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It's been 4 years since the Halo incident, 4 years since anyone has seen the Master chief and his AI companion Cortana. But when The ship they are on is boarded by the Covenant, Cortana revives the Master chief so they can escape. But things don't go as planned when they find themselves floating around a forerunner planet and it just so happens that this forerunner planet is Equestria... [Cover art made by myhe01]

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this seems like it will be the greatest and best cross over of all time. :pinkiehappy:

Good job my friend, thank you for showing me this site and I am looking forward to more of you glorious works. :derpytongue2:

1894311 your welcome man, enjoy the greatest site ever! :pinkiehappy:

1894368 OMG this song is amazing! ty for sharing this with everyone! :pinkiehappy:

Not bad, overall. Its good that someone is writing a Halo 4 story that will be sticking for the most part, TO HALO 4. That is not to say that is has to be tightly constricted to Halo 4, but if a person is going to do a crossover with an established storyline, its best to keep true to the actual story of the game as much as possible. Yes, I know that things would have to be changed given that this is an MLP crossover, mind you, but over-all the deviations that would be necessary should not drown out the overall flow to the original game story.

In other words, if this is going to be a Halo 4 story with MLP elements, I am going to pretend that I am playing the game in that whatever is added here will just be additions and not going to overall change the story or move it in a different direction. The MLP elements should supplement Halo 4's story, not the other way around.

Being that I said that, I am eager to see where this heads to. I will not fav until I see a chapter or two down the line, but I will keep an eye on this. :ajsmug:

God damn you good sir. Because of you, I almost went out and bought Halo 4. Your telling of the beginning of the game made me want to go get it. Then I remembered, "I'm not even a fan of Halo."

This is very good. quick question; Does Celestia and Luna know about the humans and the forerunners?

1894397 1894421 Wow these comments are already making me think that this fic was a good choice! ty these comments are really lifting my spirits to the max!

hmmm, looks interesting. i think i'll follow

I'm a big halo fan, so you better not disappoint. now if you'll excuse me, im off to replay halo 4 again

1894450 considering how old they are, i wouldn't be surprised if they did know, but i think it would be more interesting if they didn't

1894450 I'd say best if they did not. In fact, what I would do, for the most part, is just have the planet have the armored outer shell of Requiem, just like in the original game. Next, what I would do is simply have Equestria be a part of Requiem in a part that was sequestered off from the rest of the Forerunner structures and installations on the planet. The skyline is simply made normal to the ponies from the rest of the planet by a Forerunner Dazzler that would cloak the sky around them. Now, Celestia and Luna control night and day through the manipulation of the nearby Forerunner light towers through their genetic link to the night and day systems for the Equestrian sector of Requiem. The ponies have no idea of what is going on around them, and then John and the Covies crash, disrupting the Dazzler that cloaked Equestria, after which they begin the events of Halo 4, have their meet and greets, and then whatever from there.

Take as much as you want from my idea, though that is something I would try to do myself.

1894489 By the way, I still EXPECT for the planet to be referred to as REQUIEM. THAT is something I cannot compromise on, and will instantly downvote if that is changed. The Forerunner installation is known as Requiem, though the Equestrians can be confused and call it Equestria, but the planet's official Forerunner designation, being that its a Forerunner installation this version of Equestria is on, its only fitting to call it by its Forerunner name.

1894444Well it is a good story. But would you mind telling me a bit about the game? In a PM, mind you I don't want spoilers in the comments.

Princess Luna had given her the task to study tonight's star fall

SO MUCH CLICHE THERE!



very well written though so i am willing to look past that :pinkiehappy: I LOVE IT :pinkiehappy:

Hmm interesting... but then again a lot of Halo stories have Master Chief make peace and/or get beaten by the ponies, but I will follow.

1894737 The master chief can never be beaten by small ponies however powerful they may be John has years of combat experience. NOBODY CAN BEAT HIM.

Dis looks like its gun be gud, but for the love of god don't have the chief get beaten by any ponies easily. He is a god damned human supersolider who has defeated some of the most powerful enemies in the entire galaxy, a galaxy which only exists because he saved it. Who gives a fuck about magic when you can shoot puny ponies in the face.

Bye

Will follow for now. I will give my thoughts as more chapters are made. But for now, just keep two things in mind:

1. Originality is key

2. Don't rush, whatever you do.

My first reaction: oh look another Halo fic:applejackunsure:
After reading: OH MY GOG UPDATE FASTER:pinkiehappy:

This is just a random bit of Halo 4 fact. Requiem (for many that do not know and this is canon.) is the former headquarters of the Forerunner military. For those that can't seem to quite grasp what that means, it means that this planet is the equivalent of the Pentagon and the mountainous Norad Air Force base combined for the Forerunner Military, and the Didact assumes the military commanding role similar to that of the U.S. president (total control of ALL military assets.)

In other words requiem is basically a Forerunner "Reach", correct?:trixieshiftrightl

View point: third person, Cortana

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Nope.

1898767 Why not? Is there something wrong with that? Like i said in the author's notes don't just be a dick and tell me NOPE or YOU SUCK tell me why you think this.

1899041
You're telling us what character and perspective are going to be at the beginning of the scene. That tells me a lot about your story.

1899054 as a wise person once said "Never judge a book by it's cover." In other words you should read it but because of one little thing you are automatically assuming something about the story and not reading it. I'm sorry you don't like how I do the perspective thing but that's just how I wrote it. Good day *tips hat*

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I did read it. That's why I don't like it.

1894754 I like the way you think! Thumbs up and a fave! I am very much enjoying dis story. Pls continue. P.S Only a few errors, that I can see.

1895288 Not even Master Chef can fight the epicness that is Pwnies! :flutterrage::pinkiecrazy::ajsmug::rainbowdetermined2::twilightangry2::duck:

Also this comment is Nicholas Cage. :trollestia:

Suspicious... but I shall monitor for now.
Halo crossovers are a dime a dozen on this site. But the few good ones are worth their weight in Energon.

1900544 Thanks! It's true though, The only person that can beat master chief is master chief :trollestia:

Well, this is certainly interesting:trixieshiftright: Keep up the good work, I will be watching from the shadows:rainbowdetermined2:
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usually i don't like crossovers, especially Halo, but when i read this it really makes me want to read more. :heart:

Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

alright, after playing Halo 4, i can see why this would make sense. Considering that the planet is layered, then luna could make the stars through a program while celestia can move the sun the same way... Clever Author :trixieshiftleft:

So here is chapter 2 of our adventure I hope you all enjoyed it! Also a very big thank you to Salted Pingas for being my editor.

i like that you did not use "master chief just happens to land in the everfree forest" cliche

1936369 Yeah THAT place... Ugh after the 20th time seeing him land there It just got old

1936383 i know right just by you doing that i can tell this is going to better then most

1936383
i agree why does almost every HIE fic start with the human landing in everfree forest people need to be more original
great fic so far by the way looking forward to more

Very good! If you need a pre-reader, or any other kind of help, I wil gladly will help!

1936383
yeah, i have seen not only master shief land there, but every other fan fiction that features hie land the human or goup of humans in that damn forest

1936933 because it explains the lack of populace. This guy's just doing the other option of pulling his crash site out of his plot (not that one, the other one). Really, there are plenty of other locations to use, like the northern wastes for instance, but it always has to be near ponyville.

so is celestia and Luna a type of monitor or do ponies live of requiem without knowing there in a forerunner planet. if they are monitors they should be like greetings reclamier how may we be of assistance and they bow to him and every pony is like WTF

I like how you used a place that sounds like the actual crash in Halo 4. this means the continuity could be more like Halo 4 with MLP as a side. im looking forward to more. keep it up :twilightsmile:

1937392 All i'm going to say for now is that the ponies DO NOT know they live on a forerunner planet. they also have a theory about aliens. :pinkiehappy:

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