Restless Thoughts
Guardian Angel
Chapter Two: Restless Thoughts.
A beam of sunlight slowly crept over a sleeping mare. This mare looked like she had seen better days. Truth is she had been through a lot. The past few nights had been terrible. Sleep rarely came to her, and when it did, it wasn't very fulfilling. Faint trails of tears could be seen on her cheeks.
A pile of crumpled papers lay near a wastebasket. Twilight had been trying to compose a letter to Princess Celestia, to ask her for advice on how to deal with her situation. All those attempts had ended in failure. She just couldn't seem to find the right words to describe her problems.
Oh how she wished that she'd never accepted the Princess' offer to join that study on magical theory. Maybe then this all wouldn't have happened.
Groaning, Twilight pulled herself out of bed, and careful not to wake Spike, she trotted to the bathroom. She stumbled a bit, but quickly straightened herself out.
Stepping into the bathroom, she flipped the shower on with a wave of her horn. The water soon heated to a warm temperature, steam already starting to form. She stepped under the spray, letting the hot water cascade down her body. She simply stood there and contemplated her situation.
Yes it was her first relationship. She was bound to make a mistake or two. It seemed to be going well at first. She had quickly taken a liking to her lab partner, a mare by the name of Dusty Scroll. Dust was a tad older than Twilight, having finished school a year before Twilight. The two had a lot in common. Both of them liked to read, the pursuit of knowledge was their passion in life.
Soon enough, she found herself feeling different around Dust. She seemed to stutter, her heart racing. Sometimes a blush forming on her cheeks, especially when a compliment was passed her way.
Having read a few romance novels during her fillyhood, Twilight realized she may have a crush. She wrote to her friends in Ponyville, getting quick replies from all of her friends. The most surprising one was from Rainbow.
Rainbows response had been encouraging, but with a thoughtfulness that she was not expecting. She knew Dash was a bit older than the rest of her friends, but to Twilight she didn't seem to be a pony that was interested in a relationship. With confidence borne of her friends support, she asked Dust out on a date.
Their first date had gone well, they had gone to see a play. Both of the mares enjoyed it immensely, and quickly planned another one soon.
The second date was followed by another and another. That's when the problems started to manifest.
No relationship was without it's pains.
Twilight had started feeling more and more nervous. Were they moving too fast? Was she moving too slow? What were Dust's feelings on the matter?
The pair was slowly drifting apart.
They found themselves making excuses, something had come up, that night wouldn't work.
Eventually the two had found the time to sit down and discuss "Us".
Things had not gone well. Tempers flared, and the two had left, each one absorbed in their own thoughts.
They had reconvened, hasty apologies were made, but all was not better. Twilight felt like Dust was losing interest in the relationship they had. Dust thought that Twilight was over-thinking the whole thing.
Was she?
For that Twilight still didn't have an answer.
The project they were working on for the Princesses was coming to a close, the final report being drafted.
That's when things reached the breaking point.
With no more requirements, the two mares wondered if it was worth it. To stay together in Canterlot, constantly questioning themselves, or to return to their homes and friends. Neither mare was willing to just simply abandon their friends either.
Friends. A few months ago, Twilight hadn't really cared for making friends.
Now she just couldn't forget her friends. All the adventures, the laughter, the pain, the memories and the lessons she had learned.
She couldn't give that up. Neither could Dust.
Dust left for Germaneigh the next morning. No sorrow, just a simple goodbye and she was gone.
With no more obligations in Canterlot, Twilight made her own way home.
The long ride on the train gave her time to think.
Twilight shook her head, the water had long since gone cold. Turning off the shower, she stepped out, a towel shrouded in a magical field immediately wrapped around her. She finished drying off and made her way to the kitchen.
While her eating habits were always picky, right now she found it hard to do almost anything. She knew she was different from before. When greeted by her friends she had passed off her sadness as just being tired from the trip.
Her friends had soon noticed her distance. Everypony except Dash and Rarity didn't know about her split from Dust. Applejack was suspicious, Twilight was not a pony to get sad easily.
Eventually they worked out what happened. Not even Pinkie's exuberance could bring a smile to Twilight's face for long anymore. While she appreciated her friends efforts to cheer her up, it just wasn't what she wanted.
Truth be told Twilight didn't know herself what she wanted herself.
She needed to vent. The feelings inside kept churning like a sea, sometimes manifesting in extreme sadness, other times in anger and even dark sarcasm.
She just didn't know which friend she was willing to trust with this.
Placing her plate in the sink, she slowly made her way to her study. Passing Spike on the way, she received a meek smile from him. She returned an awkward smile back.
Spike let her have her space, he was more mature than most ponies realized, she was thankful for that.
In her study, a few books lay on her desk, notes scattered around almost no organization present. The old Twilight would have freaked by now. Right now she couldn't care less.
She had tried losing herself in research, but she couldn't keep her focus for long. With a huff of anger, she slammed the old book closed, and put it away on a spare shelf.
She needed a change of scenery. Grabbing her saddlebags, Twilight set off into the town of Ponyville.
Her destination: a valley near the other side of town, recently vacated by a cyan mare.
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i liked it, the reaction was good and i say that knowing somewhat what twi is going through
the only real difference is that me and my ex are still friends
so all in all i liked and it flows well
keep up the good work, i shall be watching with interest
This has potential. We'll see how they interact before I pass judgement. But have a thumb up until then.
Also added to Twidash group, so you can get some more "screen time."
Good start
Bit too much calling Rainbow Dash "Dash" though. It isn't too bad in narration, but remember that the only character in the show to call her that was gilda.
I'm always skeptical about the idea of ponies playing instruments, without advanced manipulation (magic, or pegasi wings), it always comes out awkward when trying to explain it, like the sentence "Her hooves continued to manipulate the strings, the melody continuing to echo as the sun continued to rise." I have trouble telling if you mean strumming, or actual chord work, which would be damn near impossible for even some of the most basic chords without those manipulation techniques. It makes for a cool mental image, Rainbow Dash playing guitar, but when you get down to the mechanics of it, it's a messy ordeal. Still, this isn't the focus, and I'm officially overthinking things, but right now it's had a rather interesting start, and I want to see where this ends up.
To be honest, it sounds like they had a couple of dates, an argument, sort of made up, kept working on the project pretending to keep the thing going and then went their separate ways. To me, it hardly sounds like a relationship had time to be formed. It definitely does not sound like a bad breakup.
Still going to track though, story seems interesting enough for it. Dash is actually the youngest in my headcanon, but I am going to see where you are going with a more mature Dash.
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I tend to get nitpicky with the whole using their hooves thing too. But then I go back and watch the Gala episode and see Octavia playing the cello with her hooves and think, "Well there is that, so whatever..."
And I assume RD is using her hoof like a guitar pick
This is progressing along nicely, and the pacing is very comfortable to follow. I'm looking forward to more.
Looks promising. I'll be back when read.
You are working with a very bold idea here my friend. I am liking it and your more mature Dashie quite a bit. Can't wait to see more.
Very good idea, very well written, I'm curious about one thing though
When does this story take place?
Nice keep it up
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Thanks. More "screen time" is always nice.
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Yeah, I have realized I do that. Thanks for pointing that out.
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To be honest, I really haven't thought that through very well. I'm guessing somewhere during season 2 or so. Before Canterlot wedding for sure. I'd like it to feel like Twilight has had time to integrate into Ponyville and strengthen her friendships.
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Yeah, I feel this part is a bit on the weaker side. I personally don't have a lot of experience with relationships. Or writing them as a matter of fact. Most of my previous writing was more action/adventure, and usually for school projects. This is really my first time dabbling in a story with some romance. I'm quite enjoying writing this though.
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Personally, I find technology in Equestria to be strange. In some ways I find the tech to be way ahead of today's standards, in other cases, it's severely lacking. Also Pinkie play multiple instruments with ease, though that just could be her Pinkieness. I'll give it some more thought and see if I can't explain the guitar a bit more.
As always, thanks for reading. I'm really happy to have such good reception. Thanks guys and gals. /)
I wanted to ask about longer chapters but...but the length seems to right lol, weird
anyway, hope this story will surprise us/me with something new and fun to read, looking forward to it
Potential is the word I use at the moment for this story. I do enjoy TwiDash and a more mature Dash is something I can see working well.
Definitely going to be keeping this story tracked and you have my upvote for a good read so far!
Looking forward to more.
"Truth is" is an interjection, so it needs a comma after it.
Same here with "Yes" -- it should have a comma after it.
The part after the comma needs some sort of conjunction to make the sentence parse. I recommend "and the pursuit".
"Forming" should be "formed" to match tense with the rest of the sentence. Alternatively, "Sometimes she found a blush forming" would work as well.
"May" should be "might" to match tense with the rest of the sentence.
"Rainbows" should be "Rainbow's" to indicate the possessive rather than the plural.
"Friends" should be "friends' ", to indicate the possessive.
"It's" should be "its", since expanding it to "it is" doesn't make sense in this context.
"Wrapped" should be "wrapping" to match tense with the rest of the sentence.
This is a bit of a run-on sentence. I'd recommend the following: "Spike let her have her space; he was more mature than most ponies realized, and she was thankful for that."