Accident and Discovery
The spring had come, and with it came beautiful weather, perfect for going on a walk with a friend. Or in the case of one pink party pony, bouncing around while your two companions walked. Pinkie Pie bounced merrily around Applejack and Twilight Sparkle as they walked up a path along the river. They were heading towards the dam, where they could find a good place to enjoy a picnic lunch.
"Thanks for coming with me today, girls," Twilight told her friends as they enjoyed the late morning sun. Days like this were meant to be enjoyed, and it had taken her several years to learn that lesson. Twilight silently thanked Celestia that she had friends to enjoy it with. It was unfortunate that Rarity was busy with a fashion show up in Canterlot, and Fluttershy had some sick animals that needed her care today.
Rainbow Dash had been gone and was probably either practicing her maneuvers in hopes to make it into the Wonderbolts full time, or napping. Yeah, she was most likely napping. Even Spike was unavailable, where he had plans to spend it with the Cutie Mark Crusaders today. He seemed to have taken a liking to Babs Seed, and now that she has come by for a week, Spike would probably spend the entire time with the four fillies. Twilight giggled at the thought.
Still, Having AJ and Pinkie with her today was a blessing which she once again thanked Celestia for.
"Shucks Twi, I wouldn't have missed an opportunity to spend time with a couple friends. Y'all are my best friends," AJ smiled to her companions. "Besides, Big Mac and I have things caught up on the farm, so I need this time to take a break, lest Granny kick my flank for overworking myself again!" Twilight and Applejack had a chuckle at this. After the time when her brother had been injured, and she attempted to do the entire harvest all by herself, Granny Smith had become rather insistent that she take a break once in awhile.
Pinkie was only halfway listening to her two companion's conversation. She just happily bounced around them as the trio started their ascent up the hill. Pinkie merrily hummed to herself as they continued their journey to their chosen picnic spot. She didn’t not notice how soft the ground was along the edge of the wide path. With the recent thawing of the ground and the rains that the weather team had produced, certain spots along the edge were softer than others. It just happened to be that Pinkie Pie found one such spot. She had been bouncing along the edge of the path as she looked up to notice a familiar rainbow colored contrail blazing across the sky. "Oh look girls! Look who's up there," she pointed with her foreleg while bouncing. When her hooves touched the ground, the dirt at the edge gives away, and Pinkie tumbled down the bank towards the rocks at the river's edge, letting out a startled yell.
The world turned into a painful blur for her as she rolled down the small hill. The last thing she noticed was a large rock heading right for her face, and then one blinding, painful smack.
"Pinkie!" Twilight and Applejack yelled in unison. AJ was the quicker of the two to respond, and immediately ran to the edge to see if their pink friend was ok. She let out a gasp as Twilight ran up next to her. Pinkie Pie lay still next to a small boulder. There was a bloodstain on the large rock, and a pool of blood forming under her motionless head. The two of them scrambled down in a panic to check on her. AJ quickly moved to pick up the injured pony, but was stopped by Twilight.
"Don’t! Do not move her Applejack! You could exasperate her condition if you're not careful." Twilight carefully assessed Pinkie's injuries as best as she could. She had hit her head hard on the boulder, and Twilight saw signs of a severe head injury. Pinkie lied there twitching with her eyes rolled up inside her head.
Rainbow Dash quickly landed next to them at this point. She had been flying over when the accident happened, and wanted to make sure that everything was ok. Before she could say anything, the cyan pegasus gasped in shock at what she saw. Pinkie was one of her closest friends, and she felt an icy ball form in the pit of her stomach at the sight of her lying there.
"Oh Celestia... I'll go get help, Twilight! Stay here!" Rainbow told them as she flew off towards town. It didn’t take her long to travel the five miles to town, flying as fast as she dared this close to Ponyville. Within a few minutes, she had an ambulance chariot arriving on the scene with her. The paramedic ponies quickly got Pinkie assessed, and into the chariot for transport to Ponyville Medical.
* * * * *
Several hours later, Pinkie Pie’s closest friends sat in the Emergency Care waiting room, along with Mr. and Mrs. Cake. Spike and all four of the Cutie Mark Crusaders were there as well. The Crusaders saw the ambulance land at the hospital with RD right behind them, and Twilight and Applejack following soon behind them. Spike had been very helpful in this, having first dashed to Sugarcube Corner to get the Cakes, and then to Fluttershy's so she could be informed as well. Afterwards, he sent a hurried message to Princess Celestia asking her to find Rarity, explaining just what happened. The Princess had replied as soon as she found Rarity that the two of them would travel by chariot for Ponyville immediately. They had arrived about an hour ago. Now, Spike kept himself busy keeping four scared fillies occupied and not thinking about Pinkie Pie.
Rarity and Fluttershy were spending the waiting time talking. Twilight was conversing with the Princess, and Applejack paced the room, a concerned look upon her face. Dash was pacing back and forth as well, her thoughts a jumbled mess, angry that she could do nothing to help her friend at the moment. The Cakes sat in a corner talking quietly between each other, deeply worried for the mare who had essentially become to be a member of their family.
All their heads lifted when a unicorn dressed in green scrubs walked in. "My name is Dr. Whitehoof.” He quickly introduced himself. “I assume that you're all here concerning Miss Pie? I have some news for you. She just got out of surgery, and she is stable at the moment, though she is in a coma right now, due to the head injury she received. There are certain details which I need to discuss with those she has listed as her contact ponies." Before he could continue, a sky blue Pegasus was practically in his face asking questions.
"Is she gonna be ok Doc? When can I go in to see her?" She didn't get to ask any more before Princess Celestia gently pulled her away from him with her Magic. Rainbow struggled for a bit before reluctantly relenting.
"I'm certain you will be able to see her soon Rainbow Dash," she gently tells the frantic pony. She too was nervous on the inside, but she had to appear calm for her ponies, because they looked up to and needed her strength.
The doctor continues, "Due to certain... complications, I will need to speak with the Cakes, the Bearers of the Elements, and the Princess. If you will follow me please, we can discuss this in private in my office."
Twilight pauses for a moment, thinking of the fillies and Spike. As if reading her mind, he tells her, "Go ahead Twilight, I'll take care of the girls. You're needed in there."
"Thanks Spike," she says. She feels that he should be included, but only Pinkie's contact ponies and the Princess could attend this meeting with the doctor. There are rules and laws for a reason, and she cannot expect them to be violated for the feelings of her assistant.
When they are all gathered within Dr. Whitehoof's office, he shuts the door and beckons them all to find a seat. When he himself takes his seat behind his desk, he begins to explain Pinkie's condition, and what was found. "When Miss Pie was brought in, she was assessed to have a severe head injury. X-rays showed a skull fracture inches in front her left ear," he tells them indicating along his own head with his hoof. "Furthermore, there were indications of swelling and bleeding within her cranium, which was causing a buildup of pressure. We were able to go in to relieve the pressure, and repair what we were able to. As of now, Miss Pie is in a coma, due to the head injury. We are hopeful that she will recover from this and awaken, though how long it takes is anypony's guess. It could be tomorrow, or it could be years. It all depends on how well her body can heal itself, and also luck and fate. None of us here can perform miracles, so we just have to wait.
"When we took the x-rays, we discovered something that was quite interesting. There appeared to be a possible growth in her forehead which had us puzzled. Specifically, it appeared to be a semi-crystalline growth known as a carbuncle." He paused for a moment for two of them, specifically, Twilight Sparkle and Princess Celestia, to digest what they have just learned. Out of the eight ponies within the room, they would be the ones who understand it's implications.
Celestia just nodded her understanding, having all along sensed that there was a difference within the pink Earth Pony. She had suspected that something like this might be the case, but had not felt it necessary to look deeper, choosing instead to simply accept that it was Pinkie Pie, and that was all the reason which was needed.
Twilight, on the other hoof, was stunned by this revelation. "How is this possible?" she asks the doctor. "A carbuncle only grows at the base of a Unicorn's..." And then, the realization dawns on her face. But how could this be possible? The rest came to realize the same, that Pinkamena Diane Pie was no ordinary Earth Pony. They too were pretty much floored by this realization, just as the purple Unicorn was.
Before the clamour of further questions could erupt, Dr. Whitehoof continues. "Yes, it appears that Miss Pie, was in fact, born a Unicorn. Right now, I have the records department going over her files trying to find answers. All that we can find so far is that she was adopted by her family as a newborn foal from Hoofington. Unfortunately, what records after the family moved here do not include the time before her coming to Ponyville. It seems that Hoofington General was greatly damaged by a fire years ago, including the total loss of their records department. It seems that there is some faint scarring on her forehead indicating that the horn had been removed surgically for some reason. In order to find out more, somepony will have to go to Hoofington to investigate. Has word gotten to her family in Hoofington?" he asks.
"Yes. Princess Luna personally delivered the message. She is with Pinkie Pie's family right now, and they await word on her condition. They can be here within an hour," she tells him.
"I think that would be for the best, Princess. That way, we can find out from them just what happened." He did not want to mention the other reason they needed to come. They needed to keep hope, for Miss Pie's sake.
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Shit, Pinkie was orginally a unicorn? Damn, never read a story like this before, and do I spot some Pinkie Dash? My third favortie pairing
Do I also sense some Spilight? Babs/Spike huh? Shit, that's new
Wow...I'm 100% down for this story, I'm really enjoying it, and Celestia may be a Princess and Goddess but even a God can't do everything, right
Poor Pinkie
well this is interested...I mean...PP in a coma, Her being a unicorn which explains things...You know what...I'll read more of it. Interested. (YOU WRITE BETTER THAN ME!) Sorry, but I like the how descriptive you went with the story. Helps paint a scene for the reader to understand and where do you get all these medical term!
I think you meant exacerbate. I doubt Twilight meant that she'd annoy it
"Pinkie lied there twitching with"
I think you mean lay there, Pinkie's unlikely to have lied since she's unconscious.
Ah, so you read Aegis Sheild's blog about potential ideas, eh? Well this was one of the ideas he said people could "steal" that sounded like it had potential. Good work and good luck.
Good to see this came to fruition. Good luck!
Well, I notice that you seem to fluctuate between present tense and past tense in your narrative.
You don't wanna do that, it confuses the reader most of the time, and I was indeed confused at a point
Also, some of your word choices seemed... Odd. Exasperate isn't something I would use to describe an action. It sounds off, and I don't think that exasperate even means what you mean for it to mean.
These things aside, I liked it
Well Pinkie we finally figured out how you get your pinky sense.
Is it parasprite dust or ahuizotl tails?
No it's a tumor.
You mean like a magical party tumor?
No a malignant tumor, the base of which is lodged in your forehead.
Oh......Like a happy special-
You're going to die.
"could exasperate her ciondition"
exacerbate
Also a few it's-s when they should have been its-s.
Still, interesting concept.
Is it just me, or does the tense change halfway through?
Great idea. Though the execution leaves a bit to be desired. Your tenses are all over the place, and there's some awkward phrasing. I would recommend a proofreader. (It's what I always recommend. Even great writers need someone to look over their work for mistakes
)
I get the feeling Pinkie's adoptive family ordered the surgery.
Well, except Princess Celestia, who's a godlike alicorn... and Rainbow Dash, who made the impossible happen... XD
The writing is a little rough in places, but this is an interesting story. Good work :)
You could exasperate her condition if you're not careful."
Exacerbate, even. Pinkie Pie is not exasperated, she exasperates.
Spike x babs seed .....
.....
you have my attention.
exacerbate, not exasperate. (shoulda just said 'make her condition worse.' don't use a five dollar word where a two bit phrase will work better.)
Also, considering these ponies have been whacked in the head with flower pots, trees, and anvils.... maybe you should've used a more serious accident than a slip and fall....
Haven't been on in over a week and what do I find when I come back?
Only one of my favorite fans becoming a featured author!!
I knew you had it in you!!
Good story and pretty well written, but I've noticed a few things wrong with this section.
A. Not to sound rude, but do you know what a vague sentence is? Where you can't quite tell who is doing what because of pronoun usage? That kind of happens in the third sentence. Revised: 'She didn't get to ask any more before Princess Celestia gently pulled the antsy cerulean pony away from the medical worker with her magic. Rainbow struggled for a bit before reluctantly relenting.'
B. Just my opinion, but 'magic' shouldn't be capitalized.
C. As mentioned before by another person, the tense seems to change halfway through.
This is great so far! The only thing bothering me is that the doctor seems to exist in the present tense while everypony else exists in the past tense. Personally, present tense irks me a bit, but the only real problem is in the random dance between the two tenses. Other than that, this is great.