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General Soarin


Welcome to the crazy house of Soarin'! While I don't necessarily have interest in the ponies anymore, I do still dream of writing decent fics.

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The Equestrian Intelligence Agency, or EIA for short. One of the most well known governmental organizations thorough Equestria, the EIA was formed by Princess Celestia after the defeat of Nightmare Moon, and specializes in espionage and dealing with high stakes situations.
When several of the Bearers of Harmony mysteriously disappear from their houses, Princes Celestia fears that something sinister is brewing, and orders the EIA to find out what happened to the Bearers, and put an end to any evil plans that might threaten Equestria. Will the Agency be able to find our missing heroes? Or will the entire world of Equestria be thrown into darkness? You'll just have to read the story to find out.

Cover Image is by the DeviantArt user pyrestriker
I will only take it down if Pyre wants it down.

This story is cowritten by: spitfire101
All chapters labeled with a J are written by him. Every other chapter is written by me.

Editor: Mitsubishi Colt

This is my first ever fanfic on this site! Yay! :twilightsmile: I am going to ask that you please drop a review in the comments as you read the story so that I can improve the story as I go along! Anyway, I do hope that you enjoy the story, and I'll see you soon!
Bramble

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Hello mares and gentlestallions, and welcome to The Equestrian Intelligence Agency. You have probably been drawn here by the fact that I am rewriting this story, making it better using the skills that I have aquired over the past couple of months. I hope you enjoy the fruits of my labor, and I will see YOU. In the near future. Bye!
General Soarin' (9/22/13)

Chapters (20)
Comments ( 30 )
Comment posted by spitfire101 deleted Feb 4th, 2013

They may/may not flow as easily because in Norway we dont talk or write English ;-)
From the Norwegian guy.:-D

2072564 Glad to see that you're on the site now, I'll fix that.

You know what you have here? what you have here is a brilliant story. Well done my good sir and friend

so in this universe nearly all the ponies are agents of celestia and Spitfire gets into a frenzy over some sweets, :eeyup:

btw I only got the Assassin's creed reference

2112836 Well, not every pony are agents of Celestia, but there are a lot. As for the whole sweets deal, that was a tiny thing that I put in to put a little comedy into the story before things take a turn for the worse. Also, that's good that you found at least one reference! :twilightsmile: The other one was a reference to the first actual level in Halo 3 (Where it is fully playable): Sierra 117 Not truly a reference, but oh well

Well...nice story as of now. There is a whole lot of tension on all fronts combined with little to no explanation. Why did Shining Armor die? Ah well, let's see how your story will continue.
Rainbow Dash as an agent, hmm? Seems a bit high profile if you ask me...:rainbowhuh:

2125589 Thanks for your input, I can see what you mean. I will most likely have a chapter that explains a lot in the near future, so hang tight! And about Rainbow, her personality might change as the story progresses, I have not really worked with her yet. Spitfire101, my coauthor (I need to add that to the description) wrote the chapter that I felt portrays Rainbow's in-story personality the most so far (Chapter 2), so I will have to discuss her in-story personality with him. Wrapping this up, thanks for the criticism , it should help me improve the story's quality! :twilightsmile:

Foooormattting!

Ye GODS, the formatting! :raritydespair:

Well,let's make a count here:
Creepy theory of the elements of harmony? Check.
Some explanation finally coming? Check.
A sneaky way of reviewing the 'missing' data? Check.

Now there is one question. Why didn't Dash think of this earlier? Was this some sort of last option she didn't want to consider? Also, being one of the top agents she still didn't knew of Spitfire being in the same agency as herself?

And I wouldn't worry about Vinyl Scratch - she has her bass canon :trollestia: Also there is Fluttershys stare and all her loyal animal friends...maybe even some competent agents around to protect the pegasus. I think Fluttershy IS the safest of all of them, if you think about it.

2135340 Yes, explanation is coming! Now, about Rainbow, I have a shaky explanation for that since I didn't think it out. My explanation is she completely forgot about it until Spitfire mentioned the database being locked. As for Spitfire, she's part of the Agency's Special Operations Division, which is one of the most secretive parts of the organization. The SOD is mainly responsible for tracking and dispatching extremely dangerous enemies to the state, and guarding key ponies of interest.. Spitfire is part of the Director's security detail, which is so secretive that nopony outside the Director's inner circle knows who guards the director. So Rainbow doesn't know about Spitfire being an agent because she doesn't have the clearance necessary to know who's part of the Director's security detail. I hope I've cleared a thing or two up for you, but you can always ask if anything is still confusing to you! :twilightsmile:

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Okay, let's answer on that one before I add something here that belongs to pirvate messages.
Dash can forget some things, that much is true (although, has anypony forgotten something in canon? Anything they can remember? *goes off into thinking mode*). I also believe of a special group inside a special group. Although Dash should at least know ABOUT it, seeing as she is one of the best agents in the field. (That leads to another question: Are there retired agents? I kinda got the image of a badass Granny Smith in my mind right now - complete with all her craziness :pinkiehappy:)
But I digress, in agencies those problems with the clearences are often the reasons stuff doesn't work there.
So yes, you cleared up a few things and as you've read I already put a suggestion in there. (Nothing serious, I just have quite the whacky imagination sometimes) :facehoof:

Comment posted by Mitsubishi Colt deleted Mar 3rd, 2013

I Should leava a comment and now i have. BTW good work. As always.

Hey Celestia next time you do something secretive and evil don't make a f:yay:king document about it!....Ya twat!

and despite what Mat- I mean Mitsubishi says,

Despite what I say? You know, I was tempted to look through the story to fit her character better into it but if you already tell the readers that, then I won't. Happy?

how can 'several' element bearers go missing when there is only six in total?:rainbowderp:

2430751 Out of the six Element Bearers, 4 went missing. I would classify that as "Several", but some people might disagree. Unless of course your comment is somehow referring to something completely different, and I'm just interpreting it wrong.

EIA you say. Great minds think alike. I used that acronime in my story

2482414 Hmm...interesting. I might just go check it out....:trixieshiftleft:

y dose so many people have creepy avatar?? :rainbowderp: (Funinigthmare and Bramblestar4427)

So that is it for now :raritydespair: I Hope for more.

Very similar ending to Braveheart

This is interesting.

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