• Member Since 23rd Oct, 2012
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The Princess Rarity


Quirky teenage girl who writes about cartoons & has an obsession with sparkly things & cute dorks. Goes through life following by Dr. Seuss's wise words; "You have to be odd to be number one."

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A young Vinyl Scratch and Octavia cause chaos at a fashion show.

Need I say more?

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HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGG!!!! So... unbearably... cute!

Surrounded by her were racks full of accessories and clothing; that put the ones backstage at the fashion show to shame

Surrounding* by. Get rid of the semi-colon.
(There may have been a few more things but I am working from my phone so I can't point many out)

It was cute. It was simlpe. Well written. Great grammar. I loved it.
Great story. Keep it up.

e. Looking completely untouched, sequins, twinkles, flashing, and who knows what else were on display to the two fillies, ready to be toyed with.

This sentence is awkward. Twinkles and flashing are adjectives but seem to be being used a nouns. Unless it is some fashion thingy. And you should put something before sequins, like clothing with or accessories covered in. Something to help it read a bit smoother.

D'awwww i pictured the entire thing in my mind.
I might be dead.
Anyway its short and sugary sweet, just like candy. :raritywink:
And i loved every part of it.

Really glad I decidd to read this, it was really adorable:rainbowkiss:

Now this was a great story, I very much enjoyed it. Photo is a bitch but those two fillies seriously can't keep out of trouble:rainbowlaugh: This is why I love Vinyl so much, she's so wild and untamed that it's easy to put her in almost anything and do great with it:yay: Tasvi's a bit harder but not impossible, all in all a 9/10, I loved every second:twilightsmile:

I liked how you told where they got their accessories.

2068525 I was hoping someone would catch that! :rainbowlaugh:
(Also, I absolutely love your username! Both funny and adorable!)

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I saw a picture of Derpy talking to a muffin and she said "Muffin you so crazy." And my Username was born:derpytongue2: Also this story was adorable:twilightsmile:

2068563.... *explodes at how adorable that would be*
Glad you thought that of my somewhat ridiculous story. :pinkiehappy:

I think it is charming. The mischief of Vinyl is fun. It also explains their fassion choices for later in life.

SO. MUCH. DAWWWWWWWWW

this reminds me of me and cousin when we were kids. Also I added it to my favorites on my User Page so maybe some more people will check out this cute fic

2113513 Awww, thank you for that, how kind of you! :heart:

:moustache: Cuteness at critical levels. WARNING: CUTENESS AT CRITICAL LEVELS Ah god damn you, you got Safety Dance stuck in my head :flutterrage:

2116055 We can dance if we want to~~~ :rainbowlaugh:

:heart:The cuteness is so adorably D'AWWW inducing:heart:

I'M MELTING I'M MELTING FROM THE CUTENESS OHHHH WHAT A WORLD!!!!

Now this is why I like Fimfiction. By placing the stories that get over 500 thumbs about once or twice every two pages I have to shift through a bunch of........well I hate to call any story bad really but there are admittedly a few that deserve far worse descriptions. However, by doing so I have found many stories that deserve more attention then they have received, this is one of them.

Cute and fluffy, with a good line for the ending.

*grins* nothing wrong with silly fluffy stuff n_n

I find myself forced to add this one as well, and it's all your fault. :raritywink:
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(Bonus points for '80s music.)

2116248 We can leave your friends behind,
Cos your friends don't dance,
And if they won't dance,
Well they're no friends of mine...

By the way, love this story. You get a like and a fave from me!

Also, NO 80's night is complete without the Safety Dance.

"Cuteness of fillies and random stuff", indeed. :raritywink:

A nice little story. I kept expecting something of importance to happen... But it seems not every story needs something like that to be good.

Also, Photo Finish is Vinyl's mom? I'll definitely take that into consideration at my next monthly headcanon meeting.

D'awww, Vinyl and Octavia... Best background ponies EVER! :D

We can DANCE! :pinkiehappy: Liked it! The only bad thing is that you didn't describe Octavia's dad at all, and you put "Dad" in Vinyl's dialogue accidentally in that section.

I couldn't help but :rainbowlaugh: the entire time I was reading this! :heart:ed this soooo much!

The cuteness... it makes water come to my eyes.
As you said, it was adorably cute, and random.:derpytongue2:

Sequel is needed

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I got a emergency cuteness overload kit here if you need it

2068114
True also I've read my roommate is a vampire and it has photo as vinyl's mom but vinyl has pink poofy hair that she gets styled like it is

10128764
Cool. Damn this was years ago lol.

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Oh my lol I just saw

10128890
Yeah lol. It's all good. Not one for vampires anymore though. But that's just me.

10128894
Cool also nice PFP

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