Chapter 3 - We Don't Do Smooth Here
Dawn greeted the two mares in the bed with a gentle wash of light that bathed them as they slumbered. Due to their exhaustion, the realm of dreams refused to surrender its charges to the daylight just yet, and they both remained in place as the sun’s rays moved past the window and left them in peace. Twilight awoke to the sensation of warmth, wrapped up in something. She simply laid there, her mind’s gears slowly starting to turn as it went through the daily morning rituals to ease her into the realm of consciousness.
The warmth comforted Twilight for an unknown reason, for a brief period. At last the previous night’s activities came to bear at the center of her mind, following from the start of the party, to her ill received confession. With a gasp, her heart lurched, as she recalled Luna fleeing from her, and then her subsequent meltdown leaving her in the middle of the room on the floor. Yet, she was wrapped up in something warm, and it was the softness of her mattress that greeted her underside and not the cold wooden floor.
She moved to extricate herself from whatever had her wrapped up as her sight began to come into focus. A stray feather tickled her nose, causing her to halt all movement. Her gaze became clear as the rest of the morning gunk was removed from her eyes, and what greeted her vision set her on edge. Small rays of sunlight were filtered through midnight blue feathers, which were part of a wing connected to a mare laying next to her. There was only one individual with those colored feathers that had any remote business being in her home, and Twilight had been certain that, at the very least, their friendship had been shattered.
Twilight’s brain paused its morning routine, this deviation throwing a figurative wrench in the gears. The seconds ticked by without any outward reaction from the unicorn, until at last her brain and body caught up and got on the same wavelength.
“Ahhhhhh!” Twilight screamed as she attempted to jump out of bed, completely forgetting the covers above her as well as Luna’s wing. She ended up wrapped up even more within the blankets in the bed while the wing flexed to its full span, then retreated from her vision, quickly replaced with a bleary eyed alicorn.
“Twilight, are you alright?” Luna slowly replied, voice filled with concern. It was painfully obvious that she had just been awoken from her slumber due to the unicorn’s scream. She used her magic to help untangle the hapless mare from the covers and gently set her down on top of the now stripped bed.
“But - You -” Twilight was incapable of coherent speech, her panic from last night immediately surging to the forefront of her mind and leaving her a mess on the bed, eyes frantically searching around the room for a potential exit point. However, Luna’s position was just perfect within the room that she felt entrapped by the alicorn.
“Calm down, Twilight, yes it is me. I came back last night after your, er... Confession caught me completely off guard. I simply needed some time to gather my thoughts, I was not expecting such an event to occur.” Luna mumbled somewhat sheepishly at Twilight, looking in her general direction.
Twilight saw her lips moving, however she was unable to comprehend what Luna was saying, her brain locked into the fight or flight mode as her adrenal gland pumped copious amounts of adrenaline throughout her system. Having decided that flight was the better option, as the alicorn standing before her was extremely formidable, her eyes settled to the left of Luna on the staircase, and she tensed the calves in her hind legs, preparing to bolt.
Luna recognized that Twilight had entered full panic mode and was beyond words at the moment. At a loss of what to do, she went with the craziest plan in her mind. As Twilight began to dash off, she intercepted her love, and covered her with both of her wings, as she brought her front hooves around the other mare’s neck, hugging her tightly. She struggled in Luna’s grasp for a moment, but was unable to break out of the tight confines the larger alicorn had surrounded her in.
As the temporary rush of adrenaline finally crested and began to peter down, Twilight slowly began to regain control of herself. Shortly afterwards, she realized that she was being held and hugged by Luna in the middle of her room. It didn’t take much longer for her to realize what had ended her panic attack, and her cheeks, face, and much of her neck began to turn a bright cherry red as she blushed. She attempted to break free of the alicorn’s grasp, yet was still unable to do so.
“Luna, umm, you can let go of me now...” Twilight stammered out, her heart rate rising once again, but not from the effects of adrenaline this time as it threatened to tear itself loose from her ribcage. “I’m not dreaming, right?”
“No, Twilight, you most certainly are not. I will admit that your actions last night took me completely by surprise, I panicked myself and needed to go collect my thoughts and think a little. Honestly, I was quite scared.” Luna admitted to the mare as she relinquished her hold, and took a few steps back, allowing some room to come between them.
"I wanted to—"
"I'm so sor—"
Both mares began to talk at the same time, and cut off mid sentence as they realized that fact. Silence reigned for a few seconds as they looked towards each other, each one waiting for the other to speak first.
Luna was the first to say something, motioning with a hoof as she spoke. "Twilight, go on ahead first."1
"O-Okay... I'm sorry Luna, I shouldn't have dropped that on you like I did. I can understand if you don't want to see me for a bit, it was really nothing more than a passing dream really, I suppose... I mean, come on! Like I would ever have a chance anyways! I-I mean, I'm just a unicorn..." Twilight trailed off at the end, her voice dipping into a melancholic tone as she lowered her head towards the floor, away from the alicorn's deep rich blue eyes.
Luna let out a deep laugh after Twilight finished speaking, stepping forward and using her hoof to raise the other mare's head to look her directly in the eyes. "Twilight, whatever you do, never change please. You are completely mistaken, I must say; I was simply bested by your confession. I can handle all of the royal duties Tia has fostered upon me, yet one lovely mare bares her heart to me, and I flee with my tail between my legs." She let out a smile that warmed the unicorn through her entire being, rekindling her hope that she had believed shattered.
"I simply needed some time away, Twilight, and I sincerely apologize for leaving you in that state. Being your friend, I should have known what would happen when I left like I did." Luna sighed as she found a comfortable spot on the floor to sit down. "Please, sit with me for a bit while we talk."
Twilight levitated a few pillows from a corner of the room, and laid them out around the space already occupied by Luna before she rested on the floor herself. "Yeah, I kind of thought you were angry at me, I didn't realize that I had caught you off guard."
"Yes, well, you should know it does happen. I'm sure you've caught my sister off guard at least a few times during your tutelage. At least you didn't spout nonsense like 'don't banish me to the moon', or something equally nonsensical. I heard that enough in just my first few months back." Luna carried a humorous tone near the end as Twilight sheepishly brought up a hoof to scratch at the back of her head. She had been one of those ponies who had 'spouted such nonsense' at one point.
"Anyways." Luna adopted a serious note as she continued, "Before anything else is said, I have some things to tell you Twilight. First off, it has been a long time since I last had... Another. Somewhere along the lines of one thousand five hundred and fifty years, to be somewhat precise. I am always hard pressed for time, keeping these monthly visits alone is somewhat taxing. Not to mention the fact it is a bad idea for a relationship to get out, especially with how the press has evolved since my return. It is actually quite a pain in the flank all around to be blunt."
"I... understand Luna. Like I said, it was probably nothing more than a passing dream, and was rather silly of me. It probably wouldn't have even come to mind had I not drank all that cid—" Twilight began to reply to the alicorn, her mood somewhat downtrodden with forced acceptance of the situation, until she was cut off with a chaste kiss from Luna on her cheek.
"Oh, Twilight, I swear if something is not written down within a book, you will fail to understand it until it is explained to you. So, let me clarify this even further for you. Are. You. Prepared to deal with all of these hassles? I need to know if you are, because if not, we may very well be doomed to fail regardless of how much we love each other. Does that clarify it for you?" Luna spoke with heavy overtones and emphasis when she was driving home the fact that she was simply letting Twilight know the issues, not outright rejecting her.
Twilight paused as she processed what Luna had to say, before stammering out a reply. "Does that - you mean -" Luna shook her head as she brought a hoof up to it.
"Must I spell out everything for you Twilight?" Luna exclaimed in disbelief. "Yes, I love you, you insufferably dense mare!"
Twilight sat motionless, her mouth the only part of her body moving as it slowly slid into a smile that grew into a full blown grin. About the time it began to surpass the boundaries of cute and pass into the creepy zone, she leapt up to her hooves and began to bounce around the room in joy. Luna couldn't help but let out a chuckle at Twilight's performance of her 'Yes Dance' now that her words had finally sunk in. The unicorn finally ceased her antics at the same time the alicorn climbed to her hooves, the two of them ending up face to face.
"So, what now then Luna? Do we tell Celestia? The girls? Hmm, I might have to break out those books on relationships..." She queried, not exactly sure where to go from at this point. While she had been in one prior relationship before, with Rainbow Dash of all ponies, she hadn't really had much chance to study on the topic. The pegasus' rashness translated into her actions, and most of what ended up occurring was all last minute, not a second of it planned.
"Well, for now we should take it slow and ease into it. It would probably be best that we keep it to ourselves too; I want to minimize the chance of putting you under any more pressure, should our new relationship get out." Luna sounded somewhat thoughtful as she paused to ponder about what else might be done to help keep things simple for both her and Twilight. "Any dates and such would most definitely have to be private, so either here or at the castle, are our only two options for now, I'm afraid. That should help keep things quiet for now."
"I guess that makes sense..." Twilight grudgingly agreed. As much as she wanted all of her friends to know that she had finally found someone special, every point Luna had made was true. And the last thing she wanted was to have that dreadful press barging into her sanctuary.
"Well, sadly, I must take my leave shortly, so I can make it back to Canterlot and resume my duties. Tia is expecting me back soon, although I wish we had some more time." Luna said wistfully, gazing out the window towards the mountain that housed her home.
"I’m coming to Canterlot next Friday and staying the weekend. Perhaps we could make some time then?" Twilight suggested, as she also wanted to spend as much time with her lunar love as possible.
"That could work, I shall have to ask sister if I can borrow you for an evening then." Luna paused for a moment, as if she were searching for a thought that was just outside her grasp. "Oh! that reminds me of my original intention of coming here last night. I had asked Celestia some time ago that once she had decided that you were no longer her student if I could have the opportunity to offer up my knowledge to you. Please, think on it until you arrive next weekend where we can discuss it in further detail."
Luna closed the gap between them, and wrapped Twilight in her hooves, kissing her lightly as their lips came together again for the second time that morning. She broke off the hug and lazily made her way to the balcony, the smaller mare accompanying her all the way.
"Till this weekend, Twilight! Take care!" Luna gracefully took to the air and began her journey back home, leaving the unicorn to stand guard at her retreating form, one hoof waving in the air.
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Spike strode into the library, searching the area looking for one pony in particular. He discovered her in the foal's reading section organizing and reshelving, a dozen books moving at any given moment as a whirlwind of activity surrounded her.
"Hey, Twi." Spike spoke loudly to ensure he was heard, which all the books coming to a halt midair confirmed. "Just wanted to let you know that all the preparations are going smoothly over at the school. Cheerilee really appreciates your help with the planning on adding a library onto the schoolhouse and wanted me to pass along her thanks."
"Hey, Spike, thanks. Nothing out of the ordinary popped up while receiving the shipment of the books, right?" Twilight inquired as she went back to her previous task, although only half as many books were flying around in the air so that she could keep enough focus to hear Spike's reply.
"Nah, it was amazingly smooth, although one filly did— Oh, letter incoming Twi." Spike paused his methodical explanation as the feelings of an incoming package ticked the back of his senses. He tensed up and faced away from Twilight and let out a massive burp accompanied with a small rush of green flames.
Twilight plucked the scroll that had arrived from midair with her magic as she simultaneously set down all the books she had been sorting. Noting that it was Celestia’s seal, she opened it only to find one letter contained within another. The second one was also sealed, which she left alone as she finished unfurling the first message and read it aloud.
Twilight,
Sorry to ask this of you, but could you possibly ensure this second scroll makes it to your friend Rarity's boutique? I find myself in need of a fashion designer, and she is the only one that came to mind that would not create a plethora of headaches for me.
P.S. Hope all is well, Luna just got back. We are both looking forward to your arrival this Friday. You'll find arrangements already made on the train per usual.
Your Friend,
Celestia
"Hey, Spike, mind finishing up reshelving this section for me? I need to run over to Rarity's real quick." Twilight politely requested of her assistant as she turned towards the door, where her saddlebags rested upon the wooden floor. With naught but a thought, the scroll found its way safely tucked inside a pouch as they came to rest upon her back, and out the library she went into the bright afternoon day.
The weather outside was perfect for a walk to Rarity's, and many ponies were out taking advantage of the warm summer evening. Twilight noticed many families and couples walking around town simply because they could, and despite how much she wished to do so herself, she made a direct aim for Carousel Boutique.
After a pleasant stroll, Twilight found herself outside Rarity's home, a sign on the front door signifying that she was closed to business. Raising a single hoof she knocked soundly upon the door and waited for a reply.
"Just one minute! If it is business related I'm closed for the day, and -" Rarity opened the door and stopped mid-sentence, noticing her friend standing at the threshold of her home. "Do come in darling, what brings you by?" The fashionista moved out of the way so that her friend could enter her house.
Twilight entered with a noticeable pep in her step as she began to reply to Rarity's query in a very cheerful manner. "I've actually got a letter from the Princess for you. Celestia that is." She removed the object of her speech from her bags, and passed it to the other unicorn. "Don't know what it says, she simply asked me to bring it over to you when I had the chance. Luckily Spike had just returned, so I set him to finish something I had started so I could get over here right away." Twilight wound down as she found a cushion in the sitting room and did just that, Rarity joining her seconds later.
"Oh my! This is... Amazing, Twilight! Thank you so much for bringing this over darling, you just made my day, no, my week! I'm going to have to make so many preparations before I leave, but they can wait for now." Rarity settled down and levitated the scroll into the center of Twilight's vision.
Ms Rarity,
The time is approaching for another Gala, and I find myself in need of a dress yet again. I constantly recall the work that you did in the previous years, as well as notice more and more mares walking around Canterlot in your line of clothes and decided that it was time I join in. The fact that you will not attempt to gain political favor or play games out of my patronage is also another plus, I must admit.
If you accept my offer, then please take the train this coming Friday with Twilight to Canterlot. I will have a room in the guest suites of the castle prepared for you as well as a helping hoof or two on hand to fetch whatever fabrics and materials you may need for the dress.
P.S. I am attempting to talk my sister into such an arrangement as well, I shall let you know if she agrees.
Sincerely,
Princess Celestia
"Woah." Twilight was stunned for a few moments after reading Rarity's letter. Her fashionista friend had been making ripples in the fashion world for the last few years, but this was the apex of her career, her life's goal last she had heard. And it was finally coming to pass. "This is big Rarity, congratulations! The train leaves Friday at one thirty, I assume I'll be seeing you there." Twilight giggled slightly at the end, knowing that her friend would first wander into the Everfree Forest on a new moon in the middle of the night by herself before saying no to such an opportunity.
"Be most assured, I shall be at the train station well in time to accompany you to Canterlot! Oh, I must start thinking on what to do and finish filling those sketchbooks-" Rarity cut off before turning to face Twilight, a gleam entering her eyes. "You know, darling. I think I may have to make something for you as thanks for being the bearer of such wondrous news. Not to mention I think a certain pony would just love to see you all dressed up upon your arrival! Come! To the inspiration room, Twilight!"
"Okay, Rarity. I think there’s some time to spare..." As Twilight grudgingly followed her friend into the room, she could have sworn that Rarity's tone held some hidden meaning, blushing at the implications of the words spoken. As time had gone by, the fashionista had gotten really good at discerning little details about the ponies around her. It became even more obvious to her the longer she spent around the pony in question, which is why Twilight was dreading this session.
"Now darling, if you would be so kind as to step up onto the platform. You know the drill. Now where is that tape..." Rarity began manipulating objects of all sorts around the room, in a seemingly chaotic fashion, yet to a trained eye it became clear just how much control she possessed. "Ah ha, here it is! Now, let's see, what to make..." She looked up at Twilight with a wide smirk stretched across her face as the measuring tape took the dimensions of each leg up to the barrel of the bookish unicorn, before it moved on to other spots on her body.
"Oh, I know! How about some socks, say, in a deep shade of blue? Now let's see what would be the best one to use, shall we?" Twilight began to blush as Rarity initiated her tormenting of the unicorn now that she had her captive within her room. "Ah, how about a deep shade of cobalt? That looks lovely, doesn't it dear?"
"Rarity."
"Or we could use a lighter shade of navy blue. Somewhat overused, but it does have its own redeeming qualities." Rarity pointedly ignored Twilight as she snatched fabric samples from the various shelves and cubbies situated around the room, rotating them around every half minute or so. "Could also do a sheer black, I'm sure that someone would appreciate that!"
"Rarity!" The word came out somewhat forced, Twilight almost growling as she punctuated each syllable within her friend's name.
"Hmm, actually I think this one—" Rarity had another fabric sample next to one of Twilight's hooves as she was cut off mid sentence, drowned out by the yell the other unicorn let out directed at her.
"RARITY!" Silence held the air captive for a few seconds before Twilight continued. "That is uncalled for, you know that?" She turned towards Rarity, the cherry color evident all throughout her facial features. "For you to assume such a thing, I-I..." She trailed off, unsure of what to say.
"Oh, do relax darling. It is something that you need to learn how to do." Rarity said in a slight huff, the objects contained with her magic moving once more as the multitude of fabric squares found themselves returned to their places as she started back up. "I was simply teasing you. It isn't everyday that you find out one of your closest friends has a crush on such an iconic and important individual, after all. Why, I wouldn't be a proper friend at all if I did not give you some hassle over such a thing."
Silence lingered in the air as Twilight's blush continued to further manifest itself in her face, the unicorn unable to think of a proper response off the top of her head. The only noise interrupting her thoughts were that of various objects flying around as Rarity's work moved on. She slowly became lost in thought.
She looked around and noticed that she was in her room, the time nearing dusk. The bed was off to the side, and a table had been set up in her room with a few cushions making a comfortable seating arrangement for two. The only light beyond the fading sun was provided from a dozen candles that strategically littered the room to provide the maximum amount of illumination possible.
She felt something soft against her hooves and legs, and was shocked to see what it was. On each leg rode a sock made of a sheer, deep aquamarine fabric, the most risque thing Twilight had ever witnessed. She was broken from her focus as a voice rang out like the finest crystal, calling to her.
"Good evening love, we hope that it finds you well." Luna strode in from the balcony framed by the setting sun, closing the doors behind her as well as all the curtains at the same time, leaving just the candles as witness to the two mares. She walked to Twilight, and looked her over appraisingly, before nuzzling her intimately on the left side of her face. "It is most good to see you again."
Twilight found the words spilling from her mouth almost immediately. "It is most good to see you again my moon, I hope you like what you see. Dinner tonight is ready when you are, and dessert is to follow shortly after." Her voice came out somewhat seductively as she pranced over to one of the seatings at the table.
Their dinner passed quickly, either pony savoring the various foodstuffs and fine wine that had been procured just for this evening. Laughter rang out from time to time, as well as an occasional muzzling after a particularly good topic. The sun gave way to the moon, what little light there was being mostly filtered out by the dark shaded, thick curtains. Flames danced, adding to the atmosphere, until finally the table was adeptly moved to the side of the room, the wine glasses the only objects now between the two mares.
"Dearest Moon, your dessert is ready..." She exclaimed seductively, coily turning around in such a manner to show her profile off in a manner that would make any male drop dead due to loss of blood to the brain. She winked at Luna and raised one hoof, making a 'come hither' motion with it. Luna strode to her mare, and nuzzled her neck, nipping lightly as—
"Twilight Sparkle!" Rarity's shrill scream broke Twilight from her reverie, bringing her mind back to the boutique. "Uh, Twilight darling... You're winking at me."
"Huh?" Twilight was slow on the uptake, her brain still somewhat between the conscious realm and the daydream she had just experienced. "I'm not winking at you Rarity, I wasn't even looking at you."
The fashionista blushed somewhat, her words hesitant and lacking confidence. "Darling, uh, I didn't mean that end. You are winking at me..."
It took a few seconds for Twilight to process what Rarity meant before she turned crimson all over, quickly casting a spell on herself. "Hehe... Sorry, Rarity, guess I got caught up in my daydream..." Embarrassment was dripping from her voice that came out in a most sheepish tone.
"Twilight... Did anything happen last night? I don't recall a lot near the end because I drank entirely way too much last night, but something had to of happened, right? I'm fairly certain this is the first time you've ever gotten caught up in your... Thoughts. Yes, thoughts like that." Rarity was rather flustered, her calm mask of composure punctured by a slight blush at her friend's state.
"Umm, well, Pinkie Promise to keep a secret Rarity?" Rarity quickly went through the appropriate motions, sans sticking a hoof in her eye, before Twilight continued. "Well, after you all departed last evening, Luna and I continued drinking for a bit before we moved outside to stargaze. We talked for a bit, and then she wanted to ask me a question... I might have..." Twilight trailed off at the end and ended up mumbling the rest unintelligibly.
"Come again darling? I didn't understand the last bit of that, you kind of trailed off." Rarity calmly asked Twilight, trying to not lay down too much pressure yet eager to hear the news at the same time.
"I jumped up, kissed her, and confessed my love for her when she simply wanted to ask me to be her student!" Twilight blurted out at a fast rate, Rarity struggling to keep up with her words.
"Oh, dear... That sounds bad. How did it turn out?"
"Well, at first she kind of froze up, then turned and flew away. I lost it, and went to sleep on the floor that night, then woke up in my bed tucked in the next morning with her next to me. We're kinda seeing each other now? However, you cannot tell anypony. Period. We're keeping it under wraps so it doesn't complicate either of our lives anymore than they already are!" Twilight looked at Rarity pleadingly, a slight amount of desperation bleeding through as she gave the plea to her friend.
"Darling, you should know better, I Pinkie Promised, and a lady never goes back on their word! Your secret is safe with me." Rarity paused, a glint coming into her eyes.
"So... Want those socks?"
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very nice chapter. I'm almost expecting Luna to date Twilight in her dreams to avoid the press. Given her last romance was thousands of years ago that could lead to some wacky hijinks. Luna better study up. Also makes me wonder when Celestia's last date/lover/significant other was and if she has advice for Luna. The not jumping straight into sex is probably better than the alternative, though the risque factor is pretty nice, as well as amusing when Rarity calls Twilight on it.
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Ya know, that is a most interesting concept that I could possibly use at some point... *muses and mutters*
As far as the hijinks with the relationship, it should be taking center stage for a bit as some... awkward and embarrassing situations come to be. For Celestia's side, well, I kinda of have that planned, and it will be revealed much later down the line. No more for fear of hinting at spoilers though.
And yeah, I want some sweet lovings to occur before they have sex. I have decided to not put any explicitly written out scenes here in this story, but it will be implied [when] the time comes for it. Will probably try my hand at the erotica scenes and post it as an addendum to BOWTN in a different story. The scene there at the end is probably the limit of where I plan to take the riskiness to.
And glad you enjoyed it, scheming the next one up at the moment.
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Lol, thanks for a most wonderful laugh.
Now, to look at it in a serious view real quick, here is some reasoning behind the why and when. Rarity, as a character, in my mind is actually very mature and perceptive. It would have simply been more trouble than it would be worth if Twi were to try and avoid her or dismiss her, as she would see right through our lovely lavender protagonist. Rarity (when sober... sober. xD) is extremely good at keeping secrets and respecting the boundaries of her friends and clients. This allows Twilight to get it off her chest plus to have someone to talk to further down the line.
Will it play into the plot? Maybe.
Our writing styles are so different that I'm actually have a tough time reading this, hehe
. Still, great chapter, and you were spot on how Twilight would react. Maybe a little over the top, but that's just Twilight. Cheers!
Hehe, wink.
Don't judge me.
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yeah, the dreams thing would be interesting. I would really love to see done more often now that Luna is a canon dreamwalker. Wanna go for a lovely date in Paris (or MLP equalivent)? bam, you're there. Visit ancient places before they decayed? bam, you're there. So much potential, though it probably doesn't beat in-person stuff when they'd wake up. Also I think Luna has to prevent Nightmares or something. Its not too clear beyond, she can go into dreams...
Yeah, don't mind my rampant speculation, I do that a lot... A little too much really... You should probably ignore the speculation parts. I won't mind.
Nice to hear you'll at least try explicit stuff. Not enough explicit Twiluna on this site as is.
great chapter!
and do i sense a rarlestia (celerity perhaps? rarityXcelestia)?
the only thing that struck me as... unsatisfying; is how casual twi and luna was after luna revealed her feelings, feels like twi would be swaying between dreamy and worried. rarity also seems too perceptive for her own good
also, "winking" in this case meant that twilight was flashing her intimate parts to rarity, or did i misunderstand?
Twilight most definitely want her some socks!
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Hrmm, now you've got me curious as to which part of my writing style throws you off. xD
And Twilight, over the top, used in conjunction with each other? Impossible! Glad you liked it though, it is such a blast writing it.
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I'll play around with it in my head for a bit and see what comes up. I've already got some dreaming related stuff planned out, it'll probably be a matter of if this becomes too much or not. Still, thanks for the fun concept! And please, dear god, speculate away. You should see some of the stuff I post when I really get into a story, I love to figure out what is going to happen before it does.
And dunno when I'll try some explicit material, but at some point I will. Got an excellent guide when I do though. Good 'ole Peppy.
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I'll have to look at that and it might get slightly revised at a later date when I'm not quite so concerned on getting out new material. I figured at the time that they had both already freaked out plenty, and it was somewhat of a serious point for Luna, so they cut to the chase rather than waste time freaking out even more. /shrug.1887582 Look at this for my reasoning on Rarity. And no, there is RarJack in this story already, and I don't have a plan to break em up. Some friendshipping between Rarity and Tia? Sure, why not. But no relationships.
And yes, that is indeed what was being referred to with the 'winking', happening as a result of her day dream. : )
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Indeed.
This was a really good line
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Glad you liked it, I've been told I have a way with words... occasionally anyways. xD
Hope you've liked the rest of it thus far as well.
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'Tis a very enjoyable tale.
It's become quite difficult to find a Twiluna these days that's not the same thing told and retold a thousand times over.
But this? This is good.
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I just love it how you make twilight sound so stupid when it comes to relationships
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Thanks for the kind words. I will hopefully continue down the path (in a good manner) of keeping this story somewhat set apart from the rest.
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Beyond a short stint with Dash in this story, she has mostly been 'married' to her books, research, and stargazing. At least in regards to this story and in my mind. While the passage of time has allowed her to become more open, she is still more of the 'pursuit of knowledge' type, although as this continued I hope to show that shift. Hope you are enjoying it so far.
1892466 yes I am defiantly enjoying it and I am glad it isn't such a cliche.
But I am wondering will rainbow dash be cool with this twiluna relationship or will she get jealous since she might still feel a bit loyal to twi
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Good to know.
And as of now, not planning any sort of friction between them. Time will ultimately tell though.
Yeah I think she wants thos socks Rarity^^ hehehehe^^
And that, friends, is how you open a chapter.
That always works, right Pinkie?
You know it!
Yes, this is adorable in my mind.
She hasn't been on the internet much then, has she.
I like how over the years, Celestia has apparently gotten to know the rest of the girls better.
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Just going to quote the one post so you don't get spammed with notifications. : )
Thanks for the help in GDocs, plus thanks for the kind words contained here. Hopefully I can continue to keep chugging away at this at a decent pace and keep you entertained.
A very sweet story so far! Just one error I noticed: Rarity says 'had to of' instead of 'had to have' at one point.
I believe a "1" decided to sneak its way into your story.
Ok, mistakes with out of the way, onto the other stuff:
Random Musings? They way last chapter had ended I actually thought Luna flew back to Canterlot, and was just going to send Twi a letter or come back to visit her in the morning. Knew they'd end up in bed eventually, just didn't see it coming so soon (and I really should have).
I like how you decided to deal with the initial Twi freakout when she found Luna in her bed. This is the first time I've read a story where the person wakes up, sits in shock as they take in what happened, have all mental processes stop...and then proceed to scream. Then again it's also the first time I've read a story that focused on the thoughts of the person who was the victim of a bed intruder.
Other good things? I'm enjoying Rarity's above average perception skills. They're not too over powered, and are actually quite believable. I have a friend who's like that, and I curse them constantly for their special ability to point things out.
Thoughts on possible future happenings? I'd really like to see Rarity use her perceptive "power" on Celestia. You've created a good thing here, and I expect you to utilize it wisely.
Overall, another good chapter. I'm look forward to more shenanigans and plot development!
For some reason I'm laughing every time I read this line... dunno why, though.
Random number one here.
This is gonna make me sound like I'm actually hoping this to be a clop fic, but I just want to comment on your inclusion of such a small and very real detail that is almost never found, even among the fic "type" where it would occur. Even something as simple as this produces a lot of suggestion in the story that further sets up the situation. All in all, "it's the little things that can make the biggest difference".
P.S.
I'm talking about
4143016 Could be worse, 7 could have ate 9
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4253416 I agree few people make note of the
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i don't care if sex is there or not, just if you don't be all indecisive, or use comparisons rather than actually name what your talking about; it just reminds me too much of that 'Shakespeare' dude-and I say that in full knowledge of the specific meaning of 'dude' and as such, I say it as an insult. It's a lot better than calling someone an 'ass'
Winking, seriously...? Kinky.
You do you Luna is Latin for moon right. I my opinion "Dearest Moon" might as well be placed as "Dearest Luna" is just Moon...really. I like the Luna version better than the Moon version. This is just my honest opinion.
Absolutely love the story so far
Winking? Don't fallow.
run. RUN! FUCKING RUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN!!!
ok twilight do i need to get out my plunger and use it on your brain? because it seems that the drain that is your brain to knowledge is plugged
p.s. is POST SCRIPT NOT PRESCRIPT SO PUT IT AFTER THE SINCERELY
arg read that sentence 3 times before i caught the i after why
6892436 yeh how to say this horses and ponies have a clitoris that flicks in and out when aroused it's hard to explain
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I had to read this comment, and to reread the same paragraph to finally understand what Rarity said, and now I can't get the image out of my head.