...?"
"She's Discord's daughter!" Applejack growled, her usually calm, emerald eyes were filled with anger, "He had gone to Canterlot statue garden and encountered her by chance! Then they returned to Ponyville, and he introduced her to us!"
Rainbow Dash hovered towards him, coming face-to-face with a glare. "Seriously?! Discord might be cynical, irresponsible, and he might like to cause trouble every now and then, but he is not evil! At the most he'd be a sort of frenemy, but a very cool one!"
Pinkie Pie added, "You are a big meanie! You made Twilight cry, you hurt her feelings, you broke her heart, and now she won't stop crying! And when she cries, we are sad! Now everyone will be sad!"
Fluttershy sighed, "Girls... we should not waste our time trying to argue with him. We should go and check on Twilight, she needs us now."
The others nodded and walked out of the barn, not giving Shining a single glance. Spike passed by him with an angry look of his face, he hated when Twilight was hurt. When Screwball passed by Shining Armor, she stuck her tongue at him and left indignantly and hurt. When Cadence was passing by her husband, she gave him a sad and disappointed look.
"Are you happy now?" was all she said before going after the others.
"Princess, I-" Shining Armor tried to speak, but Celestia cut him off.
"I asked you not to take decisions that would hurt Twilight," she coldly told him, disappointment notable in her tone, "Not only did you hurt her feelings, but you made Discord really angry. I agree with Twilight, don't even bother in going to the wedding."
"Are you..." Shining Armor was close to crying, "... dismissing me from the wedding too?"
"I'm afraid you have brought this upon yourself. Not only you are forbidden from attending to the wedding and dismissed from being the Best Colt , but you will not see Twilight until she decides to talk to you. Until then, you shouldn't even try to speak to her, she won't want to see you."
Celestia walked out of the barn, closing the doors of the barn behind. Shining just stood there, alone and miserable. He fell to his knees in complete regret.
"Perhaps I was jealous..." he lamented in a very low tone, "Perhaps I did misjudge Discord..."
He remained all alone, and eventually fell on his knees. He had really messed up this time; he hadn't meant to hurt Twilight's feelings, yet everypony thought that was his intention. Now he was truly alone.
The stallion wept silently, not only because of his blunder, but because he had just lost his little sister, perhaps forever...
I'm losing you forever
(I'm lost in pain without you)
I am leaving ground forever
Discord launched lightings at a cloud with the shape of Shining Armor he had summoned, and when it was destroyed, the smaller clouds that formed merged together again and took the shape of the Captain of the Guard. He had ruined the moment, accusing him of being evil and not having changed at all! He couldn't even hear if Twilight liked her gift or not!
"Damn you!" he roared, throwing another lighting at the Shining-shaped cloud, "How could you to that to Twilight?! To us?!"
After while, the spirit stopped to regain his breath, and the cloud dissipated. He had the feeling that Shining Armor would not like him form the start, but he never thought the stallion would be capable of interrupting the rehearsal and complete ruin it.
But he had the feeling it was not the fact he was a Draconequus or his past what was bothering Shining Armor...
"We'll have to talk about this..."
All I have is you (It is all that I'm breathing for)
In the library, Twilight was crying her eyes out; she and her friends were in her room, but she was in her bed. Cadence was next to her, caressing her mane compassionately, like when she was a foal. Applejack got closer to the bed.
"There, it's alright, Twi," she whispered softly
"I-I can't believe my b-brother did this!" Twilight was sobbing uncontrollably, "I think he did it on payback!"
"Don't say that, he was just being jealous," Cadence spoke softly, "He'll get over it."
"Perhaps, but I still don't want him in the wedding anymore! I don't even want to see him!"
"Don't worry! We'll make sure he is not 50 meters neat the wedding!!" Rainbow Dash offered herself, but it didn't make Twilight feel any better.
The rest of the night seemed like an eternity.
All I need is you (Now I can't make it through)
At this point its like a rehash of A Canterlot Wedding. I'm not that happy abut that.
1985407 well, I did base this part on canterlot wedding a bit
Wow this story is great i can't wait for the next chapter.
and to speed up your writing process i encourage you to drink
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this image may have attracted discord to twilight in the first place
Your output rate is GLORIOUS!
1985490, it gets worse... 5 hour energy, an infusion of the stuff sleeping lets you get back and, worst of all... Giving it to Pinkie
This story is pretty simple, and definitely formulaic. The reason I'm still reading it is because I really like Twicord shipping, and it's hard to find much in that category. What makes me consider not continuing to read is the sloppiness of the writing. Capitalization, grammar, spelling, and word use are all consistently bad throughout all four chapters, and it's very distracting having to try to figure out what you meant to write from what is actually written. Randomly flipping to a page, I found the following errors:
"I'm sure your parents will explain it to you sometime," (Comma instead of period.)
Discord giggled, remembering the first time he attempted to give her the 'Talk'. (The period should go inside the quotation marks.)
Cadence, however, was still worried about Shining Armor, and feared he would commit a nonsense. (I'm guessing the phrase "commit a nonsense" was intentionally un-grammatical. Just putting it here for completeness.)
"Hey, your 'surprise'," she whispered, to which Discord panicked. (The comma after "surprise" should go inside of both sets of quotation marks.)
"oh, I almost forgot!" he snapped his fingers, and a small box with a red ribbon appeared in front of Twilight, "I... made this for you, but I'm not really goof at sewing, so...." he was getting redder by the minute, "Please don't laugh at me," ("Oh" should be capitalized. "He" should also probably be capitalized. The comma after "Twilight" should probably be a period. "Goof" should be "good." "Please" should not be capitalized. The comma at the end should be a period.)
It was a lilac-colored scarf, with golden trimming, although it was crudely done, but intention is that mattered. (Awkwardly phrased. Should be "but the intention is what mattered.")
However, what called the attention of everyone was the words on the scarf... (Should be "were the words.")
So, from a randomly-chosen selection of text, there were about as many errors as there were sentences. That being said, I probably will keep reading this story, as I like Twicord enough to put up with having to translate the story into English. But please do try to fix some of the errors. About a quarter of the errors in your story should be easily caught just by reading through it again after you're done writing it.
congrats because as of today's episode this story can be put in the main canon!
also love the irony of things being played out just like they didn in shinings wedding
1985760 thanks for the advice, I'll try to be more careful in the next chapter, and I'll correct the others
1985871 And thank you for being receptive to criticism. Here's a short guide that I put together awhile ago that covers everything you need to know about quotation marks, and how they interact with other punctuation: The Egghead's Guide to Punctuating Speech and Thought.
1986831 yep, please, i need some help because I have still much to learn about punctuation
I love this story!
1987017how does the editing work?
1987019
Well, if you let me edit for you, I'd pretty much be 'combing out' all of the tiny mistakes and smoothing the whole thing out. I wouldn't be changing any of the story, I'd just be correcting the things like spelling, or if you missed a period or comma, etc..
I've found that it helps the story a lot. I know what it's like, too. Whenever I write a story, I hate having to go back over it and make the edits myself. And I don't even fix most of the mistakes... and I make a lot of mistakes
I guess you would put it on Gdocs so that they could see it, or just send the editor the file through email on a Word document and they'd send you the edited version.
Anyways, this is a great fic, and I'd be glad to help out if I can
198707 what is a Gdocs?
1987077 GDocs is short for Google Docs. That's what many writers use instead of sites like this or fanfiction.net
For those who didn't get the reference.
Good song BTW.
"Literally crying her eyes out" O_0 I don't think you know what "literally" means....
1988023 I know what it means
When I wrote that I was saying that twilight had red eyes from all te crying
1988023 I know what it means
When I wrote that I was saying that twilight had red eyes from all te crying
1985407 its not quite a rehash though, twilight knew cadance from before but shining is meeting discord for the first time
1985407
I don't know about that. Whenever I'm reading, it doesn't remind me anything of A Canterlot Wedding
Heheh, in my opinion, this one is way better
Talk about getting a taste of your own medicine. No offense, but I think Shining Armor deserves this.
This realy is a rewrite of Canterlot Wedding
2223389 I wouldn't say it's a rewrite, if anything it's more of a serious parody.
You know, I actually feel kind of bad for Shining Armor in this situation.
He didn't know, and he was trying to be a good big brother; I don't blame him. No one hated Twilight THAT much when she did practically the same thing.
I understand Twilight is upset and all, but I think people should show a little more sympathy towards Shining. I don't blame him for his speculations.
They did make Discord look prettyyy bad.
Although I KNOW that Shining Armor is going to apologize and everyone's going to live happily ever after like every other story.
Nice story though.
I love the chapter. Ithought that discord was going to do what evil cadence did.
JESUS CRIST SHINNING!!
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Well, if you think about it he deserved it. twilight got no such warning from Celestia or anyone to be polite and second, The mane six know Discord quite well, while the only unhypnotized pony at the Canterlot Wedding who knew Cady quite well was Twilight.
Just a minor correction to improve the work.
Discord closed his eyes shut in anger, but decided to leave it for other day; he wouldn't hurt his beloved Twilight's brother, even if he deserved it.
instead of
Discord closed his eyes shut in anger, but decided to leave it for other day; he wouldn't hurt his beloved Twilight's brother, even if he deserved.
Great story also damn you SHININGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG