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Rainbow Dash gets a letter from Spit Fire to discuss the opportunity of getting Rainbow on the Wonder Bolts. So in the three months training a slight "more than a friendship" thing comes out between Rainbow and Soarin. Making this really a dream come true.
Edit: The story has been completely edited and remade by me and my friend brony_4ever.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 7 )

That seemed a little cheesy at the end.:derpytongue2:

Way too short I guess I'll have to dis like this story:facehoof::fluttercry:

4181388 if you dislike this story... Just remember that I am an American airman, guardian of freedom and justice... Mother Bucker...

I'd have to stay that you did an outstanding job on this one-shot story of yours, but maybe it be a good idea to fix just one sentence in the chapter which happens to be somewhere in the dialogue. And what also should help with the ending, try being more detailed when saying:

They felt like the whole universe has melted into nothing. They felt that the only existence was each other. They felt that as long as they had each other, nothing else in the world mattered.

It be a good idea to work on punctuation in those last few remaining sentences, it should help. Sorry if my feedback is a little undetailed for some reason, maybe I wasn't being specific enough.

~Exorcist Sango

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