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JohnPerry


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This story is a sequel to You Only Live Twice


Vinyl Scratch and Octavia, two of the Pinkieton Detective Agency's newest members, are called out to apprehend a vicious group of outlaws. But what starts out as a hunt for bank robbers will soon become a struggle for control over the wild west in...The West Is Not Enough!
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Proofread by the fantastic RTStephens. The cover image was made from backgrounds and vectors by NightmareMoon5, ZuTheSkunk, supermatt314, and ZeeGaaS on deviantART.

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Comments ( 231 )

Like the little changes to the guitar. That bass cannon was cool but it's nice to see variety in equipment.

Now if only Octavia can get a Vibro-Knife.

Looks like we're off for a wild ride to the west!

Edit: What? A downvote already? What the Hell?!

That...was awesome. Loved the references, the setup, and the story in general. Can't wait for more! Also, is that a Gorillaz reference in the title?

well this should prove to be interesting. I'm down for a western spy fic.

yes i love it so far! :rainbowlaugh:

Er mah gerd. You're continuing this!? AWESOME:pinkiehappy::yay:

nice bond reference and dirty harry one two :twilightsmile:

Who downvoted?
Shun the non beliver
SHUN!!

Alright! If all the chapters are this good, this story is gonna be AWESOME.

“Miss, you’re staring down the barrel of the most powerful hoof cannon in the world, which can blow your head clean off with one magic bolt. So you’ve got to ask yourself a question: Do you feel luck—”
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"Well, do ya punk?"

Love them movies. Great story. Love the West. Hope you're gonna make a lot of reference to some classics. I loved the other two stories, but fell behind on both. I will definitely be keeping up with this. LONG LIVE THE MAN WITH NO MANE!!!!!! I MEAN NAME!!


Also, Bonnie and Clydesdale.. Did Bon Bon leave Lyra?? Why Bon Bon? WHYYYYYYYY?

Looking good.

how the hell did this get onto the featured board.....

1974802
Remember times are different my friend(s).

when the devil finished octy said "well you're pretty good old son, but sit down in that chair right there and let me show you how it's done."

This chapter....I like it.....ANOTHER!


In other news, I bet Messy Manes' is just going to end up getting killed by a creepy, obsessive fan who nobody understands.

Or maybe I've been watching The Assassination of Jessie James by the Coward Robert Ford too much. Damn good movie that.

And Vinyl with an electric guitar.

THE WORLD WILL BE SAVED BY THE POWER OF ROCK!
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Oh yeah and Octavia with a fiddle. Priceless.

The reference... I screamed before my palm even made contact with my face.

Also, a Vinyl and Octavia story WITHOUT romance!? What is this world coming too!?

The Wild West? Plus music? In addition to crazy OctaScratch adventures? COUNT ME IN (even if there is no shipping)!

1975680 You talking about the James Bond reference in the title?

From one outlaw to another,

You and I are a select breed of pony, one that knows opportunity when we see it. So I hope you won’t disappoint by taking advantage of the chance of a lifetime out here in the sunny west!

Me and a few friends of mine have found a paradise out here in No Mare’s Land. You must have heard about the mines here striking gold. I’m telling you, colt, it’s all true. What you don’t hear as much about is the total lack of police, soldiers, or any of these pesky princess-huggers. None of them have any authority out here. It’s a wild and beautiful country, where one can live in safety and obscurity. A land of absolute freedom and untold riches, just waiting for that entrepreneurial spirit and that special can-do attitude we Equestrians are renowned for.

I want to invite you to this special place. No more robbing old ladies for bits, we’re talking real money here. Go west, young colt!

Yours truly,

Messy Manes

Proud recipient of the Public Enemy #1 spot, four years running
Go west young colt and Proud recipient of P.E.number 1had me laugh so hard.

Sequel to You Only Live Twice? insta-fave.

1975942 I meant to click on a reply of syvvak's comment. I hate it when people make a reference to Dirty Harry.:facehoof:

1976295 Oh. Well, then, nevermind.

Vinyl got a weapon that might replace Wubsy?!?!? I swear to Celestia, Vinyl, if you even thing about it...

1975209 Brian May and Charlie Daniels FTW!

First, I have to apologize ahead of time. I could not read this, as I was too distracted by the double spacing, the inconsistent usage of emphasis; quotes one place, and italics another; the redundant usage of italics for emphasis when the exclamation mark should have sufficed, and the improper usage of single quote marks denoting titles, proper names of businesses, mottos, et al.

But, look on the bright side... you get an "A" for effort, so I will not down-vote.

1974802
All right, I'll bite. What's your beef with this getting featured?

1977051
Double spacing the lines is perfectly valid and something I've been implored to do multiple times by my own readers, the quotes and italics are meant to emphasize different things, using an exclamation point for emphasis in prose is a great deal more unprofessional than any number of italicized phrases could be, and depending on the stylistic manual you're reading, using single quotes in the manner the author did is grammatically acceptable as well. I have to ask where you're getting your information on these matters. I'm also a bit curious to know why those relatively small issues, if they're even present, are enough to render you unable to force your way through the text, but given the tone of your comment I'm not optimistic I'd get very much in the way of a civil response.

1977187
You know, there's just something really awesome when I see one of my favorite authors defending another of my favorite authors on this site.

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Also, good story! I plan to follow it so keep up with it!

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Okay, this discussion is getting out of hand pretty quick. I really do not want to have a flame war in the comments for my story, so I'm putting an immediate end to it, by which I mean deleting all comments involved. Everyone, let's just chill out.

1978307
you get a up vote just for that. :3 now to read the story and decide if that gets a upvote.

yup up voted.

1977187
Let me answer your argument with civility and some... words. Since you seem all too eager to jump to the defense of the writer, I'll now redirect my response to you, and you alone.

Double spacing the lines is perfectly valid and something I've been implored to do multiple times by my own readers, ...

I'm not talking about paragraph spacing, or line spacing, I'm talking about actually pressing the "space" bar twice, after a full stop on a sentence before starting a new sentence. A double word space is something that is old, outdated, and looks terrible in modern font. If the story were written using monotype font, then yeah, use a double word space to your heart's content.

...the quotes and italics are meant to emphasize different things, ...

Single quotes as emphasis, is just plain bad-copy. It's wrong in any light, and I don't know of a single instance where a proper business title is wrapped in single quotation marks, ever. You will have to produce some hard facts for that one, since the proper usage—and I'm not talking style usage—for single quotes are for citations in dialogue.

...using an exclamation point for emphasis in prose is a great deal more unprofessional than any number of italicized phrases could be, ...

Oh boy, you actually went there. Okay, let's see now. Exclamation points in Academic Prose is, I agree, greatly frowned upon, and newspaper articles will rarely if ever have them, but there is no amount of candy at Hershey, Pennsylvania that can coat a fan-fiction into something resembling Academic Prose; the very notion is outright laughable. Second; the arguable usage of the redundancy of italicized dialogue ending in an exclamation point as artistic style aside; the over-usage of italicized words throughout the story were inconsistent with the emphasized words that were not italicized, and instead had the single quote wrap. Making it difficult to not notice them glaring at me from every angle and almost every paragraph.

...and depending on the stylistic manual you're reading, using single quotes in the manner the author did is grammatically acceptable as well.

Ah yes, the almighty stylistic manuals of grammar. The one great inconsistency in the universe, where almost no two agree, and have us tabbing, underlining for emphasis, dropping alliteration, avoiding parenthetical remarks, and never ending a sentence with a preposition, banning the use of "I" in essays, prohibiting the use of contractions, starting a sentence with a conjunction, and leaving us fearful of regional dialect in narrative because of the "don't use slang" rule. Yes, by all means, let's dig out the manuals of style, and see how many shit best-sellers are on the New York Times.

I have to ask where you're getting your information on these matters.

I have to ask you the same thing. Not to sound dickish, but you're what, twenty... twenty-two? No doubt college, and getting good grades in English. But have you actually studied writing, have you learned why what worked a hundred and eighty years ago, doesn't work today? Or are you some kid that has a basic knowledge of the craft, and has simply let that cloud your perception of differential writing techniques as opposed to just plain bad mistakes.

I'm also a bit curious to know why those relatively small issues, if they're even present, are enough to render you unable to force your way through the text, but given the tone of your comment I'm not optimistic I'd get very much in the way of a civil response.

I thought the story was solid. I never said it was a bad story, and while I may actually think that it deserves a spot in the feature box, or not, I found the mistakes enough to make a huge gap in the aesthetic distance of the story. I was all too aware that this was a story with "werdz", and I couldn't comfortably settle in on the narrative.

Now if you'll excuse me; I'm going to go buy a pack of cigarettes,—I'm running low—and a giant picture of E.B. White and William Strunk, so I can throw darts at it. The darts are for E.B. and Bill, not the cigarettes; I'll smoke those.

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I could not read this, as I was too distracted by the double spacing, the inconsistent usage of emphasis; quotes one place, and italics another...

I thought the story was solid. I never said it was a bad story, and while I may actually think that it deserves a spot in the feature box, or not,

So... if I'm following this correctly, you couldn't read the story because the errors were too distracting, but you also thought the story was solid and possibly deserving of a spot on the featured box.

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what i really want to know about is if vinyl has a very wubly dishwasher

1980861
Sounds contradicting doesn't it? There are two methods of reading for me, total immersion; where I get lost in the narrative, and just plain reading where I have to do so at an arms length. I meant the former.

And as for feature box... I said, "...deserves a spot in the feature box, or not, ..."

I'm not trying to make a bigger issue out of this than it already is, which it really isn't. But I noticed that your story was on the feature box; I clicked; I read; and I felt that your editor didn't do a good job. Which was disappointing, because I enjoy reading stories that have a lot of time and attention put to them. When I noticed that you credited your editor, I was like, "Oh boy! This is going to be a fantastic read!" And when I got to the second paragraph I hit wall after wall of aesthetic killing things that I felt could have been minimized. Enough that I couldn't really get into the story.

The language is good, the dialogue is good, the paragraphs are not all over the place, with multiple thought processes going on in them. The characters are clearly defined, but you have to understand that the things I felt deprived me of experiencing a satisfactory read were both jarring and annoying. This doesn't not in and of itself make a bad story. It just makes for an untrustworthy editorial process.

Were the single quotes consistent, and italics consistent, and the things I found faulty kept consistent, then you could sit back, and rest on the omnipotent "it's style" and I wouldn't have said a damn thing. Understand this clearly. If I point out something that I don't like, it's opinion. If I say, "I didn't like the portrayal of such-and-such character." It's a personal opinion. If I cite punctuation and grammar rules, it's more to the point. But none of that is me actually saying, I hate this story. You will know if I say it, because I will say it to you.

Now. I'm done defending my remarks, and comments. If you choose to disregard what I've said; more power to you. Live and let live, and I'm moving on. If anyone wants to drag this out further, we can do so, outside of this comment section, where I'd much rather you get comments of praise, and adoration from your readers, than the remarks and back-and-forth antics of a renegade writer like myself. All stories deserve their praise, and I am sure you are grateful for all the ones you've gotten thus far.

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Sounds contradicting doesn't it?

Yeah, maybe you should work on that. Makes discussions a lot clearer, you know? :twilightsmile:

And as for feature box... I said, "...deserves a spot in the feature box, or not, ..."

Which is why I wrote "and possibly deserving of a spot on the featured box." Don't correct a correct statement.

Look, honestly, the things you're pointing to as hard and fast grammar rules I see as style issues. If you were going to point to something like a misspelling or a run-on sentence or improper comma usage, or... you know, something that actually hinders the coherence of the story, I'd be all ears. But the things you're pointing out I really just don't care about. So... yeah, I guess that's that, then.

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