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You must have enemies working behind the scenes of reality. How else would you explain managing to jump start existence and slide sideways through space before landing unceremoniously in a magical world of ponies! Now almost three years have gone by and you find yourself as the owner and proprietor of The Simple Pleasures, a one stop shop for all things tactile. Using your own brand of magic, you soon become well known throughout the kingdom for delivering an unforgettably relaxing, and often times sensual, experience to an ever expanding list of clients. So take the time to treat yourself.t Trust me when I say you're in good hands.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 16 )

Hm, interesting. Lets see where this leads to, shall we?

ERMAGERD.

The only author I'll read 2nd person from.

Not bad so far, not bad at all.

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Looking good so far I'd say:twilightsmile:. Looking forward to seeing what this one will be like.

But just curious about one thing. You're getting this story started now and if the title has anything to do with what happens in the story... Why 3 years after arrival? Seems like a long time for things to get into full swing :derpyderp1:.

All I'm saying is that, the timeline/time-frame seems odd to me. Like too much time was spent idle (story plot wise) But anyways, only time will tell and events explained XD I think I'm just thinking too far ahead of myself :twilightblush:.

Looking froward to the next chapter, good to see you back to writing! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for reading so far! This first chapter was meant as nothing more than an introduction to the protagonist and his place in town. I purposely wanted to have the three year gap in time so that the main character's relationships with Equestria's citizens seemed more realistic. It didn't seem right to just tag along straight out of the gate with his story because relationships as deep as I intend to describe don't just pop up over night :raritywink:

You slipped into past tense in the first few chapters.

I had a strong de ja vu near the end when you mentioned the fire crackling. Dunno what that was all about.

But hey, good chapter. Oh and that bit about predator and prey. Ha. Ha. I see what you did there. :raritywink:

Oh and NNNOPE :eeyup: Last chapter of Teeth was 2800 words.

You trace your fingers in figure rights lightly

eights?

But word-substitutions aside. Wow, this was quite the romantic evening. Wintery outside, fire crackling, cozied up to the fire.. Like something out of one of those saucy novels at Rarity's place. Heh. I'm also not surprised he's a masseuse (the man with the magic hands). Lotus must be green with envy at his natural ability to reduce ponies into a delightfully quivering mush of happiness in his hands. Heck, I bet he's the only creature in all of Equestria that can shut Pinkie Pie up (once he gets his hands on her). :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks for catching that! I've been typing this on my tablet using a simplified version of Word, so I'm surprised it wasn't worse! I'm glad you found my first real stab at romance to be passable! And yes, I'm sure Pinkie will be left speechless at some point in the future :pinkiehappy:

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Oh hell that's what I get for bare minimum proof reading on this lol! Glad the fire bit made you feel a bit, and yes, good catch on the predator/prey! Couldn't help myself! You're right! Guess I'll need to out do that with the next chapter of this then!

Nice "stab" man! (if you know what I mean:raritywink:)

I'd say you pulled it off pretty well. :twilightsmile: Really looking forward to MOAR:rainbowkiss:.

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Thanks I appreciate it! I should have the next chapter out in the next few days, so MOAR is on its way!

I do enjoy a good massage ... fic.
This seems innnteresting. I'll be keeping an eye on it.

Moar!

Thumbs up, but not favin quite yet, if you can keep this up for another chapter, I'll fave this as well. :trollestia:

I'm such a perv but your descriptions is so good, I wish it was mature rated rather than teen. :twilightblush:

This was pretty nice. Sensual without going into sexual. Upvoted!

APS

:rainbowhuh: This story reminds me of Coranth's "pony petting" short stories

I don't suppose a moar at this point will help?

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