My Kingdom Come...
I found myself floating in a black void with no warmth or cold. It felt like I was just kind of floating in some water. There was a sensation of flowing movement but it was slight and seemed to compensate for each push and pull to put me right back in the same spot. It was quite odd but then again when is being dead not a little bit strange? I had no idea what was going to happen next or even if something else was going to happen. For all I knew this could just be where I was stuck from now on, although that would be a very anticlimactic afterlife to say the least. I believed that I did the right thing but I was still heartbroken over losing Twilight. Why did she try to rescue me? Why did she have to try to be the hero? I already missed her and wanted to hear her voice one last time, even if it meant listening to her lecture me on treating Spike better, I just didn’t care anymore.
In hindsight, what happened was a complete tragedy. Twilight was dead, Discord was banished to the far reaches of space never to return... and me? I was drifting through purgatory or something after sacrificing my life, and for what? To save Celestia's rear end from another disaster? I couldn’t be too mad at her though, she did what she could to try and keep her kingdom safe and happy (and honestly she did a much better job than our worlds leaders). I just wish I could have gone back in time and stopped myself from trusting that draconequus bastard. I was a fool for believing him... it was like I was too stupid to know I was selling my soul to the devil.
Why was it that I couldn’t just be happy with where I was? Why did I have to be angry at those who only wanted to be my friends? Why didn’t I just count myself lucky to be with them? Celestia was right... I was lonely but I was too stubborn to accept it. She was actually right about many things now that I thought about it. She was right about Twilight caring about me, she was right about my connection to my emotions still being intact and dying to get out... and she was right about how I refused to give into them. They were never lost, I was just holding them back with a huge wall of my personal bullcrap. It seemed that Celestia actually knew more about me than I knew about myself, and I only saw her as a careless ruler who thought the lives of those around her were unimportant due to her position. I was such a jerk to everyone...
At that moment I did something I had never really done before... I prayed. I didn’t know who I was praying to or why I resorted to it. I just felt like I had done so much wrong and I wanted a second chance to make things right that I was ready to do anything. I wanted to apologize for everything I had done. I wanted to let Pinkie know I was her friend even if I acted like I couldn’t stand to be around her. I wanted to console Fluttershy since I banished Discord, I wanted to thank Rarity for all her help and kindness because I know I didn’t show her nearly enough. I wanted to tell Rainbow Dash to keep an eye on Gilda now that I was gone. I wanted to give Applejack a few more pointers to help her on the farm since she had a family to take care of. Heck, I even wanted to say sorry for calling Spike ‘mailbox’. Most of all though... I wanted to apologize to Princess Celestia for not trusting her when I should have.
Suddenly I felt an intense pain go from my chest and quickly surge through the rest of my body. I felt myself rise a little bit and then the pain struck again. I didn’t know what it was but it was enough to blur my thoughts and make it hard to focus. The next thing I know, it feels like I’m holding my breath, I gasp for air and see a bright light with the angel from before. As my vision begins to come into focus, I squint, noticing that the angel looks very familiar.
Then it hits me, “Celestia...?”, I say noticing that my voice sounds raspy and drained of energy.
My vision comes completely into focus and I can see her smiling warmly at me, “Welcome back to the land of the living. You had us scared there for a while...” I look around and see that I’m back in the Canterlot castle recovery room, just like before when I woke up from my fight with Discord's summoned dragon. “You know you shouldn’t be so reckless, but I suppose that’s who you are deep down and I can’t change that.”
I look down and thought back to why I was so reckless in the first place, “You shouldn’t have saved me... I don’t deserve to live anymore. Not after what I did.”
Celestia stomped her foot and quickly stood, looking down at me as she said, “Silence! You did far more than what I believed was possible for anypony in your position! You not only broke yourself free from Discords hold over you, you also took it upon yourself to right your wrongs and stop him, saving all of Equestria in the process!”. Celestia took a deep breath and calmed herself before continuing, “Do you recall when you asked me if I believed in fate? Well I thought long and hard about it and I have come to an answer... I do believe in fate. I also believe that you were brought here for a reason greater than even Discord could have realized. I do not yet know of your true purpose in this world but I know your journey does not end here... there are too many that still care for you.”
“Who could possibly care about me after this?” I asked, a tone of sadness and regret clear in my words..
“Well believe it or not, everypony you have come in contact with. I wasn’t even the one to revive you... that honor belongs to Rainbow Dash. She will try to avoid the truth and say she was merely trying to desecrate your body, but she shocked you with a thunder cloud twice and that is what kept you alive. All five of the other elements were there at your side and they all had tears in their eyes. I felt that they were needed but by the time I informed them on what happened and brought to the citadel of chaos... the battle was already over.”
“Yes... but at what cost? Was the life I took really justified? Am I really worthy to live after that?” I asked looking at her, hoping that she could somehow help me see some light (since she was the one who rose the sun and all).
She looked at me with deep confusion. “I thought you were aware that Discord was still alive.”
Was she serious? Twilight was dead and she was pulling the whole clueless routine?! She decided to do this now?! “I WASN’T TALKING ABOUT THAT BASTARD!” I snapped, furious at her disrespect of her dead student.
Her eyes widened slightly in what appeared to be more confusion with a hint of fear. “Then who are you speaking of?!”
“You know damn well who! I’m talking about-”
I was interrupted at that moment by an opening door. The one who walked through it blew my mind. At first I thought I was hallucinating. It just didn’t seem possible.
“I’m back with the tea, I hope you like Earl Gre-” She looked at me and I looked back at her. The platter holding the tea fell, but was quickly caught by Celestia's magic. we just sat there for a moment, staring at each other as if we would vanish if we were to look away for even a second.
“Twilight?!” I shouted in total shock.
“You’re awake?!”, she shouted back.
“You’re ALIVE!?!”
I looked at Celestia and gestured towards Twilight as if to ask ‘Are you seeing this?’. She nodded and asked a question of her own, “What made you think she was dead?”
“What do you mean ‘what made me think she was dead’?! I checked her pulse with my own...” I looked at my hoof and immediately felt like an idiot for not realizing it before. I wouldn’t be able to feel anyones pulse through my hoof since it wasn’t even close to being as sensitive a human hand (at least not where I used them).
Celestia chuckled lightly, “Well, that’s... an interesting way of checking for life. I assumed that you knew that she was alive because of that diamond shield you constructed. If you hadn’t created it she would have been dead from the debris.”
“Wait, so he not only defeated Discord, but also saved me? Wow, and I thought I was the overachiever in this relationship!” Twilight said giggling and smiling. I was glad to hear her laugh again, but I didn’t like what she said... relationship. I wasn’t afraid of being with her, I just didn’t feel that I was right for her. Not yet at least. I was going to need to speak with them to clear a few things up.
“Twilight? Celestia? We need to talk about a few things...” I said quietly, exuding a feeling of sombreness. They listened intently and I continued, “First of all, I can’t be with you right now Twilight, and before you say anything, no... this isn’t because of you. I hurt you... badly, and I can’t yet forgive myself. One day I might, but not now. I am dangerous, that much is certain, so for the time being I wish to distance myself from you until I am certain that I no longer will cause harm.”
Twilight gasped and asked with fright in her voice, “Does this mean you’re going back to Earth?!”
A small sly smile grew on my face, “I was thinking that would be best...”. Tears began to well up in Twilights eyes. I was just waiting for her to get to the point where she was at the verge of crying so I could hit her with some good news. “But if I did that then who would protect Equestria? You?! Please, you guys would be helpless without me... so I suppose I will just have to stay.” I said shrugging and folding my arms as if I was upset about it.
Twilight responded to the news exactly how I thought she would. She leapt onto me and hugged me with her eyes still wet from tears that were now shed out of happiness. The strange thing was that it felt different from every other hug I received. Instead of being awkward and uncomfortable, it was warm and calming. I know this is going to sound weird coming from me, but it made me feel... good. It was like an ‘everything will be alright’ kind of feeling, which was something I hadn’t felt since I was like eight years old.
“I see that you have begun to accept love into your heart. It feels wonderful, doesn’t it?” Celestia said with a kind smile.
I nodded and replied, “Yeah it feels great, however I can’t accept it yet. I always thought I knew more than enough and there was nothing left that I needed from this place, but I now see how wrong I was. There is much more that I need to learn... and that's why I have come up with a solution to both our problems.”
Celestia tilted her head in intrigue. “Oh, is that so?”
“You need a guardian for Equestria since I banished Discord, and I need a way to redeem myself and learn more from this world, right? Well I believe I am more than capable of filling the position” I said raising an eyebrow to show I was being cocky. “I do come with a few guidelines though. First off, I want to stay in Ponyville so that I may remain close to Twilight and the others as much as possible. I wish to be their primary protector, which brings me to my second rule. I don’t want them to participate in any more dangerous missions if it can be helped. I technically will replace them though I do not wish to be as well known. Think of me as your undercover, secret service, agent of justice... um, thing. Third, I want you to treat me as you would with one of your guards, so no special treatment. And lastly, I want you to change my name back to Jason... I'm just not feeling the whole 'Dusk' vibe anymore if you know what I mean.”
I held out my hoof and waited for her to accept my terms. “You drive a hard bargain, but also a reasonable one. We have a deal.”
As we shook hooves Twilight yelled out, “PRINCESS! You can’t be seriously agreeing to this! He doesn’t deserve it! He, h-he...”
I placed my hoof on her lips before she started crying again. “Listen, I know you may think this is crazy but I will never be able to forgive myself for what I did until I do this. What matters to me has never been my own safety, it has been the safety of those who I am close to. Thats why I have to do this... I have to keep everyone safe in order to be happy, and here I can actually do it. I can make a difference.
“When I thought you were dead I felt more pain than I ever thought was possible. It wasn’t physical or even mental pain. It was the kind of pain that I didn’t believe I would ever experience... emotional pain. You gave me my heart back, so I want to return the favor by making sure you never leave me again.”
Twilight went back to squeezing me, but soon stopped and looked at me. “So when are you leaving?”
“I guess it depends on if I’m needed. Is there anything going on?” I asked turning to Celestia.
Celestia cringed a bit, “Well I was going to keep this a secret for a while that way you would have some time to recover and, um... bond, but there is something strange happening in Trottingham right now.”
I shook my head slightly, “I told you to treat me as you would a guard. It hasn’t even been five minutes and you are already trying to break the rules? Tsk-tsk, bad Celestia, you know better than that!”
We all shared a laugh and began wrapping things up. I noticed that my cutie mark was actually gone. Celestia told me it was because it was only made by Discord and now that he was out of the picture so was the mark. I wasn’t complaining though, I didn’t want that sort of power. To have the power of the very universe under your command was too much for one person alone, and it would have been boring if there wasn’t some risk involved with my missions. Celestia gave me back two items that were found among the rubble of the castle. My MP3 player was in good condition but my glasses were mangled and bent. Twilight began to apologize for stepping on them but stopped when I poured a little hot tea on them. I converted the metal in the frames into Nitinol, also known as memory metal. When it reaches a certain heat the metal goes back to its original shape. I changed them as a precaution and it seemed to work to my advantage. When it was time for me to go, Twilight gave me one last hug and told me to never scare her like I did again... to which I replied, ‘I’ll try but I’m not making any promises’.
* * * * * *
So that’s my story. I may not be the hero that everyone wants, but I am not the villain either. I am who I am, nothing more, nothing less. The only two out of the mane six who didn’t currently hate my guts were Fluttershy and Twilight. Rainbow Dash took it very personally, not surprising from the element of loyalty. Pinkie Pie really threw me for a loop with how she could hold a grudge, and the craziest thing was something she whispered in my ear one day... ‘If you ever hurt any of my friends again you are going to wake up in my basement’, scary as hell, right? Rarity was mad but not as much as the others when she saw the condition of my jacket and agreed to fix it, although she still wasn’t ready to forgive me. Applejack was the worst of all from my point of view. She refused to say a single word to me. In my eyes that was worse than Rainbow Dash’s little hit and run schedule that she made for me. Every day at certain times she would purposely ram into me and send me tumbling in the dirt. Even the Cutie Mark Crusaders were forced to stay away from me as much as possible.
Thankfully Gilda, Octavia, and Vinyl Scratch we’re still on my side. I was even able to stay in Gilda’s spare bedroom. She said that she had tried to find somepony that would rent out the room but there were never any takers once they found out that she was, well, a griffin who was previously known to have anger issues. She was thrilled to have me stay with her until she found out how much I was going to be gone. Celestia kept me busy by sending me voice messages through Vlad. It took me awhile to get used to her voice coming out of his mouth.
With each mission came its own dangers and problems. I got hurt more than I cared for but it couldn’t be helped, and I was able to alter my biological healing process so that I could basically heal wounds like Wolverine so that was kinda cool. Everywhere I went, I was a shadow. Nobody knew me and I never let anyone get too close. I wasn’t falling back into my own ways, it was just that I didn’t feel like revealing who was really behind saving town after town... not that anyone ever knew that they were in danger in the first place. Yeah, I did a pretty good job keeping the peace.
After I was done with my appointed task and obtained a souvenir (like a magic pendant from a fallen foe or a vial of altered poison joke extract), I would spend a day just hanging around the place I had defended. I would also give away what I could spare from Celestia's payment. I told her I didn’t want any money because it contradicted the reward of helping others for the sake of helping them, but she gave me about twenty bits per job anyways saying, ‘It was never stated in the rules I layed out’. I only kept about five bits for myself and ‘donated’ the rest to children on the streets or a pony who left their home without enough to pay for something. I made sure they were unaware of where the bits came from by using my magic to slip them in their saddlebags or whatever when they weren't looking, then I would stand back and wait for them to discover them. Seeing them smile and look around as if they would see a guardian angel was probably the best part of the job.
So in conclusion, my name is Jason, I’m 22 years old, I have been told I have a knack for writing as well as art, my greatest passions are games and music, I’m now a pony who is currently living in Equestria, and I will continue to wander this world until I can control my inner demons.
Awesome ending man, great story.
Best ending I've ever read.
2995539>>2995549 I try...
So basically you self exile yourself the girls hate you, you decided to not be with Twilight and become the keeper of of the shadow of Equestria, interesting I suppose Twilight decided to move own and you and the main 6 just part ways, forever, reasonable.
I can't stop felling that what Pinkie is saying is just hypocrite, you where control, you where a shel, she should had understand that or something. And Shy wasn't mad about Discord being gone forever? Oh well is Shy I suppose its normal.
Hey what do you think Celestia meant by…"bond" Did she was expecting you to de flower Twilight?
P.S: Is there going to be sequels? Or this is the end of the story?
A well thought up ending! Perhaps we should get an epilogue and/or sequel!
2995569 Okay I said that I was doing the whole exile thing to keep twilight and the others safe while redeeming myself in my eyes, because I didn't yet feel that I was worthy. I chose to back off a bit to become a better person, or I guess now it would be better pony but you understand. Pinkie takes her friends very seriously so for one to be hurt is almost just as bad as murder. Fluttershy obviously wouldn't hold a grudge because she is too forgiving and kind for that. Celestia probably meant 'bond' as in the classical boyfriend/girlfriend sense, like show affection through romantic gestures or something. And read the final authors notes... it explains alot.
2995598 Please read the authors notes at the end... I don't just put them there for show.
2995611
I see, interesting. And that is that, eeyup you made very clear to me, just a quick question, in the possibility of someone like me doing like a crossover event or something like that, will you (your Avatar) will be interesting in helping defeat a new evil rising? Maybe as someone giving information, or meeting other humans that had reach Equestria and are having a good life
2995649 I suppose I could help with that.
2995615
ohh.... well sorry.
I usually just skim through the authors notes for every fic in here. It is sad that you have no intention of writing any type of continuation at the moment.
But if that is your choice....
2995674 Yeah bad news; no more fanfiction for me. Good news; I'm still going to be writing elsewhere.
2995657
Glad to know, thanks if it happen I will give you synopsis and a crud first chapter where my avatar meet yours, I will try to make the dialog flow so I will see what I can do, so you can input your own answers
2995689 Well we could always Skype to make things easier...
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beautiful ending, good sir. Simply beautiful.
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Yeah but I don't want to pry into your personal space, but if you are willing it, I will take it in consideration
2995747 Please, I insist! You have been an excellent commenter and I would be glad to add you as a Skype friend!
2995745 I am glad you enjoyed it.
This was the most amazing chapter in this story!!!!!! You close the story off with the best way possible!!!!!
It so cool how you did an ending that is not the same as others
2995686
well, if you thinking of writing something about mlp
we will be waiting
2995819
Really?! Hey thanks, well if you insist, send me your Skype account and I will search or you then, and thanks
2995857 Not the same as the others?
2995873 Well it may be a while before that happens (if it ever does happen), but thank you for your support.
2995931 Alrighty then.
i loved it again sorry for all the shit that was in your life
2997450 Like I said in chapter 7...
2998309 Well its technically only science fiction because it has a genetically engineered demon... I call him Sin. Its mostly like a slice of life like this but with him as the main focus.
2998389 It's okay, I'm sure I'll be fine.
2995976 The guy usually goes with the girl at the end and like most or all people forgive the guy for what he has done and yours doesnt do that
2998417 Oh well I didn't think it suited me and it seemed way too cliche so I decided against it.
2998420 The. Best. Ending. EVER!!!!!!
Ok, that ending was great, heh.
Since I started reading this fic, I kinda had as a goal to leave you a thought-through comment when you finished it, describing why I liked it and such.
Yet, after all this time, I still can't point my finger upon why this was so great to follow.
I mean, your characterizations of the characters introduced have been good, and reading yourself interact with them have been fun and interesting. You as a character was also interesting reading about. You gave deep insight into how you think, and what you've been through, or are going through.
When reading, I now and then was thinking about negative terms used against fics like this. 'Self-insert', or 'Mary Sue-character', (considering the latter because you were able to solve pretty much anything by sheer knowledge and magical might. (If I've got the right meaning of that description)) But, wait, hear me out here. I couldn't use any of these in any negative description of this fic, or you as a character. The part about 'self-insert' is the story theme, so I'm not really sure why people use that description to, uh, flame on stuff. The 'Mary Sue'-part, I mean, if someone wants to call it that, sure. But, in this fic, you described where these powers came from, as well as when you solved a problem, you described well how you got to that conclusion.
So, about all characters, including yourself, this have been a good and belivable read.
(SPOILERS appear after here, read at your own risk)
The storyline then. Here again, I can't give you many flaws. This idea of Discord, and him using a human as a tool of chaos and evil. I-, hm, that's an idea that works for me. But, even before we got into the epic battlescenes, when you were solving more 'simple' problems, and just getting along in Ponyville, that was also a very enjoyable read. Don't take this wrong, but you as a character, and as you described it, were different from what Equesrias populace was used to, and you not beeing used to them I guess, gave some interesting scenes.
So, the storyline was good, and it was constantly growing towards more and more epic, heh.
About the ending, as mentioned, it was great. It didn't end as I was expecting at all, but it did fit so much better that any ending I'd imagined. The ending really shone light on you(r character), and you achieving something that you'll feel good doing.
I also want to credit you on the drawings you've done throughout this fic. They have added great depth to the scenes when you used them, and, well, they are really well-drawn too.
So, in the end.
This have been a great read, I can't really say what and why, but it was very well written, the characters were good, and following your ideas of you in Equestria have been fun.
Thanks for writing this and putting it up for everyone to enjoy!
And, good luck with the sci-fi-writing!
M
Not the best thing I've ever read, but it's still pretty good. All in all, I'd rate it....3.5/5. Good luck on your next project, JasonTheDemon.
ISA
While I was reading the one thing just kept popping in my mind it that you are the hero equestra needs not the one it deserves you are......the Dark Knight encrypted-tbn1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSZ10_WaC0zUTMvGhO-1aiPeQmwPSJXqn0XP8aK8WUy5fo8f4Eb
2999313 I was intentionally trying to show how things would really work if a human such as myself were to go to Equestria. I saw that most people were just saying how good everything would be but I never saw it that way. I put in the deeper thought to imagine how the ponies would really react to our human behavior and the differences that would either set us apart or bring us together. Throughout the fic I continuously thought of how the characters would really act around me, not how I wished for them to act.
I never intended to sound like a 'Mary-Sue'. In fact I thought I would be more of the opposite with how I was only able to solve a problem that required thought and planning. No true physical strength and being unfamiliar with how to use my own body sounded like big drawbacks to me so I went for it. I also thought that as I spent more time in Equestria I would gradually get better and learn how to use my magic more so it would get more and more intense as time went on.
I also added in drawings because its something I like to do. Putting in pictures to help the viewer get an understanding of the writers true vision is something I think adds to the fun of the story. I made it a point to make a picture for almost every chapter and I put in music to help the ambiance of the work. I found out that when I combine all three (writing, pictures, and music) I can create strong feelings and set the mood much easier.
I'm glad you liked the story and you are more than welcome to stop by my sci-fi story if you wish.
(P.S. Do you think my story is worthy of your recommendation list or not?)
Keep being awesome,
JasontheDemon
2999474 70%? I guess I can live with that.
3001733 Yeah... except I don't put on a ridiculous costume and talk like I've been gargling with gravel for the past 10 years.
3001829
BRAVO
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I have lot's to say after reading this. First off, this story was AWESOME!!! I think it is fair to say this is by far THE BEST SELF INSERT ON FIMFICTION TO DATE. You really opened up a new outlook on the self-insert genre. A lot of people dislike self inserts,mary sues ect. but this fic, like I said, opens up a whole new outlook on the self insert genre. Now I'm gonna start my rant. First off, the cutie mark, if you said the cutie mark you had was created by Discord, why do you have it on your user picture, and what is it?! Is it a yin-yang sign altered, or what? Does it mean dark and dark instead of light and dark? And where did you get the idea of it anyways? I'm curious. And by the way, were you technically a blank flank throughout the whole story? And I thought cutie marks could not be made by other ponies, even if it is fake, like the episode: Call Of The Cutie, but Discord made your cutie mark and all the talents that were supposed to come with it WORK and it didn't disappear automatically! Very interesting, I didn't know if you noticed that while writing.
Secondly, I was thinking of writing a story myself, its not HiE exactly, its actually PoE (ponies on earth). But after reading this EPIC story, I'm VERY NERVOUS now. Cause your story had ALOT of feels, (not the type of feels that give you the butterflies in your stomach). And also I might have to take into consideration on what you said about how they WOULD react versus how I WANT them to react in the story I was thinking of writing. You could say I'm intimidated. But anyways, great story, and I feel honored to have met a awesome writer as yourself (you could easily say it was nothing but DUDE you are awesome at writing!!!) Its the fics like these actually give me a new look on the My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic. And make me question the show's general idea, like solving problems via friendship and learning lessons at the end. And also AWESOME artwork I think it added to the feel of the story as well. You not only have a good talent at writing but a pretty good artist as well. Well since I can't think of anything else to say, I'm gonna end it here. Thanks for the great story!
P.S Awesome ending song, I don't know if you already thought of this, but the Imagine Dragons - Demons song should be your new theme song instead of the Simple Plan - Welcome to My Life. And if not, at least add to your collection of theme songs.
3001829 And two more things. When you did the battle between Twilight And Yourself, she used dark powers that she learned from Celestia when she told her about King Sombra. The power you had, were you thinking the powers you had were demonic, or like straight from the Devil himself? Is that why Jason was able to beat Twilight and Discord? Cause the battle with Twilight was like a Evil vs Evil when you think about it (technically it was evil/good vs evil cause Twilight used dark powers from King Sombra and he was evil, to try to stop Jason cause her normal magic was ineffective, and she was good but used dark powers) and the battle with Discord WAS good vs evil cause even though Jason had evil powers at his disposal, he overcame his evil side and used his god-like powers to defeat Discord who was evil.
And one more thing, I think Discord giving Jason god-like powers and god-like knowledge was his ultimate downfall when you think about it. I think Discord thought he was safe with that, cause he possessed Jason with a evil spirit to do nothing but evil with his powers, and Discord was counting on that, he never expected Jason to overcome his evil side(or the evil spirit), therefore his eventual downfall.
3020990 Well okay, first off the cutie mark was taken from a picture I found on DeviantART. It showed many symbols but the one that caught my attention was that one in particular because it was labeled 'cognition'. I knew what that meant and at the time I saw that as my greatest asset so I used it. It wasn't meant to represent Yin-Yang or anything else, it was just cognition.
And yes, technically I was a blank flank all along. Discord was able to give me a cutie mark because he is chaos, and chaos has no rules or limitations.
I am glad that you have been thinking of writing your own story, and don't be nervous or freak out if it doesn't do well. I started off with a lame story but I learned from my mistakes and made this right after, so don't worry about it. Also if people give you a hard time just remember that 75% of those people probably don't write and thus have no grounds to criticize.
Thanks for the positive feed back on the drawing too. It makes me happy to know some people enjoy them. You are welcome for the story. Keep being awesome!
~JasontheDemon
P.S. I may have to do that.
"I’m now a pony who is currently living in Equestria, and I will continue to wander this world until I can control my inner demons." Does that mean after you control your inner demons your going back to Earth or is that just a saying? I'm confused and what do you mean wander? I thought you were living in Ponyville? Or do you mean the missions you go through that take you all over Equestria?
3021142 Yes the fight between me and Twilight was basically two dark powers clashing. Twilights powers stemmed from sorrow, hate, and malice. My powers came from insanity, chaos, and unbound knowledge. The reason why Twilight didn't win was because her heart fought against the power she had and she was holding back. If she hadn't cared about the life of her opponent (me) so much then it would have been much more even, but she did care and thus was unable to come out victorious.
Discord has always been cocky and full of himself so giving me enough power to defeat him was just something he would probably do without a second thought. His fatal flaw was always believing himself to be in total control so when something unforseen happens, he's toast.
3021277 I won't be going back to Earth, When I say 'I will continue to wander this world' I do mean my missions take me all across Equestria. I made myself the protector of it all so that means if there is trouble brewing in Appleloosa I will head there, or if Manehatten is in need of help, I will pop up there. Its all part of keeping Equestria safe so the mane six can remain far from danger. The way I saw it, they were innocent and shouldn't have to fight until there is no other choice, instead of throwing them in there whenever something bad happens. (I mean for crying out loud, right after the Canterlot wedding where they fight chrysalis they are sent to the crystal kingdom to fight Sombra.)
I guess that should answer all your questions. Thanks again for reading. Keep being awesome.
~JasontheDemon
3057226 To me thats what prayers are... wishes. And people expect their prayers to be answered, or 'granted'. I don't just hope to get something out of nowhere, I work towards getting it myself. If I cant obtain it through any means of my own, like if a family member is close to dying, I will not trouble myself and waste time praying, I will stay productive while waiting for whatever is supposed to happen. If the family member dies, oh well there was nothing I could do. That's how I do things.
(and for your information I know a lot about religion, I just don't like it because of how it distorts ones rational views and causes more trouble than it helps.)
3321566 Maybe Equestrians throw pies instead of grenades is because of the fact FRIENDSHIP IS MAGIC IS A FUCKING G-RATED KIDS SHOW JESUS FUCKING CHRIST
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good story man good story well done
3761860 Thank you.
Jason? .... can I eat your hair? .... what?! It looks like bacon!!
3982933 No... I'm sorry but I like my hair where it is. (and it doesn't taste anything like bacon... I checked.)
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Welp, finished the whole darned thing.
You're exceptionally skilled at writing, best story I've seen in a good month or two... Gonna favorite this, and put the sequel on read later.
I may be late to the party, but I feel the need to leave my mark.
You write an incredibly encapturing masterpiece. I personally found it very relateable and would like to add that this story brought me to the cusp of tears, and I probably would've cried if I were somewhere private.
Again that was an amazing story, and hope you keep on creating stories of similar quality.