The kerbals have discovered a mysterious wormhole past the orbit of Jool. They sent probes through and discovered an inhabited planet at the center of a seemingly impossible Geocentric solar system. And what better way to learn about it and its inhabitants than by sending Bill, Bob, and Jebediah Kerman? What will the kerbals think about the colorful ponies, and vice versa?
Author's Note: Characters will be added as they appear. I added the human tag because kerbals are humanoid and anthro-pony stories have the human tag too. If a mod feels I shouldn't have it though, just tell me and I'll remove it. I'm working on a better cover rt, expect it to be done soon.
Disclaimer: Kerbal Space Program is owned by Squad. MLP: FIM is owned by Hasbro. This story is non-profit.
Wow. It seems that eventually everything will be crossed-over with MLP:FiM... well any-who, this looks interesting. I'll be keeping an eye on this fic'.
Kerbals? The fuck are those? All we got our dead hopes and tumbleweeds here...
My favorite space program.
I was waitning for this to happen I NEED TO READ NAOW!
One word. YES!!!!
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they are the species from the kerbal space program.
An alright indie game where you control rocket formation and rocket piloting as green marshmellow people
You seem to have some problems with tense, and the storyflow's off.
Otherwise, you've captured the Kerbals perfectly.
God damn you, sir. God damn you and your ability to publish shit mere minutes before mine is done. God damn you.
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Don't worry about the storyflow. It's going to slow down by next chapter. I just had to introduce everything here for the story to work (though I agree it could still use some work).
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It was totally on purpose.
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Part of the problem is that certain things need a much more in-detail introduction. A lot could be added.
For example, you could start with a short history of the Space program. It doesn't have to be overly detailed, it can be short, and pretty vague, but it serves to set up the story, and make the whole endeavour appear grander. Jebediah and Co's "testing of ground conditions" could be expanded on, as it is something pretty hillarious. Same thing with Luna, and with the probe's appearance in orbit.
Speaking of orbits...
Some corrections.
(I'm really, really sorry if I seem obsessive, but this is something I really, really want to see done well.)
You also need more descriptive text, particularly in regards with why something is happening and what is going on. It helps with immersing the reader, and provides him/her with a better experience.
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Thanks for the help. I think I have a good idea for the intro. I'll see what I can do with expanding the team's intro. Don't worry about Luna, she's a major focus of the next chapter. Her part here is about her discovery, her immediate opinion, and to set a timeline in the pony universe. And thanks for the corrections.
Edit: Took a while, but I added an intro. Hopefully it's good and does its job.
YES YES ALL MY YES THAT HAS EVER EXISTED
One word. YES!!!!!!
One final nitpick!
I recomend you check the KSP Wiki. It's got info on the planets of the Kerbin solar system, and I think that Laeve has no oxygen. Also, this thing is extremely useful.
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I just checked. It says Laythe does have oxygen, but jet engines work at slightly lower efficiency. I doubt it would have oxygen in real life due to its seeming lack of life (cyanobacteria for example) to give it the oxygen, but it's not like I know what's in the oceans. You're probably thinking of Eve, which doesn't have oxygen. Also, thanks for the link, I'll be sure to check it out.
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Then there might be lower atmospheric pressure there. Also, check the temperature.
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Crap, Laythe's max temperature is 43 degrees. And I don't think tanning with his suit on would work well...
YES YES YES YES YES
Yay!
Bill! Stop freaking out! They are a (mostly) peaceful race! And Jebediah! Stop being stupid!... Bob, keep doing what you are doing. You are the only (relatively) smart Kerbal on board.
That was great -- especially what happened to Prince Blueblood!
If you dont make the chapters appear in my fav box then you WILL be dead.
This is nice and original. Please, continue.
This is Major Jeb to Ground Control. I'm stepping through the door.
This is good -- keep it up!
And yeah, school filters suck.
Sorry you gotta deal with all that crud.
I approve of this fic. Sorry that I have nothing more to contribute other than my honest encouragement. :)
Well, glad to see the Kerbals treat safety just as seriously on an alien world as they do on their home planet.
I forgot to comment before, I always do that. But my reaction when I found this was:
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I'm going to add this to Game Crossovers. Is that ok?
Please don't tell me this is dead. I love this so far.
I just discovered this game today by watching Markiplier's videos, and then after using the search feature on Fimfiction, I found this story.
Do not stop writing.
(Also, I think that the filter in your school is blocking this website because of the "unmentionable" items on here. Mabye you should talk to the administrator of your school's web service so that you can grant permission.)
(Or something.)
Dead, the story is dead.
I must list this as Dead Story # 65,395,123
More!
I love this story, please for the love of Celestia continue it.
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I think I may have to make a replica of "Byss" in my save using 7 Roche mass simulators. It would be hard.
Guys this story died along time ago.
GET ME MORE OF THIS STAT
..why has nothing exploded yet?
Please spray me with more Kerbal goodness! My body is ready!
I don't know why, but i seen to be running into a lot of stories that feel rushed, even if it's only a little bit quick.
That being said, this is the first time I've seen one that was written well. The characters are fleshed out, the plot doesn't take abrupt turns, the grammar is near perfect.
I think if the events in these few chapters were drawn out further, the story could be borderline perfect.
Dude, why is this behaving like it's dead. It's the only KSP crossover on this site! CONTINUE!
Don't let this story die!
Everyone knows Kerbals don't do preflight checks. That's why the sticky note in the lander can says to update the software.
More!
FINALY THIS IS GOING ON MY TRACKING LIST
since no one ever does this LAST
Tracking
Yay! KSP crossover!
i'm still trying to figure out how i didn't think of this
"DISCORD, for HARMONY's sake, what possessed you to bring The Smooze to a Gala?!?"
"Um... It seemed like a good idea at the time?"
"By the way, Sister, you wanted to see me about something?"
"Did I? Oh, yes I did... Um... Goodness, I forgot why! Don't worry, Tia, I'm sure that it isn't important."
Luna scowled at the three little green men brought to her by her batpony guards. "Aliens! You were to have suffered a punishment most foul for your defilement of our sacred night! However! It has come to our attention that you have given my dissolute nephew a scare that he'll never forget. For this, all your crimes are pardoned and we are having a special medal struck for your services to all ponykind!"
Jeb turned to Bill. "See, I told you that I could talk our way out of this!"
Yeah... I'd keep everypony at least 100m back from the lander. If that thing is typical Kerbal tech, the fuel cells or the LH2 tanks might decide to blow up because... well, because.
So, was that a Changeling? If it was, Chrysalis will soon be begging the Princesses to protect her from the friendly lunatics whose planet she tried to invade.