First three chapters are being edited sometime later on. If they bug you because they're not up-to-quality with the rest of the story, feel free to skim them. Chapter 3 is the worst offender.
Rainbow Dash just wanted to go home. The weather was grim, sure, but she had to get home. Staying at Twilight Sparkle's library wouldn't cut it for her. Besides, she was too busy sorting out things. However, things take a drastic turn for the worse when she finds that going through the weather was beyond what she wanted. Even worse, she's now stuck with someone who may either be the pinnacle of her death, or her last and best hope of survival...
Aeron
New Art by: dreamingnoctis - dA
Old Art by: Eldorado - dA
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A/N: Fallout Crossover?! How original, Shadowflash! Do elaborate on such a creative idea!
Now, now, calm down. This is a twist to the original crossovers - I've yet to see one where The Lone Wanderer was evil and where Rainbow Dash is sent there, instead. I've thought about this long and hard, and it's time to do this crossover properly. Let's get to business, and I hope you enjoy. Love you all<3
>Inb4 rage at another Fallout/MLP Fanfiction.
Now, before you all rage, please read the content and actually give me some critique of some sort. I don't want to see comments like these:
"Oh, another Fallout fic? Downvote.
"
I'll immediately remove those. So, don't bother. I want some actual feedback, not some guy wanting to vent anger upon a repeated idea. Unoriginal story idea? Yes. Unoriginal premise? No. So, please read before saying anything.
>Inb4 people call me a whiny bitch for this.
Also, I claim first. My fic, my rules.
I think I never seen a RD in fallout story so yea, good luck.
2011085 Oh look, it's finally fucking here. Props to you on putting in RD instead of Twilight.
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Thanks. XD
2032567 Also, I made a legit question:
"Why doesn't anyone put Pinkie in? Why is it always Twilight?"
Le Idiot answers: "Well, ya see, Twilight is the only one who can use weapons because of her horn, and Rarity would freak out because of how dirty it is."
Huh...this is pretty good!
The paragraph structure itself is a bit unconventional, but is easy to adapt to.
Good job on this! I can't believe you were going to scrap it.
Hope there's no Rainbow abuse or some shit.
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I don't abuse ponies.
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>Inb4 Wasteland Ideals.
I love it so much when will the next chapter
Fave before read.
I like dis
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Someone dumped Pinkie in the Mojave, and I've currently got Rarity with the Lone Wanderer myself.
No human Category
2032819 Appreciate it.
Welcome to the happy, and highly dysfunctional, family of fallout crossovers.
I like it and it's nice to see an evil Wanderer who isn't running around screaming 'blood for the blood god!' while he decapitates people.
Oh and I have the oddest feeling that the Dunwich Building is going to be involved in this somehow...
Interesting. Never much liked the look of Fallout/FIM crossovers, primarily for the lack of canon characters and presence of OCs I don't care about. Particularly the former.
Hopefully Dashie'll come to understand the necessity of killing sooner rather than later since personally, I'd like it if she survived.
This....this is a TRUE crossover!!!
Still awesome!
Well. Good, good so far. Although I hate the idea of giving guns to ponies.
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Oh, how'd you know?
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I was debating whether to put a human tag on it. I'll leave it off, for now, but I'm not sure if it applies to Crossovers.
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The concept is bad, true. But, it's necessary.
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I read a story on one the official fallout forums that involved Point Lookout and the Dunwhich building involving evil rituals and one creepy mask and i recognized a few of the words
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It's good someone paid attention.
Also, a little bit of the inspiration came from your fiction.
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Oh really? Awesome!
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I just want to be honest - I enjoyed a lot of it, until you brought up the VATS/Leveling system. Really got awry. But, other than that, it reminded me a lot of my Gary Stu Fallout Character.
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Yeah I never should have brought up leveling up, a bad move on my part, that's why it's never mentioned again, ever
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That reminds me, I should catch up reading the next installment.
But, for now, bed time! Ta~Ta, fellow writer!
2033358 Hm, I may have to read that one
bailed in the middle of the courier one pls don't eat my flesh
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Nah, the Courier one got kind of silly, I'll admit that.
NUKE 'EM! Boy, get the fat man.
evil lone wanderer fic sweet ive bin looking for on for awile
2033946 Magic is best radiation
Interesting.......
I'm certainly not objecting to the material presented, but I do take some issue with some of the grammar and structuring. It seems to flip-flop between one and two spaces between paragraphs.
Also:
None of those commas were really necessary, which seems to actually be an occasional problem in the writing. It also begs the question of why Dash isn't moving. She's all about moving; that's her shtick. Even with the answer of "she's still disoriented," why is it mentioned that she doesn't move? What about the voice would urge her to fight or flee?
Wrapping up with a thought: if Jericho is a companion, that suggests an evil-inclined Lone Wanderer. Which then would suggest, at the least, a more callous individual. Aeron, however, has actually been among the more pleasant of Fallout representatives. Something to consider.
What... what the hell's with the spaces like this; ". . ."? (Dunno what to call the pauses." It's not ruining it but it's uh, a bit... annoying.
God dammit. Had the same idea for a Fallout fic, then find one already in the feature column. Dammit.
Proceed...
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Probabl the worst store I've ever reed in life.
Kill urself.
keep going!
2034840 I agee Tis is fak n g@y, go die
I do see the importance of this chapter cause I know some things about fallout that quite a few people don't.
I will read this, on account of I've never seen an RD Fallout crossover.
I only have one question before I start:
There are two types of fics where ponies get sent 'somewhere else'
1) The kind where the entire story is their time in 'the other place.' They have some adventures, develop as a character, then it ends. Maybe with a brief scene of their return. Never is there a mention of what happened in Equestria while they were gone.
This type is fine, but can often leave the reader wanting more. I feels like you spend all this time developing Rainbow's character, only to cut off before we get to see her interact with any other ponies.
2) In this type Equestria is featured in more than a minor role. Either we get to see what's happening back in Equestria while the pony has their adventures, or we get to see what happens after their return. Maybe even both.
This type can be fun, because I would imagine that Rainbow will be a very different pony after this experience, and seeing that pony trying to adjust to life in Ponyville would be a blast.
My question is, what type of fic will this one be?
I'll read it either way.
Still, I would appreciate knowing what I'm getting in to.
If you consider the answers to this question to be spoilers, feel free to PM me.
FUCK. YES. Its about damn time that we didn't get a Savior of the wastes main character. Oh please tell me he bombed the shit out of The Citidel. I did it just for Callaghans Magnum.
Great first chapter. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Also, I just noticed the Mane 6 character tag. Correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm pretty sure that answers the question I asked earlier.
I remember the Dunwich Building. Good times with the Terrible Shotgun. Also, I have the feeling that Aeron's karma meter is gonna be changing throughout this story.
This chapter was fun.
I like how you've characterized the "evil" version of the Lone Wanderer.
He's not an outright villain, and he still works for the greater good mainly. He's just not a very nice guy.
Evil wanderer is toughest wanderer because being evil in Fallout 3 isn't easy.... i'd know, just blow up Megaton immediately like a stupid idiot, then I have nowhere good to go except Tenpenny Tower which is surrounded by monsters and robots and bandits... and I die over and over and over again, then after I reach that place, it get's even better! Since I have nowhere else to go and I can't sell anything at Tenpenny Tower, I have to travel through the wastelands with no idea of what to do next since I blew up Megaton, I figure why not go back? So I get shot down by a Mr. Gutzy military version with plasma guns, then I rage quit.
OH yeah, and who the hay is Thanato's?
so now I know what raiders do on those terminals... XD i dunno clopping raiders is hilarious to me. I dunno if dash would be such a pacifist but that's just my opinion, shouldn't bug me for long since it wont take very long to learn that 90% of everything in the wasteland wants to fuck kill and eat you (in that order). cant wait to see dash being badass.
But ponies don't have feet.