After Shining Armor and Princess Cadence's love send Chrysalis skyrocketing through the air, she is somehow transported to Earth. Bad thing is she has no idea what Earth or what humans are.
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Edit: Made a Cover Photo. :)
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Moon_Skritch
Names Moon Skritch, On a permanent hiatus, I don't think I'll come back. Feel free to read what I have! Thanks for being a good community years ago.
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Hipster Foreman, Commenting and faveing before it was cool
Author used Threshold
Foreman Fainted
sounds like an old spice commercial
Let us see where this goes.
Is chrysalis gonna turn into a girl and befriend Claude or something?
Colour me interested, man...
great, great, i want to see more of it
Edit: OMG you are the one who have made the dan trylogie, and now your are doing a fic about my favorite character!!!!!!!! you just won the prize of my favorite writter
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I'll need more before I can fully see if I like it or not, but this has the potential to be decent.
1926814 Aww Thank you! :) and it's Dean LOL. I am happy that someone likes my stories :D
1927131 :D Awesome.
1925174 Not telling.
1927511 Do not worry my friend there will be more! I am working on it now.
Do your works ever cease to amaze me? Great fic so far. Keep at it.
1929677 Thanks man! I am amazed that my fics amaze people. *scratches non-existent beard* maybe this is my calling, to become an author!! (real author not this stuff, you don't get paid for this stuff lol)
1929742 Do what you want to do.
and by the way, can you see if there is anything wrong with my fic? I keep thinking it's not good enough.
1929772 I will check it later, i have a place called sleeping to go to. :P
Could use a bit more detail, but on whole:
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1960168 I know i need more detail... I'm still kind of sort of new to this, even though i have 3 other books 1 still incomplete.
and don't worry I'm almost done with the next chapter.
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Don't worry, it takes practice. Still a good start.
1963764
Wait r u still going to finish Deans Real Life!!!????
Cause if not... There will be problems.
With Gareths permission I posted the original of this chapter of google docs to give you an idea on what I'm here to edit.
Chapter 2: Unedited
ALSO, this is probably the weirdest thing to edit that I've ever seen. there are a LOT of points where he does something from his point of view, and then doesn't from her point. I'M SO CONFUSED.
Pretty good. Although I kinda feel like Chrysalis is being too nice. But still, its a good story.
1994059 She has had a change of heart after being sent out of Equestria. She has realized that being mean gets you nowhere. (I need to put that in somewhere in the story to explain...)
1978967 Do not worry I will finish it....Eventually....
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Good enough explanation.
I really hope they do an redemption episode with her...
1995175 Same here, I like Chrysalis, she is innocent all she wants is love to feed on... They really need to do a redemption with her.
i kinda like the two different point of views
1995889 Alright, I guess i can try to keep that up.. idk
Nice chapter. Though I hope that when they get together she will be able to be in her normal form when it is just them.
1997869 You'll see soon enough just be patient.
I finnally found it! The first story I've ever read on fimfiction.net! Now that I've finnally found it! I'm...disappointed...at how slow this story is updateing. I expected that by now at least 3 chapters have been made. The plot you have chosen should've made that easier to achieve. My thoughts were wrong. Although, I understand that you probably had a lot of business to attend to, that still doesn't mean you can't spend an hour or even less to work on your story. I'm sorry if this sounds a bit harsh and if it had offended you, but its the truth. Good authors always find a way to be able to write their stories, to be able to do what they love to do. I don't know if this applies to you, but I know this is true to most authors. I hope you didn't take this as an offense, I'm only trying to share my thoughts on this story. I don't think of you as a bad author, or anything like that, but one that needs just a bit of improvement.
Please tell me how well I did and if I motivated you to do anything, again,sorry if I sounded a little too harsh!
-Hopefully you didn't take this all too seriously, I was just practicing on my critique skills!
2071604 My main issue is trying to do 2 different points of views, plus everytime I sit down to start writing my mind either goes blank on me or someone on skype calls or my parents need something, or we are going somewhere. Trust me its hard. And don't worry I like Constructive Critiques, it helps me alot Thank you. Don't worry though Today is the day where I work my tail off to get it done, Expect it by the end of the week or before, really depends on how stuff goes.
Thanks again and don't worry you have not offended me
--Gareth
So, this is the story that I had no idea that you had?
Damn. I need to pay more attention. I'm sorta kicking myself for mixing this.
Great story, and good premise chapters!
2086464 Don't feel bad dude... I still haven't read your stories yet *punches self in face*.
And Thanks #1 Fan
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No problem. I still think those that like my stories are a little crazy.
2091343 I am amazed that some people actually like my stories at all to be honest.
Almost all fanfics ,,Chrysalis in world of humans" are good, this here isn't exception. Realy good, I'm waiting for more.
2101613 *confused* Are you saying mine is better than others?
2102553
Eeyup.
Really good. And I hope your editor gets better soon.
2178989 Thanks And I hope so too, I don't know how long i will last with all these errors.. and to be honest... I don't think he wants to be my editor anymore either...
Great chapter!
but if you ask me, it needs a bit more improvement
The main reason why I think so is because of 2 things. This story needs a bit more purpose and pizzazz.Because of this, your characters seem a bit dull. This is because you didn't really give them a much of a goal. Chrysalis for example, would do anything to keep her subjects alive and well. Tisui means she would've tried to find a way back home by now. Your story says otherwise...
By the way, I could be your temporary editor
I have a bit of free time everyday, so I may be able to edit out a few grammar errors as well as suggest a few things this story may need. Just remember, I can only do this temporarily, so this offer may not last long...
Oh yeah and I hope your editor gets better too.
It really sucks when people get sick, they can barely ever do anything other than lie in bed.
I cannot help but feel that this is rather rushed. Three chapters and they already have the hots for each other? I'm not hating on your fic, man, but Chrysalis feels a tad OOC for me.
That was a jump in word count Gareth. Nice!
Anyway, nice chapter, and while it seemed a little rushed, it was awesome, as per usual.
hellos everyone. Mr. Editor here...
SEE WHAT I GO THROUGH!
anyway I'm still sick but from what i hear from others getting this bug its gonna stay for a few weeks more. so later today i'll see if i can go over the story with gareth.
as for a little explination for the rushed storyline...when gareht was proposing this idea in the first place its literaly all that the story line WAS.
i dont know if he has a new idea where to take it since then but at the time it was (in summery)
chrisalis ends up on earth because of the "love blast" of shineing and cadence
chrisalis sees human and stalks him
chrisalis and human fall in love.....
Edit: for those saying its moving to fast you have to remeber, chrisalis is pretty much trained in making others fall in love with her.
2181650>>2182575>>2182141 Hey Guys thanks for commenting, yes i do realize that it was rushed, that was sort of the idea, if you look at what The_Foreman posted, that's basically the idea of how it is. Don't worry I will try to slow this story down a bit. I got things planned for this
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Hooray, I'm useful!
2377698 Heh. Thanks again bro!
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2377702 No problem. /)*(\
Flippin awesome!
So glad to finnally see that you've added another chapter! I was beginning to think you've given up or something...
I guess I should've never doubted you
P.S. -don't recognize me? Remember the dude with the armored Rainbowdash avatar? Yeah that's me
Changed it since there was someone else with the exact same picture... but not with this one! I made sure that this was unique