Being famous is a lot more work than most ponies think. Finally enough is enough for Actor/Model, Jason Cider as he decides to take a break from the limelight in the quiet town of Ponyville. The only thing he didn't expect was a beautiful, red-eyed DJ living in said town. What could this mean for his life and how will his fans take the news...
Originally I was going to make this about Twilight Sparkle, but the story wanted to make a change. Hope it looks better/makes more sense. Also the story contains some social alcohol drinking and suggests possible sexually content. (Notice it's suggested... >:3)
Chapters (2)
Hello there, I was sent by the Tyro Guild, names Critic, Fictional Critic, but you already knew that, so on with the review. To start I will give my opinion of the story: Good. Moving on:
Critic: In all honesty I don't have much to say. I mean sure you might have like one or two grammar mistakes but not enough to say that it's an actual issue, and the flow and concept seem to be fairly solid and well founded. Everything looks good, what do you think Fictional?
Fictional: I don't have much either, the characters all seem to be acting according to preconceived notions and what not. Granted it does seem a bit early to say if everything will continue this smoothly but these first few chapters have me fairly hopeful.
I look forward to more and will have more to say as more is produced, thank you for the story.
People will hate me in 20 minirts
good or bad comments will be deleted (not this one and the one under it though)
"What's this?
Jason's going to finish this story
? HELL YES
!" And that's right. Starting April 18th, 2014, Jason Alexander Cider is coming back to Ponyville! WARNING!: MAY NOT BE AS GOOD AS LAST TWO CHAPTERS
-2moredaysjason