Wow . . . words fail me . . . that was so . . . beautiful is an injustice. That was a masterpiece of imagery in my mind.

"Entering your home, you remover your coat and boots"

That made me all misty eyed.

Found a minor spelling error.

Time beings to go by and Redheart’s pace begins to quicken along with her breathing.

I just hope pie isn’t the only thing you’ll be wanting for dessert,

I see what somrpony did their.

Many times I found stories with cuddling,making love.
I don't don't have that good feel.I mean they always
rush the damn story.

NEXT ONE...

Wow...Santa girl nurse,nice touch.I was uh...Lets see uh....75% surprised and 25% not.

what can I say that hasn't already been said.
all I can offer is a smile.

I noticed a few spelling errors, but I'm not here to bitch about that...

Awesome scene. Here's a moustache.

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Dear God.

Every time i read the clop scenes in Jaydex's stories I imagine this song playing in the background.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_tMluz0R1LU

Okay, now I need a picture of Redheart in that getup. It's making my mind do very dirty things...

...casting your gift repeatedly into her.

I think that's the most beautiful way I've ever heard someone describe ejaculation.

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Oh my, I'm almost blushing here! Thank you for the thoughtful comment! When I do love scenes or clop as many have come to call them...I try to make them expressive and tasteful, more about the emotion and not just about lust or desire alone.

D00d... This. Is. Infinite. I'm not really sure what else I can say about that, all I can tell you is that my vision is foggy now because the end almost made me cry. When I woke up to hear her crying like that, just touched me. Your stories have some element to them that others just don't have. Even the beauty of Euler's formula doesn't move me this much. I've told you before in a PM but I'll say it again, my relationship with Redheart is like a divergent infinite series; the sum of its parts goes to infinity. Redheart is much great than infinity. I wanna scratch her belly so that she moans and closes her eyes and shakes her hind leg <3 <3 <3 <3 <3^inf.

The second chapter of the third story of the Redheart series. From the look of it, things seem to be progressing smoothly… like a bridge over troubled water. Looks like trouble in paradise for the Protagonist!

This chapter was brilliantly written. Okay, okay, let me go into more detail for this one. The locations were minimal, but the actions that occurred held so much meaning behind them. Even the scene involving the fetish felt like it invoked a lot more love than normally, and I think that’s owed to how well-written it was, with regards to simple things like not describing the smells or sounds nearly as much as the real focus: Your special somepony.

What about other aspects? Well, the acts of ‘love’ felt like they held more meaning because of how well-described they were. I loved the dinner, the baking, ‘making love’, even the scene at Carousel Boutique which involved Redheart indirectly, but still held so much meaning. The dress was hard to picture, but it’s essentially different for everyone, which is what Second-Person immersion really shines with: Picturing things differently.

Even the final scene with Redheart was both believable, and heart-wrenching. It didn’t sound ‘forced’, because of how well-established the relationship was. It was through more than just sex or dialogue: Actions like seeing her while she was at the hospital, or her being worried for your life in the previous story, all helped as buildup to a REAL knockout-blow to the heart with that final scene of this chapter.

Much like the previous chapter, I’m not quite sure what to say about this one. The emotion seemed to just… spill over from every action taken by the protagonist and Redheart, and made it an absolutely fantastic chapter to read. Between how I felt by the end of the previous chapter, and how THIS chapter made me feel, I have no idea what to expect from the next chapter!!!

… I’m a little unsure about this…
… But that’s where some of the fun lies.

This is so awesome, this series gets better as it progresses. Jaydex, you are so awesome! Never stop doing what you do. This is simply fantastic!