• Member Since 31st Jul, 2012
  • offline last seen Feb 27th, 2018


Eh, I'll do this later.


We all know the story of a human ending up in the land of Equestria.
Battles of magic, facing monsters and villains, self-discovery, friendship, and eventually a chance to go home...

But what if he didn't go home? What if he stayed and made a life there, in his new equine form?
This, is the end of that story.

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That was an... interesting read :twilightsheepish:

There was only one or two small mistakes, but nothing to complain about, since the story was good....

If only you actually made a story showing beforehand, because reading this one makes me wonder what the whole adventure was about with the human becoming a pony and his adventure that he was fated to have; or perhaps... that was your true hidden attentions that you had for us readers... again, a nice read there :twilightsmile:

I remember this story. Doesn't matter how I came back here, but it's quite funny. At the time, I thought I didn't know if I liked it or not and wasn't sure what to say in a comment.

And now that I'm back here, I figured out that all I remember about that story is:
- that it was a very good concept
- that I have a genuine smile on my face when I think about the story

So I guess it's enough for me to say that you wrote a good story, one who only brings back good memories.

On the details part (because I read it once again):
- I would like to know what the thought was behind marrying (or making a couple) out of the human/pony and Twilight.
- I feel strange that the human/pony doesn't show any kind of fear about leaving Equestria (well, he does by hiding it behind confidence) when we get a "for the time being" from Twilight's part. Is it conscious? What were you aiming for?
- minor detail, but, being a Spike fanatic (well, maybe not fanatic), would it have been possible to give Spike a bigger part than just being a pretext for the introduction of the story? Or was that a symbol I didn't understand? (Like, for example, Spike being the old life and the daughter being the new life)

In any case, I wanted to tell you that your story is from the kind that brings a smile when you think about it. That felt important enough to make a comment about it.

“But I didn't. I may not believe in destiny, or fate, but I was still brought here for a reason. [...]

Isn't this sentence contradictory? :rainbowhuh:

5511874 He is saying he believes in free choice over predestination, but he still thinks he ended up in Equestria, not by chance, but because of some outside influence. It's like a person believing they will change the world someday. It doesn't mean they are fated to do so, it's their choice which will affect things, but they still think they will make an important choice. Pure destiny removes the freedom of choice.

You just finished every HIE I've read on hiatus. Good job, you probably put them to shame too.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

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