Choice. Everypony faces it, most choices are easy and simple to make. But some? Some can change your life forever.
Just a little one shot I wrote to help get me back into writing. Just a little scene between everypony's favorite musical couple as one of them makes a choice. Hit kind of a block there in my other story but I'm still working on it and hope to have the next chapter out for it soon.
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1,111 words? Impressive! *To Read*
I liked it! Your storytelling is simple and easy to understand. Though we don't know who the protagonist is (though we know who our ponies are), it doesn't matter, because the story doesn't need to know. At the end, we still don't know who our characters truly are as individuals, but for a short story like this, it doesn't matter.
I'm not particularly a huge fan of the pairing, but I'll say that I always thought that Vinyl would be the one to propose to Octavia. Then again, your story makes sense. Vinyl would be the one to run away from relationships.
I just don't know.
Overall, well done. Hoorah.
- Church
This shit. I like it.
Exceptionally well done! 4 Stars
Great story. I was reading it as though it were Octavias view. It was great. Short and sweet and full of feels. Keep it up.
Really good story, I liked it a lot.
I was a little confused, though, I thought it was Octavia who was telling the story up until the end.
Story wise, I liked it, but what threw me off were some of the grammitacal errors in this. There were more than a few comma splices, some of the words Vinyl used sounded off, and there was one formatting error right at the end.
Please don't be discouraged by this, I see a lot of potential in your future works and having the proper grammar will only help get some of the sticklers like me.
Keep at it!
I had been reading a twilight/trixie fic in another tab and forgot that this wasn't the same pairing. It worked surprisingly well as one of those fics until "Octy" was mentioned. Very well done. Thank you.
This is not a story.
It's a very touching ending of one, or a start of one, possibly a bit from the middle.
But this is not a story.
But whatever, thumbs up and a stache.
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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it, I tried to flip the usual story of Vinyl being the one to propose around.
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Aw, you're going to make me blush! I'm glad you took a chance and enjoyed it so much! I'm actually really considering expanding this and making it into a full blown story.
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Thanks!
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You're too kind!
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Hee hee hee! That was my intent! Glad to see it worked.
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Yep! I'm a clever sneaky pony and got everyone to think it was Octy then BAM! Switcheroo!
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Yeah, I have some trouble with comma's and the like. This didn't go through my editor but I'm glad you enjoyed it despite the mistakes!
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Huh, that's pretty cool. I can write Twixie fics without even meaning to! Good to hear you liked it even though it turned out to be an OctaScratch one.
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Yeah, it's really more of a snippet isn't it? I'm thinking about writing more and fleshing it out, put up some more back story. We'll see what happens.
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I saw this comment and what story it was to and was like "Fuck, what one was that?" but then I saw my comment and remembered what one it was and how awesome it was.
I would love to see that. With the quality and skill of this one I have no doubt it would be great. I eagerly await it. (Cuz we all know you WILL do it.
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Also, you may want to space that.
I loved it!!