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He guarded this city almost all of his life, which ended the same way his father's did - by sacrificing himself to protect everyone. Having said farewell to his beloved sister, he was about to move on, but not before splitting a fragment of his soul, creating another Soul Dew in the place of his father's destroyed one, so that part of him could continue to protect what mattered to him most: his sister, and the city. What he didn't know, however, was that this process could lead to... unexpected results.

Edited by Lazygamer313
Proof-read by: Zaleros, Vrilix
Former proof-readers: Defias

Chapters (17)
Comments ( 329 )

Holy crap... Latius in Equestria?
I will read the SH:yay: out of this!

do go on, I wish to read more.
:yay:

Latas in equestia... You better make this good cause i want to read this!

Combining the one Pokemon movie that made me cry and MLP? Go on my friend.

SO ......... is every chapters gonna be around one thousand words ?

Daaaaawwwwww.... I love the sibilings. Latias beingmy fav.

Hey persons! *poke* I wants more!!

I like this so far, but make sure to space your paragraphs. Makes it hard to read if you don't. Also when Twilight said he's new here you spelled New as now. FAVORITE and LIKE. Can't wait for update.:heart:

I LOVE IT!!!! :pinkiehappy: KEEP IT UP :yay:

just found this an am exited to read it

Pinkie will be the death of him...

More. MORE. MOAR!
MOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAR!!!!!

Well, I'd say that Latios' mission is a complete success - he now has 4 new friends, and in about 5 hours (or 2 minutes, depending on if they step into the Corner on the first stop) he's gonna be swamped in 'em.

Am I a little late on this?

#idunnolol

Regardless, it actually doesn't look half-bad, and with 'dem ratings? How could it?

I'm a Pokemon fan like several of your comment-iers, you see, and, given that the movie about the two Eon Pokemon was one of the first I saw, this should be interesting.

I, too, have a Pokemon fic in the works, although, it's about the Weather Trio.

This looks good, I'd hope to see more from you :twilightsmile:

Good like all your other stories, although with the same kind of mistakes as usually ^_^ but that's okay still good story looking forward to more of this and your Naruto crossover, and of cause you WOW story. :twilightsmile:

This was a great chapter. I can't wait for the next update!:pinkiehappy:

LOL Latios you need to try to make friends:twilightsheepish: more times

You imbecile!!!

Latios is my favorite Pokemon and I'm trying to use Synchronise Alakazam from Trade to obtain the Timid with Alert to sound until I need a darn Hippowdon.

Stupid Random Swarm Outbreak..:twilightangry2:

This is one of the very few story's that a fist pump the air when I see a update. Srsly keep it up I love it :twilightsmile:

I'd just like to say... I called it. Latios now has 6 friends. Now, for Twilight to do some kinda mind-reading spell...

Mind reading Latios.. Would be a fail spell.

Will latios reveal his true form to his house new friends?:rainbowderp:

Calling it now: Fluttershy will be the first to know the true Latios.

2018743 seconded
and favoriting (please correct if mis-spelled)

I hope to see more of this some time soon.:pinkiesmile:

If you dare quit I will hunt you down and ask you very kindly to continue...:yay:

Comment posted by Cryo shadow deleted Mar 18th, 2013

i am sad at the fact this has not been touched in months :raritycry:

2319448 Heh, sorry about that, but I'm currently focusing on Rebirth of the Damned, which finally reached the Crystal Empire, and as you can imagine, I've been dying to write that one down since November. Maybe after it's finished.

Plus, I'm not entirely sure what to do with next chapter. I have the general idea, of course, so no worries about me forgetting about it anytime soon. But I would prefer to write a great chapter after such long time, which is totally my fault, so you will have to be patient.

On the plus side, my WoW paid time is nearing end, and even though I recently became acquinted with Starcraft II, I expect to have more free time soon.

This is a promising story you have going here, and I'm keen to see where this goes. One thing to be mindful of however, is your grammar and vocabulary. I don't mean to nit-pick here, but there are several minor, but otherwise avoidable errors littered about, and on a professional level, such things tend to sour an otherwise acceptable read. For example, the one that stuck out the most to me was this:

“I will not let some random pony outflight me!” Rainbow thought with rage as she tried to fly even faster.

The word here is out-fly, not outflight.

“I meant if you’re good in flying.” she explained, rolling her eyes.

"...if you're good at flying", would probably fit better.

All in all, there is little else to be said from me. I don't know much about you or any of your other stories, but my recommendation is to get yourself an editor to check for any problems such as these and perhaps clean up some of the more... amateurishly-worded sentences, for lack of better terminology. It's a decent effort, and I encourage you to continue on with this, but there is room for improvement.
That's my two bits. :ajsmug:

It's okay, this story is worth the wait.

I love this story :pinkiehappy:. Wish it was a bit longer though :twilightsheepish:

Good to see more of this, a few minor mistakes but noting to bad, looking forward to see what happens next.

Welcome back to this story:twilightsmile: Can't wait for the next:pinkiehappy:

This is gunna be good.:pinkiecrazy:

Require MOAR!!!:pinkiecrazy:

MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

YAY new chapter :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Dashie... that was just... just... :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Keep up the great writing.

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