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When Moonage Daydream, the loudest, most dazzling Pony Rock star in all Equestria, pays a visit to Ponyville, almost everyone is excited — except Twilight Sparkle, who just wants a quiet, dark place to do some stargazing. But when Princess Luna shows up and offers to help, will her solution be worse than the problem?

Yes. Yes, it will.

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Comments ( 100 )

Shame this got bumped off the new story list so quickly, it deserves more attention than it got.

Very nice and well written. I admire the way you pulled off writing from the first person perspective there. I just can't manage to do that myself, so props to you. :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, I think the key is to update sequentially, rather than all at once. Also, to have a longer story with more updates. :D

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Thanks a bunch!

kyoot!!!!!!!:twilightblush::twilightblush:

any chance there's a sequel of this?

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Thanks! It's certainly possible, but the only idea I had seems a little lackluster, or at least, seems to re-tread pretty worn ground (now that I've got a better idea of the existing body of ponylit). Still, it's possible!

Adorkable twi is the best twi :twilightblush:

I'm loving the characterization of everypony here, from Rainbow Dash the rock enthusiast to Fluttershy with her surprising Hex skills... and of course Luna, the Princess of Metal herself!

It seems that Princess Luna does not understand, or care about, this new-fangled concept of "restraint". :twilightsheepish:

Great mix of wisdom and adorkable nerdiness you've given your Twilight. And Luna's nonchalance in the face of Ursas Minor and Major was wonderful. "We believe that we can take this chump," indeed!

My goodness! I remember reading this on EqD! I really enjoyed it too, so I am glad I found it again. A nice, short, yet ultimately warm story staring two of my favourite ponies! The writing is clear and filled with expression. Also, the perspective works really well in this, which is impressive in itself considering pulling off first person from the perspective of one of the main 6 is never easy.

Overall, a great fic! Keep up the great work!

I found my way to this after reading Heretical Fictions, and, I must say, I love it possibly even more than that. Heretical Fictions was a wonderful voice for all those who love Eternal, but was very clearly a Fic With A Point. It was an essay in fic format - a thumping good one! But this? This could easily be a MLP episode, but also carries similar emotional weight as Heretical Fictions. That? Is damn hard.

Eagerly looking forward to your next project.

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Thanks! I'd be a liar if I said I didn't hope that the apparent success of "Heretical Fictions" would draw more attention to this one as well. Just one more instance of me riding the coat-tails of other artists, I guess. :twilightsheepish:

My "next project" is currently swimming in the weird Stygian waters of the February Write-Off, so I can't show it to you yet. If, heaven forfend, it takes one of the top slots, I'm sure they'll link to it pretty blatantly, but I have to imagine that the rest of our non-winning works will be restored to our accounts once the Write-Off is over; check back in a couple days!

"I love messing with space and time!" said Pinkie Pie. "Messing with space and time is great!"

"Sugarcube," said Applejack, glancing sidelong at Pinkie, "you do realize you can't personally mess with space and time, don'tcha?"

Pinkie Pie sighed airily. "That's exactly what you said last today," she said.

OK... making me laugh so hard I tear up is uncool.

I lied, totally cool. Anyway, good read all the way through. This could have been an episode of the show. Nice.

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Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I really wanted to try my hand at writing something that could be canonical before branching out into weirder areas, so I'm happy I succeeded in your eyes.

good story is good story. da?:twilightsmile:

Poor Luna really is terrible with her impulse control isn't she... I feel bad for her.

253919 She's high on nostalgia. I didn't even think you COULD get hyped on that. Wow.

A very sweet story, even if the moral seems a bit rushed. Very promising, and I must say that after reading this I will have to go and read heretical fictions after I read eternal. I just haven't gotten around to it yet... :twilightblush:

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Thanks! And yes, do read "Eternal". It's not a perfect story but it is, IMO, a great one.

This is nice, heart-warming story and I really enjoyed it. It's just got the right... feel to it, eh. Thank you for writing and sharing this!

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Thanks, SR. This was my first and IMO still my best prose Ponyfic.

Well that was awesome.
Wish I had some point I could point to and say "That was the best part," but I can't.
Because all the points are great.

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Thanks! This is still my own favorite Ponyfic that I've done.

EDIT: As I realize I just said immediately above. Broken record, much?

"My effective mass increases when I eat cookies!" :pinkiehappy:

THEREFORE, PREPARE THYSELF AS I SUMMON THY CONFECTION FROM THE INKY VOID BETWEEN THE WORLDS!

Oh Celestia I am enjoying this so much.

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I do so love the RCV. I'm so glad the canon presented me with this shiny little plaything.

I haven't had that much fun reading a story for ages. I loved Twi, I loved ROYAL!Luna, I loved the words, I loved everything. My only complaint it didn't end in TwiLuna makeouts, but I suppose you can't have everything.

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Much as I adore TwiLuna shipping, I doubt if I'll ever get around to it myself, because I have exactly one idea for a story that has actual ship-grade material in it (instead of just coy stabs at intimacy), and it's like fifteen chapters long and ends fairly tragically and I just don't want that in my head or on my userpage.

At any rate, glad you liked!

I remember this one.... It was actually my first MLP fanfic read, and I loved it :pinkiehappy:. Gonna have to read it again. I'm having trouble placing where I first saw it though.... Had something to do with a webcomic.... :unsuresweetie:

"To which I now respond: Excitement? Excitement? Have you even looked at Group VIIa? I swear, until my dying day, I will never understand how anypony can contemplate the Halogens without a little skip to her heart; but, to each her own, I guess."

Twilight, for me it's the Alkali Earth Metals. The halogens seem so... flighty, I guess, compared with the moderated passion and smoldering heat of.... well, you get the idea.

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I'd make some comments on the fiery passion of sodum / water interactions, but then we start inching dangerously close to Naked Singularity territory.

Finally got round to reading this and I have to say, I liked it. Some great humour and it does feel very close to the spirit of the show too. You know, for all you have said about your Celestia not being close to Canonestia [1], your Luna seems very close to the Luna from Eclipsed. It's surprising how rare it is to see Large Ham Luna done well... or even at all.

[1] I love how Celly's name portmanteaus with everything.

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The Royal Canterlot Voice was just about the best thing that could have happened to me as a writer of Ponyfic, and I'm actually a little melancholy that Luna seems to be learning her lesson and keeping a more even profile now. I mean, much better for her, but less good for my own personal amusement. I do love me some hyper-powered thunderously bombastic princess ladies.

Ah, this is where it all began.

About a little over a year ago, I stumbled onto this cute little story and decided to give it a read. It wasn't complete at the time, but I enjoyed the two chapters that were there. When I got to the end of the second chapter, I found that I had enjoyed myself and wondered if I'd ever know how it would end. You see, what made this story special was that it was the first fanfic of MLP I ever read. After reading just those two chapters, I went on to look for more stories to read. and you can probably guess where things went from there. The fics I've read in my time in this fandom have sent me flying through countless different emotions in countless different worlds. I've laughed until my sides cramped, cried when the story was just too much, and have sat at the edge of my seat simultaneously biting my nails into oblivion reading the stories that have been written by authors like you. In the end, all this was made possible through the words of one writer putting me through the eyes of a certain adorkable mare gazing into the starry night.

It's been a long time and many a fics have been read since then, but it all started with one, and I have you to thank for that. Thank you for writing this lovely gem of story, and thank you for bringing me into this world of pony prose.

P.S Imagine my surprise when I look up the profile of this story's author and find out that he's not only alive, but actively writing! You've earned yourself a very loyal watcher. Thank you again, keep up the good work!

P.P.S YOU WROTE CELESTIA HATES TEA! I enjoyed that story more than I would like to admit. Time to read everything else.

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This comment made my day and it's not even six in the morning yet. Thanks so much for letting me know, and hope you like the rest!

This could definitely work as an episode. Yee!

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That was absolutely one of my goals with this one. Glad it worked out that way for you!

Got here from the reference to Griffinwatch Observatory in Infernal Machines (which I got to from Contraptionology), and this really justifies my usual tendency to look up the full backstory of the fics I read. This was just delightful. I always love a good friendshipping TwiLuna story, and the astronomy bits in this made it all the better.

Man, you give Pinkie Pie three lines and she steals half the episode. Just like Spike At Your Service.

So reading this story was a slightly silly experience. I accidentally read most of the third chapter first, and didn't realize anything was amiss until the part where Fluttershy mentions the rain check. I guess I just kinda figured you were going in medias res. :derpytongue2: This little mishap didn't hurt my enjoyment of the story at all though, if anything, it made the opening scenes far more hilarious because I knew how far things would go. Oh those dreadfully ironic proclamations!

This was a very episodic story, as some have mentioned already, and you have confirmed was your intention. It fits both the tone and pacing of a typical FiM episode, and I spent a lot of time imagining what some of the scenes would look like animated. Luna is naturally the funniest walking disaster with perfect comedic timing throughout, and Pinkie whips out a couple hilarious lines without having to check her script! :pinkiegasp: For the most part, characterizations seem to be pretty spot-on. Luna may be a bit silly, but it really does match her performance in "Eclipsed" very closely. Twilight's interest in Hex (over Go, I guess she's got a bit of Nash in her) is rather fitting, and though it's a bit of a stretch, I may have enjoyed the walk in the woods a little too much, perhaps. :unsuresweetie: Writing first-person Twilight is something you've done a couple times now, and I'm starting to think it's a favored perspective for you.

You may also be the first writer I've seen actually acknowledge the significance of the castle of the royal pony sisters being in the middle of the Everfree forest. This actually bothered me in BP, where there are flashbacks to when the royal pony sisters ruled together... in Canterlot. :facehoof: I'm sure having actually watched the pilot isn't really that uncommon, and my sampling is just kinda skewed, but take the compliment anyway.

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Thanks for the feedback! Glad you enjoyed. And to all commenters not individually acknowledged, as usual.

Raugos's "Night Guards" similarly has a pre-banishment Luna and Celly ruling from Everfree. It was quite influential to my own works.

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your mother's effective mass increases when she eats cookies
OOOOHHHH BURRNNNN:pinkiegasp:
jkjk

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nah bro, its all about elements above Lead

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Wait, what do you mean by "BP"?

Also, yes good job for acknowledging that they ruled out of the everfree forest and not canterlot :pinkiehappy:

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I like that detail because it implies some very bad stuff went down during the effective civil war, bad enough that the Magic of Equestria remains sundered a thousand years later in that one spot.

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