After a journey to get a plant for Princess Celestia's herbal studies the friendship between Rainbow Dash and Applejack becomes uncomfortable for Rainbow. Applejack doesn't know why Rainbow is acting weird but she can tell there is something wrong.
She tries to talk to her friend but she seems not willing to explain herself.
What is wrong with Rainbow and why is she afraid to confront AJ about it?
Can Twilight help Rainbow talk to AJ about what ever it is or will she just keep her secrets, forever...
Romance story between Rainbow Dash and Applejack
It's buttsecks, isn't it?
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haha maaybe
1938662 Tip, no italics, only if it is thoughts or something like this:
"Ugh," Rainbow Dash said, while facehoofing herself at the same time, "how stupid can I get?"
The italics really bummed me out, I really would recommend getting rid of it. My eyes hurt just looking at them. I should dislike, however I see a bright future for you, I will continue helping after the italics are
Forever aloneForgottenGone.i really want to read the rest of the storie. it's just so good!
you have my attention
good story
Pre-mature like, because it looks like it could be high quality, but I'll need to read it to find out
Protip: Go easier on the italics please.
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yea i got that from some other people as well, next chapters will be just standard text
Dear Readers,
Okay then, this goes out to all those who have this Favorited or read it in the not so far off past.
I addressed the issue some people had with the italics in the first chapter. (i.e. too much, too hard to read, annoying)
So I went back and re-edited it to have just plain text. Twas no problem at all and thanks for the feedback on that as well.
signed, DJ
Well, it was a bit intense but good chapter!
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I regards to italics I find it very effective only save them thoughts. So instead of it being
“WHAT AM I DOING?!” She thought
It would look like this
“WHAT AM I DOING?!” She thought
After a while you wont even need to indicate that the italics were thoughts, because your readers will automaticly start associating the italics with thoughts. That is just my opinion and what I do.
Now onto the chapter, I really liked it. I thought that most of the story was going to revolve around getting the plant. I was surprised that it was only used as a simple set up. Not to say that is a bad thing, don't get me wrong. I am very much looking forward to the next installment in the story.
Another good chapter. I like how you're builiging up this, keep it up!
this is the weirdest story ever, i like it
so who snores more Applejack or Rainbow dash
Awwe Rainbow Dash and Apple Jack cuddling
aww Poor Rainbow Jack
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well not sure but judging from the cartoon series i'd give my vote to Rainbow for snoring the most and loudest
keep up the great writing, I look forward to the rest of the series
Cool chapter! I wonder of somepony will ask for help to one of their friends!
Dear Readers,
It's DJ here with an update. I am still working on the story "Restless Nights" but the story has gotten better reviews than I was expecting. I have been thinking of a sequel to this story. I already have the plot figured out but not started on the actual writing yet. Tell me would you, the reader, want a sequel to this story or not.
Comment your opinions, like or dislike, I just want feedback from the people out there. Let me know your FEELS on this.
signed, DJ
Hehe...Molestam Florescunt...I see what you did there
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I noticed it myself when I researched! I laughed and thought what are the chances!
"Rainbow love isn't meant to be natural. It's something that we find, not discover. It's something we understand, we don't need to study it. Love is a common ground or certainty and uncertainty, natural and unnatural."
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My reaction while reading this sentence. ITs just beautiful. *sheds a manly tear*
2021734 Haha legit made my day
Just when she got the confidence to confess... Good job Twilight!
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Legends tell that when a Manly Tear is Shed at the time of a sensitive moment somewhere in the universe two Angels slay a Leviathan.
No but seriously I thank you for the comment. It brings me joy to know that my work can bring such feelings to people. BTW love the pic.
I...I... *sob*
Okay, I am pretty interested in this story! Please continue.
For a moment there I thought they would start to fight again and don't confess anything... I'm glad you didn't!
What an ending for a heartwarming chapter!
The pacing feels kinda awkward, and some words are missing here and there, but other then that it's a decent AppleDash story. Keep it up!
She sure is not even giving Rainbow a chance to explain.
Oh well. Me gusta this story Keep up the good work!
Rainbow staying with Applejack... Sounds promising!
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More than promising
What isnt promising about it
I like where this is going. Now the only danger is a homophobic Granny Smith
Rainbow doesn't live in Cloudsdale, she lives in a cloud house near the outskirts of Ponyville.
2076102 Sounds... like a lot of other stories, This is not a bad thing however. The final dialogue... UHHH! My eyes hurt! You may want to add some names after they finish talking. It was somewhat difficult to know who was talking at some parts
pls keep writing this i flipped out at the end because it was over pls write more
yes beautiful ending the way you phrased the pollen from earlier i totally knew something was up with it but i never guessed this very good work i cant wait to read some more from you
I really like this story, even though i kinda saw the first half of this chapter comming since i read the description.
I have to say though, even if i like the story very much i fell the ending is a little rushed and i think you could have placed the second reveal in another chapter together with possibly the apple family discussion( still i do like that you stopped before it giving dashies statement of never leaving AJ more weight)
All in all:
Really good story of my favorite ship, hope to see you write another fic.
The End? I wanted to know the reaction of the Apples!
Oh well, but it was a nice story!
yay nice job except when u type in cus it doesnt sound right as preferred to cuz
this chap coulld be turned into a mlp ep very good
I must say the & love stories are my favorite and this story has been a really great read.
Keep up the good work.
;)
want more
a Honey moon
1997133 Hmm.... Tricky one.... We have all seen RD's extreme snoring.... *cough* S3 E6 *cough*
I dont think we have seen Applejack snore.... or really sleep.... but the working characters often snore the most in series and movies and with Applejack beeing a workhorse and all... but she doesn't seem to be the snorer. So... i would guess RD. But, maybe this lil' thinking game will unfold in S4. Who knows...
What are you doing RD?
Me gusta..... no but... You got meh there...