1920485 I'm the editor for a story myself and even I make mistakes still so I tell the author to check one last time before posting the next chapter of his story. If the context of the story doesn't make sense yet that is how the editor put it, tell the editor the problem and fix it. I'm thankful when someone points mistakes out to me on my editing. If the editor gets upset, then you need someone else to do it.
After her first few beers, she and Rarity dragged an entirely willing Big Mac into a private room, where they proceeded to routinely fuck him until he passed out from exhaustion. Twilight groaned once again as the unicorns left the room, fluids dripping from their sensitive pussies.
I got from this that they both used their "marehood" for pleasure.
ok to give an insite of twilight and rarity i am doing 2 chapters to lead up how they came to be so keep your eyes peeled
awww .. That was sad
Question.
If Twilight and Rarity fucked Big Mac half to death then how did the rapist break her hymen? It no make sense...
Nice job on the first chapter.
1919333>>1919333 no idea trust me i got confused with hat my editior did
1920485 I'm the editor for a story myself and even I make mistakes still so I tell the author to check one last time before posting the next chapter of his story. If the context of the story doesn't make sense yet that is how the editor put it, tell the editor the problem and fix it. I'm thankful when someone points mistakes out to me on my editing. If the editor gets upset, then you need someone else to do it.
4 paragraphs in.....already face hoofing....
1920497 all in all even though some mistakes i love my story
1921285 Same here hence why I've already favorited it.
you didn't lie about applebloom
1921981 lol just u wait things get far worse like no joke
oh god why
1923357 ok next chapter soon
1920497 It was supposed to be that Twilight did the fellatio portion, while rarity did the dirty work. Or is fellatio dirtier? I don't know.
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I got from this that they both used their "marehood" for pleasure.
1950594 euyep lol
1952271 hopefully i get the next chapter from my editor
1950318>>1950318 no idea but cant wait for the next chapter
Am I the only one slightly confused by the fact that they 'nearly fucked him to death'. But the rapist broke her hymen?
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Well the hymen doesn't have to break during sex. If you take your time and get the girl aroused enough her hymen can remain intact.
Edit: I just realized I answered a comment from 5 years ago.