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Appleloosan Psychiatrist
dude i'm so good at nfts they used to call me "the blockchain ballerina"
Appleloosan Psychiatrist
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Nice work on this, Apple-Girl.
Will read these +22000 words woth gusto.
For now, a faithful fave+upvote combo.
Mah OTP.
me gusta
(Joke) Alt. Title: The Sweet Aches Polka
Hey, I did a redub of this user once.
hawt
I do like me some wincest every once in a while. This story is so big though, I won't be able to fit it all in my mouth at once!
All of mah yes.
1943617 That sounded really wrong.
Did you do that on purpose?
1944516 Do I really need to answer that question?
Ouch. You know, this might be a bit easier to read if you broke it into chapters. 22k words without clean breaks makes it a bit intimidating.
Great read despite all the flubs you'll probably get around to cleaning up later. Thank ya kindly for publishing this beast of a story.
This is by far the best AppleXMac story I have ever read in my entire life...
Please... Accept my fav and my watch as a token of my gratitude for such a wonderful read.
Yours truly... NecromancerX69
Ps... Keep up the good work.
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1943581you seem to post on every story i find....nice
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WOW! That was not clop... that was erotica of the finest sort! And thats WAY better than CLOP!!!
I wish I could triple-fav this one,
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It seems nobody likes this (Joke) Alt. Title. If you'll let me try again, I have an alternative...
(Joke) Alt. Title: (Funky) Apple Sex Farm
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what is wrong with you
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I don't like to think about what's wrong with me since I already know it. I also don't like to think about what's wrong with everybody since I already know that as well.
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Oh my, yes.
OH
THAT
WAS
AWESOME:
... ...
MY
... ...
GOD
I have no words man. I just can't describe how you took a clopfic such as this and made it so enjoyable to read. I am just blown away...
This may be a new favorite for me, not just on the list, but up there in my group of stories that go above and beyond.
Love the writing style
Love the story
Great work
So hot! So romantic! The forbidden lust! Bravo! Thumbs up!
I fucking support this!!!!!
I have one word: Respect. Absolute respect for a story so masterfully crafted, handling the topic of incest with care and consideration and thought. The first thing I loved is that despite the taboo topic the characters remained remarkably in character (at least to me.) The other part I loved was the fact that they resisted it every step of the way. Too many stories don't handle this correctly and the characters involved are simply too willing to commence in this horrible and immoral act. That's where this story excels leaps and bounds. You played Big Mac's confession SO WELL! Just the fact that he felt sick and like he should run away, the fact that he KNEW it was wrong and it tormented him - that alone could seal this story. But then you handled Applejack's rebuttal wonderfully as well. It made reading this worthwhile and didn't make me want to vomit as bad. I truly became attached to their struggles to avoid it, but falling pray to justifications, overwhelming urges, unhelpful situational stress, and basically going down a slippery slope. So while I don't condone incest in real life, I must admit that this story is amazingly thought out, well played, and classy despite it's nature. The only real gripe I have with it is that there were far to many typos and sentence errors, but again this is turned back by the brilliance of the work involved and the scope that was achieved. Simply put, all you need is a good proof reader or two to become a legend. Cheers!
Lets me just say. I love taboo fics. Especially twi with her brother. My favorite used to be a threesome between her. Shining and cadance. But this? This is just on a whole different level. You took everything that makes a story great and put it here. To put it simply. Best clopfic ive ever read. You, sir, are fucking awesome
This was an amazing fic, and I'm probably going to need a day or two to sort it out before giving a proper opinion on the whole thing, but I have to make one complaint right here, right now, and it relates to the morality of the characters - specifically, Big Mac.
He was ready to kill a pony for the "crime" of trying to have sex with Applejack while she was in heat. Now, I see two distinct ways of interpreting this:
1. Applejack was sufficiently consenting to being rutted by those two stallions, in which case Big Macintosh committed grievous assault on an innocent (if very assholish) pony. That's very bad.
2. Applejack, being in heat, was unable to properly consent to sex, in which case Big Mac saved her from being raped by those two stallions, which at first glance, is downright heroic. However, it also means she was unable to properly consent to sex with him, which means that Big Macintosh raped his sister. That is very, very bad.
I'm sorry, but I don't see any way around this. Either Big Mac committed unjustified assault, or he committed rape.
And my interpretation is leaning toward the latter...
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I often find that it's my little pony erotic fanfiction that truly posits the difficult moral questions.
By god, sir, you have done it
! You have created the greatest erotic fanfiction ever to be conceived by any brony
! I applaud you for the time, effort, and dedication you put into this truly one-of-a-kind masterpiece
! Bronies with a mind of your caliber are very rare these days, so you should be very proud of your work
. I hope you will produce more pieces like this one from you in the future
. I do have one question, though: now that Big Macintosh, uh, *ahem*, deposited his seed into Applejack's fertile womb, wouldn't this mean that Applejack is... pregnant
? At this point in time, the chances of that happening are astronomically high, so I assume she is. If so, I both support and encourage you to create a sequel to this story. I am eager to know how their lives would unfold if they had a little foal together
. If you take my advice and you need help with any part(s) of the tale, please don't hesitate to contact me. Like I stated in my bio, I am more than willing to lend my fellow bronies and pegasisters assistance with anything they need. Until then, sir, I will appeciate the work you have done in creating this story. Your efforts were not in vain
.
With highest regards, Cavalryunit001
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"I have no idea!"
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Okay, I've had some time to think about it.
Firstly, to get it out of the way, the writing in this stunning; the depth of vocabulary and the way the narrative is woven is so damn good that it puts anything I've ever made to shame. The story builds slowly, almost painfully so, and the effect is perfect, leaving the reader frustrated for more, reflecting the states of the characters. The characters' emotions are presented very well, and it's impossible not to feel their internal conflict. As a piece of writing, it's a true gem.
However, after ruminating on it, I have to say I don't like what happens in the story; this is not a happy tale. It's actually quite dark and sad. For almost the entire story, Applejack and Big Mac resist and fight against their desires; opportunity after opportunity is rejected in order to uphold some moral ideal (one I don't agree with, but that is their choice). Whenever their minds are relatively clear, they decide not to give in. Finally, when their base desires are at their highest, when their minds are the most clouded, that is when they do the thing they had committed, time and again, not to do.
That's horrible.
This is not the right way to make decisions, nor is it the way to build a relationship. I have no issue with incest (or pretty much any sexual behaviour) when proper consent is involved, but I found it lacking here. In their final scene Applejack might as well have been drugged, while Mac isn't thinking all that clearly either. Maybe the two will regret it later; maybe they won't, but what happened between them was wrong. It was rape.
I'm also wondering about what happened to the unicorn and pegasus stallions. They're assholes, sure, but were they really doing anything that Big Mac didn't ultimately do? Banging a perfectly willing mare in heat? I wonder what Equestrian law has to say about this. Were they victims or perpetrators, or both?
In summary: Excellent story, excellently written, but it's a tragic one if one looks just under the surface. I'm curious, dear author, do you consider this story to have a true "happy" ending? If so, I must disagree, but kudos anyway on an awesome piece of writing.
ETA: There are quite a few grammar/spelling errors, which seem to be caused by typos rather than ignorance of English mechanics. Does the author mind corrections? I have a few I can send in a PM.
Awesome story. The typos, however, detract from it.
Firstly, wow. Way to hook the reader with conflict, in this case the internal struggle of the lust towards the other sibling, and the societal taboo of incest. I also really appreciate how just a little each time, the push the envelope a little farther, choosing to enter the territory of the taboo a little deeper than before, and even then, the moral/ ethical/ societal struggle to resist the temptations of lust. The conflict of reason and instinct or morality and immorality that everyone can relate to on some level or degree. Then introducing the heat/ mating season into the story, where animalistic desire or lust/ instinct overwhelms morality and/ reason. It's something which I really appreciate in this story.
Then there is the whole reader engagement due to a controversial issue or conflict. In this case the taboo of incest. This is what sets literature from amateurish prose. Hooking the reader, as we accompany the characters as the deal with aforementioned issue or conflict. We may not necessarily agree with the decisions of the character, it's so easy to judge them, but the provocation underlying it is would we have reacted differently given the same circumstances? Maybe or maybe not.
Also, another thing I enjoyed were the verbose opulence of language to be found in the story. I even had to go to the dictionary, as there were some words I either didn't know, or were unfamiliar with. Bravo by the way. The rich and varied word choice was another aspect which helped add to the story. The saying is that a "picture is worth a thousand words" but the storyteller/ author's job is to paint that picture with words, and this was pulled off magnificently.
I wasn't really looking for grammatical errors or anything, and unless the story has been re-edited since any errors were mentioned, I didn't notice anything too glaring. At least, not enough to bother me and distract my attention away from the story.
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>Then introducing the heat/ mating season into the story, where animalistic desire or lust/ instinct overwhelms morality and/ reason. It's something which I really appreciate in this story.
I don't want to sound too pompous here, but thank you for "getting" why I ended this fic like I did.
Appreciate the kind words.
You're a champ.
Usually not much for incest fics, but god-dammit you made me enjoy it. Exceptional writing such as detail, grammar, and especially vocabulary.
Now that I have an account (and remembers that this fic exists), I can finally give a comment or two.
One of the better, if not among the best of fics on the site. Writing is near flawless, it has very neat depictions of relationships and the flaws that can crop up within them as one tries to achieve an "ideal self" instead of what one really wants, and , well, it's hot.
There are a few wobbly moments, like the time they are almost found out, but it actually works out in the end and doesn't detract from the overall story, and instead adds to its charm. You've done some good work here, and I hope to see more from you in the future, if you have the time. But don't push yourself too hard to please us, we are after all just fans.
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thanks for the kind words
if you wanna see what I'm going to write in the future why aren't you following me
that's literally the purpose of the follow feature
2222477 There's a follow feature!?
A masterpiece. While not my favorite subject, it was very, very well written.
waow! when i read this, and applejack came into heat, and was about to get raped, i got so sad, i ACTUALLY felt sick! and i had to leave the room after a while! but the nauseousness had gone away, mostly! but my head was STILL weird! like it felt FULL, like if you have been WORKING on something for a LONG while, and you're head is tired, and FULL, but STILL felt EMPTY! and it was hard to focus on stuff, and i couldn't CONCENTRATE! and i was dizzy and it took longer for my eye' to FOCUS on stuff! but all that might be because i had been looking at a WHITE screen and READING, a lot, and when i weren't READING, i was WRITING at my OWN story! BUT!!!!1 the NAUSEA'S feeling, went away, at least MOST of it, when i found out that she didn't get RAPED! at least no PENETRATION! so that was some POWERFUL READIN, partner! GOOD JOB!!! but could you make one, WITHOUT the horrible stuff, like pony's taking ADVANTAGE of her when she was in heat? just ROMANCE and stuff? and if you already HAVE then what's it call'd? OH, i almost forgot! KEEP IT UP!!! YOU'RE A PRO! and if it weren't such a SENSITIVE subject (my little pony brother sister incest) then you could have sold BOOK'S! well, you still CAN, but i don't know what PUBLISHER would publish THAT kinda stuff! EXCEPT for in JAPAN, or somewhere! they do EVERYTHING, YOU CAN IMAGINE, AND A LOT MORE!
Dude! Dude! Dude!!
What the hell is this!? This is viagra made words!
I can't imagine anyone reading this and keeping a calm mind.
Sorry, but I need to call someone now!
Thanks for this fic.
This story came out very well. It's a massive work, but surprisingly it never feels stretched out or sluggish. I did come away from this wondering why you didn't break this up into chapters though. There are places in the story where you could have made into chapters. I found myself unable to read the whole thing in one day, but I was eager to read it to the end. All the actions progress steadily, and in a way that feels believable. It was interesting to see how you depicted AJ in heat, and I found it was actually was believable. AJ is shown in the show to be all about honesty, so seeing you write her to be so honest about her needs that she comes off as a little slutty, it was actually empowering, but not something I realized until later. And that makes the conflict in the story, AJ and Mac wanting to be together, really endearing. AJ can't lie about what she wants to do with her brother and how she feels towards him, so the steady progression from hoof job to full sex, though it takes a long time, makes sense and works for AJ's character. Even the dirty talk felt right in this story.
So yeah, this came out very well, (and super hot). You do a good job of writing AJ
I'd still like to know why you didn't make this into chapters though.
Gotta admit, this story is one of the better that I've read for clop.
The pacing in the story, the conflictual mindset in which they feel that they need it, but they can't do it, but they want it, but they can't risk it. I was literally mind-boggled while reading this story.
((And while I did have a boner throughout most of the story, I didn't act on it.))
The way they treated each other, the way that they both knew they shouldn't be doing this, but they both needed it so badly yet nopony else would be good enough, that just makes this all the better. While I'm not really one for Applecest, this story really hooked me in the stomach.
While I wanted to read it, I, at the same time as the characters, felt that this wasn't really a good thing to do. 'this' being sex.
I had been thinking what Applejack was thinking. In the back of my mind, I wanted it to happen, but I also didn't want it to happen because that would just ruin the pace, and just.. well... I somewhat wanted it to happen earlier, but I had the same concerns as them, you could say. I didn't really want the story, or rather, let me rephrase this...
I didn't want the events to take place when they really didn't need to. The way you paced the sexual moments, the delay you made for anything real to happen truly set the marker for me that this was one really good story. I liked the pacing, that you already know.
While I feel the spacing was a little limited and the text was a bit scrunched up at times, I didn't really mind. Maybe it's just me, I just can't really focus on a big huge line of text, that much you can probably tell by the spacing on my comment.
I feel like I have something else to say, but I just can't place it right now.
Either way, great story, great pacing and great concept execution!
the number of grammar errors were vast and plentiful, more so than i can actually point out without re-reading and making a list while doing so. but man was this clop awesome. took me three days to complete, but freaking awesome. good for you.
DAMN.....Now THIS is what you call a passionate fic, sure even though she was in heat she could no longer over come her urge, wait to go Big Mac, you get your sister's love, this was very seriously well written, Gods....this was perfectly well written. You did so bucking I think this should seriously be featured...gods, please, teach me how you do it. How you write in such an amazing way. I love this pairing and you just made my entire day.....damn, this was the best Applemac I have ever read in my entire life, love every second of it. A few errors but they are minor..I give this a 100/10, seriously it very much deserves it. Thank you...just, thank you