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All his life he wanted one thing: to be with the woman he loved. But the cruel reality had taken her from him, so he wanted to change this reality. He wanted to crush it, and replace it with a dream, where everything would be perfect. At least, he thought so, for in the most important hour, where he's goal neared, he failed, and another showed him what him another way... but that way had also been taken from him.
Now he finds himself in another world, the reminders of his failures everywhere on his new, altered body, especially his rump. Will he find what he's really been searching for?

Edited by Lazygamer313
Proof-read by: Zaleros, Vrilix
Former proof-readers: Defias

AUTHOR'S NOTES:
1. The first two chapters are from the cancelled version of this story, I didn't delete them as they were quite popular.
2. Point three explains my reasons for changing for changing it.
3. The current story starts from point four.
4. Sorry for confusion


CANCELED:
A great disaster is about to befall Equestria. A tragedy so great, that evan a Death God is concerned. Unable to interfere directly, Death God is forced to rely on another. A human, whose soul is so conveniently trapped in his stomach. But will that be enough? Will he save Equestria?

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 85 )

Edit. Got myself mixed up, I thought you meant the Third Hokage. Going with the first will be interesting, because we know next to nothing about him. I'll reserve judgement on those eyes though. Would have been interesting enough with just his wood style.

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No, it's the First one, Hahirama Senju. The third was Hiruzen Sarutobi.

Ha! Ya got me as I was editing! Quick of the mark, almost like a... ninja!

When I saw this I was thinking you would have sent Minato to Equestria, bit of a pleasant surprise that the First is who you are using. One hell of an entrance, though giving him the Sharingan is rubbing me the wrong way.

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Sorry, but without the Sharingan, even he wouldn't have stand a chance against what is about to come... eventually :pinkiecrazy:

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I'll take your word for it, I just happen to see the Sharingan as a Deus ex Machina

Your choice of ninja caught me off guard, it also makes me happy in the pants. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm considering doing a future fanfic where Obito Uchiha is betrayed by Madara and is killed but ends up getting sent to Equestria. Anyways this fic is looking good.

Interesting. Hope he stays human though.

this is awesome :pinkiehappy:

update soon please

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Oh my, what a disturbing face indeed!

when i read the summary i thought you where going to send minato(that's naruto's father right?)

1846177 Minato is Naruto's father and I thought that too.... in some way....

Hmm interesting will read later to lazy to dive into it tracking:twilightsmile:

You need to write more. This story is interesting.

You need to write more. This story is interesting.

This is really, really good, but the only problem is the one month update. Try to update more, you'll get more attention and recognition, and I know as a writer, that when you are recognized and complimented, it will make you want to write more. You'll be motivating yourself, in a way, just indirectly. Try to update more. Besides that, this story is very, very good.

I'm going to add this to Anime crossovers, if that's alright with you.

who is he going to romance with celestia or twilight? only time will tell.

Makes more sense if he goes with Celestia with the current knowledge that is out.
He could ask the deathgod to let him live with her for eternity. Wish is still not made.

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At the moment he won't be able to make the continuous updates as he attends things he must see through on his side of things, mainly college as the finals are coming up to him.

Now don't get me wrong I like the way you set up this story but who you should've used Minato as the protagonist cause he was sealed in there too.

1962034 oh well. Hopefully all those things clear up, and then we can enjoy much more frequent updates. That would be good.

Can you please write more chapters???
The suspense is killing me.

2229047 Oh, right, I completely forgot to mention, I'm putting this story on hold until Hashirama isn't dead again in the manga, his newfound character development by Kishimoto has practically ruined for me most of my plans. Besides, I am curently focusing on "Rebirth of the Damned", my main story.

Are you going to continue the story?

2765389 Yes, definetly, although as I mentioned, the character of Hashirama in newer chapter made me change some plans. However, I think I know how to make this work... Anyway, I am more focused on my other stories, and I'm curently occupied with WoW, which makes writing difficult.

2229353 I have an idea, have him come form an ALTERNATE universe and then the story continues with noooOOOOoo problems :derpytongue2:

Another amazing story Borsuq, I kinda sad I haven't tried to read it till now. :pinkiesad2:

"Dragon!!!"

Everypony in Sugarcube Corner looked at Spike.

"What? It's not me."

That was the funniest thing I've read in a while.
:moustache:

Fuck yes he is overpowered! Give him a set of challenges that he can't brute force, we learned from the flashbacks that he wasn't the sharpest knife around so it shouldn't be hard.

whatever you feel is best but all the Kages are overpowered to a stupid degree, i would suggest Naruto but he's entering god tier very rapidly... unless you decide that his new pony body needs time to adjust thereby limiting him until he's ready? :unsuresweetie:

Don't ponify him, that usually ruins most HiE. I don't actually have any say, but it's just my opinion.

Funny thing is that I'm pretty much ok wirh everything you said except the ponified part. I know thqr you said it will work, but I just hate that in anime crossovers authors always seem to ponify the characters from the anime. If you truly think that it is a good Idea to do a ponification then go for it, but consider other options please

I would suggest Gaara for the fact he has an ultimate defense with good offensive abilities, but he can still struggle to certain degrees. That's my opinion on who should be taken to Equestria. It is ultimately up to you though. But in any case I will look forward to what will be done, and I wish you good luck :moustache:

Just delete the chapters you have and repost them here.

you could use the yellow flash?

Can you please not change the character into a pony.

I for one hope that you choose Nagato as the protagonist, as I haven't seen him as one yet and he is one of my favorite characters from the anime. It would be interesting how you go about it with him being crippled and all.

You could always just continue this one and when it's finished just write the other?

I'm hoping that you choose Minato as the new main character, but put him in a situation where his speed and seals just won't be effective (maybe the natural magic of the world disrupts his chakra flow?). It would be even better if you included Itachi in on it, as I think their personalities would get along together. But please, for the love of every thing that has ever been considered holy, don't make them into ponies. It's been done too many times in my opinion.

I suggest Nagato. I want to see how his ideals will clash with those of the ponies. Also, please reconsider ponfiying the character! It's a very common thing among anime writers.

Jiraiya is also one that could do this. I think it'd be funny for him to realize that he is in a world that doesn't have human women to perv on. He'd probably think he's in hell.

Hiruzen in equestria. Alternatively Ameyuri or Kushimaru. Hashirama was great to begin with, but buffing up hokage with sharingan :/ I would recommend you don't buff up characters that are already overpowered to begin with. From what I red so far you might as well done any one of Uchia in equestria, only with reduced emoness.
Also you could just write the fights from perspective of character fighting the Hashirama. That way you still get to see them struggling. Also you have forgotten about that he is in different dimension, and the rules of reality might not be same, and tings he meets use jutsu that are not based on anything hes seen before.

All that said fuck it. just write new story and post link to it from this one.

Younger Naruto would be great,or perhaps weakened Kurama?Perhaps both?

Honestly? Send in a female character, no one seems to pay them the attention they deserve so my suggestion is Tsunade, Kushina, or Sakura without ponyifcation

Personally, I would like to see Kimimaro. Don't ponify him, but get rid of his cursed seal. That way he isn't too over powered.
The main reason that I want to see him in Equestria is because his abilities would horrify the ponies and just because his powers are cool. :pinkiehappy:

Goddamn! This is fantastic! Reformed Obito being sent to Equestria, didn't see that coming. Fantastic chapter. :pinkiehappy:

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