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If I were a pegasus... I would relive those days of glory. I would relive those days of my foalhood. I would take more chances. I would take more risks. If I were a pegasus, I wouldn't be here right now. I'd be scraping my wings against the sky, beating them against the air with purpose. I would be chasing a dream, a dream of someone near and dear. If I were a pegasus... I would have you.

SkyFy by unitoone

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This is something I had in my head. It is sort of reminiscent of n's Happy Birthday To You, which has been a inspiration of mine since the beginning. This one didn't take much doing, but I hope that it was worth reading.

- Church

My "Dead Pegasus" jacket exists for a reason, you know.

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It certainly is worth reading! Very different from most of what one finds here. It flows really smoothly and quickly, which surprised me. I actually found the words going by me so fast that I had some trouble remembering them. By the time I got towards the end, I had resolved that I'd have to re-read the story... and then I got to the last line and I was like :rainbowderp: "you got me!"

In shot, it was pretty cool seeing my exact sentiment being reflected back at me, and I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you!

I'm curious if you had any context in mind when you were writing this. It seems like it would fit really well in your "Who Makes the Wind Blow?" stuffs, but I'd need a confirmation from you about that before I'd let myself believe it :twilightsmile:

Wow..... this is REALLY GOOD.:pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Twifight Sparkill deleted Dec 23rd, 2012

1843291 :moustache:

1843294 Thanks for the kind words! It did seem like it flowed quickly, didn't it? I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing yet. I don't know.

And, to be fair, it is sort of Who Makes the Wind Blow?ish, even though it really isn't, you know? The story is entirely different. But I think that OC tag sort of makes it so.

1843299 Thank you for reading :twilightsmile:

Damn you... damn you for making me feel the feels :raritydespair:

... But I love you because you did :raritystarry:

Truly beautiful :heart:

1843928 Gee, thanks for the comment :twilightsmile:

I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

1843897 Keeps a reminder, you know?

1844166 Thank you for the kind words :heart:

I know the ending was foreseeable. I didn't truly try for any sort of plot twist. I just wanted to write it down, and honestly, I wrote it with a sort of "ho hum" mentality, so I wasn't so sure how it would transfer onto the page. But thank you for your comment. I'm happy that you enjoyed the story.

1844256 it keeps a reminder, yes yes...

Thanks for reading, btw, even if it wasn't so great.

1843897
Yeah, I figured that it wasn't a sequel or anything, but I felt that it continued that wistful tone and the whole "self-worthlesness/powerlessness" motif that stuck with me in Who Makes the Wind Blow?. You'll have to pardon me if it's some kind of undercurrent in all of your writing or something. After reading Who Makes the Wind Blow? and lovin' it I downloaded the rest of your stuff, but I'm reading all of these things in order, and so have to finish the rest of Pen Stroke's stuff and then theswimminbrony's stuff before I get to your backlog. I'll get to it, though! Really soon, too!

1844719 You know... starting out on this site... I didn't think my name would even be in the same paragraph as those two superstars. Perhaps it still shouldn't be, but I'll take what I can get. You downloaded my stuff? My stuff? Hm. Now I feel all weird and stuff.

I'm a wistful person, and a zany person, so what I have in my arsenal is what I put on the page. Thank you for reading my stuff, though I'll admit, I get better as I go along.

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Hahah! Well, unfortunately for you I downloaded it in the order of oldest-to-newest! Though I don't think that I've downloaded anything past Cloud Fishin' yet... I should fix that!

(On a side note, let me tell you that you really know how to write a description! I've been loathe to start Pen Stroke's stuff because Past Sins is such a huge read and a lot of his best stuff is crossovers with other works, but I finally pushed myself into it because your description for Packge in the Rain made me want to get to as soon as possible!)

That... Wow.

1844629 It didn't make me wish I was dusted, and it kept me in high selves, so all in all, not that bad.

:raritycry:THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL IT SHOULD BE SOLD ON STREET CORNERS! DANG, THOSE FEELS!!!:pinkiesad2:

1844930 Thanks for reading :twilightsmile:

1845967 Thanks for reading! I'm happy that you enjoyed the read. I just had the thought in my head 'n stuff.

My god. Words. Words are what I do not have. That was beautiful.

Rather poetic. Loved it.

1847796 Thanks a bunch :twilightsmile:

I'm glad you liked it.

1848619 Say, thanks! I appreciate the read :heart:

Reminds me a little of Dr. Suess. But with a little... Extra. Fav'd.

1851161 Thank you! I appreciate the read :heart:

Wow! Awesome! but.....who's it about?

1853597 It's OC. Nopony in particular, really. :derpytongue2:

I read Golden Gate as Golden Gate Bridge, so that gave me the impression this was about a human on earth, no ponies whatsoever except in the imagery, and "you" (not "I") committed suicide by jumping off the bridge.

1871660 Hm. Well, that's saddening to think about. It is true that the story is loosely based on ponies. But when you think about it, there are a lot of stories like that. If I would have had the main character be Rainbow Dash or something, crying over Pinkie Pie, then you might not have thought that.

Thank you for reading though, and that observation is accurate :heart:

If I were a Pegasus... I could catch you when you fall, And you'd never have to know what it's like to hit The bottom because I would always be there to carry you back up again.

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