Chapter 8.5 - The Save
A soft surface greeted Twilight's senses as the world slowly began to come into focus. Her thoughts were scattered, her mind in the process of waking up. White swarmed her vision as her eyes slowly opened, sounds of the world around her muffled to her addled senses. I remember... falling. Where am I?
Further blinking brought clarity to her vision, as she slowly took in her surroundings. She was in a whitewashed room, laying in a bed. Raising her head she began to look around the room. Hospital equipment lay to one side against a wall, an intravenous drip was attached to her foreleg, and a steady beeping made itself known from a heart monitor as her hearing returned.
Before she had a chance to really think as to what all of this meant, a unicorn wearing medical scrubs walked into the room. He noticed her alertness and enthusiastically began talking. "Ah, Miss Sparkle! You're awake, wonderful!"
"W-Where am I? What happened? I remember falling..." Her addled mind managed to pull the words together. Her eyes slightly unfocused as she attempted to piece together the puzzle pieces her thoughts were yielding.
"You're in Ponyville General Hospital, Miss Sparkle. You received wounds after falling from a chariot during a storm some ways out of town. You're extremely lucky to be alive right now, honestly." He paused, flipping through some papers. "You suffered seven bruised ribs, a dislocated shoulder and a moderate concussion. Luckily, a weather mare that was off duty managed to reach you, otherwise we probably wouldn't be having this conversation right now." He set the documents down on a table.
"Oh, excuse me. I just realized that I haven't even given you my name yet. I'm Dr. Gauge, and I've been attending you for the last two days you've been here. Now, I need to check your vitals as well as a few other things. Once we do that, you’ll be evaluated to see if you’re good enough to be released.”
Doctor Gauge ran her through a quick series of tests, jotting words down on the paper after each one. Twilight kept quiet throughout the entire process, her clarity quickly coming to her. Wish I had managed to test the application of those wings! It would’ve been useful... Note to self, make that the first— no, second thing I do once I’m out of here. Friends first! Twilight refocused on Dr. Gauge when he stepped back. It looked like the tests were done.
“Well, Miss Sparkle, everything seems to be fine. You’ll need to take it easy for the next few days, but I see no reason for us to keep you here any longer than necessary. I need to step out and prepare your release papers. You have some friends waiting for you in the lobby; I’ll go give them the good news.”
A few moments after the doctor left the room, a new arrival made her entrance known with a knock on the door. “Is this Miss Twilight’s room?” A vibrant yellow head framed by a turquoise mane peeked into the room, looking around. Spotting Twilight, she widely smiled and walked inside. “Ah ha! It is! Good afternoon, Miss Twilight.”
As the pegasus entered the room, Twilight noticed her cutie mark was three raindrops. I’ve seen her a few times before, where at though... Oh, that’s where! “Raindrops, right? You work the weather team here?” Raindrops nodded in confirmation, moving to take a seat next to the bed. “What brings you around?”
“Well, I heard you were awake, so thought I’d sneak on over and come say hi! Plus, I figured you might want to know what happened.” The pegasus shuffled around, exposing her left wing, which was tightly bandaged to her side.
“Sure, I’d like to kn— What happened to your wing?” Twilight began, shifting her focus as she took in the bandaged appendage.
“That’s actually part of the story. It seems that some of the factory workers thought it’d be a great idea to see how quickly they could process the cloud deliveries and it somehow turned into a competition. All would’ve been just fine but... they never turned the machines off when they went on their lunch break. They had put all of the machines into overdrive, and, well... Lots of clouds.” The pegasus raised her hoof to her forehead as she brought it down to meet her hoof. “Stallions.”
Twilight looked up at Raindrops’ joke, and met her gaze. They both broke into easy laughter. Things calmed down quickly as Twilight spoke. “So, I’m guessing the storm we encountered was all the excess clouds?”
“Pretty much. I think they picked up some of the ones that had been put in place across the Ponyville fringes, but the majority came from the factory.” Raindrops paused for a moment, collecting her thoughts. “I was on the outskirts of town enjoying my day off when I noticed the storm. Figured I’d follow it until the emergency teams showed up to deal with it, but then I noticed a bright lavender flash in the middle of it.”
Twilight’s eyes lit up in recognition. “So, you’re the pony who saved me? Thank you very much, Raindrops.” She widely beamed at the pegasus.
Raindrops ran a hoof through her mane. “Eh... It was nothing much really, I just happened to be there... So, I flew in there, and managed to catch up to you and slow you down enough to keep anything from really breaking. I might’ve been able to avoid injuring us completely, but I strained the tendons in my wing as I was trying to pull us up at the end, so we went for a tumble instead.”
“Do you know what happened with the chariot guards? Breeze and Sentinel?”
“Oh, they’re just fine. Apparently they had a harness release lever, and once they realized you’d fallen, they dumped the carriage and tried to get to you. They brought us here, as well as your stuff. I think they left those with your friends.”
Any further conversation ground to a halt as Gauge arrived back in the room. “Well, Miss Sparkl—” He noticed the extra occupant in the room as he looked up from a clipboard. “Miss Raindrops... You could’ve just waited ten more minutes, just like everypony else in the lobby.” He sighed as Raindrops guiltily grinned as she left the room. Gauge shifted his focus back to Twilight. “Anyways, as I was saying, I just need your signature at the bottom of this form here, and you’ll be good to go. Make sure to stop by the pharmacy sometime today; I put in an order of mild painkillers for you in case your ribs hurt too much. The bruising should be gone within the next five days though.”
Twilight gently hopped down from the bed, only a slight twinge greeted her as hooves met the hard floor. She followed the doctor though the maze of corridors, winding and weaving through the halls. Opening the last door for her, Gauge flashed a brief smile in Twilight’s direction.
“I hope it’s a long time before we meet again, in a professional manner.”
Twilight couldn’t help but smile at his joke as she walked into the lobby, where her friends awaited her. She ran up to them, embracing the first one she could reach in a massive hug.
“Girls!”
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Cool to see a background pegasus get to fill the Rainbow Dash hero role for once.
Bwahaha!
You sneaky dog you. I see what you did here, it is a good story twist.
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I had another concept in mind originally, but... this worked just as well! Figured it might be a few days till I get started on the next chapter, so thought I'd release this today.
Thank you for this. I guess I should probably end all of my plans for torturing you now...
Actually...I think I'll just leave them on the backburner.
Twilight was saved the normal way? Well that threw me for a loop.
Damn you and your manipulative cliffhangers!
short chapter is short.
well those guards are totally fired. out of a cannon. to the moon. I wonder when/if its going to hit her that she nearly died. Maybe the thoughts of mortality will bring up thoughts of the "immortal dating a non-immortal" problem. Needless to say, Luna and Celestia will probably have some interesting reactions and the effects of the whole "nearly dying" thing will probably last for a long while.
And for some strange reason, I thought the doctor was gonna hit on her. I don't even know why I thought that because there is literally nothing in there to indicate such. THAT thought then segued into what if other ponies hit on her in front of Luna and Celestia. I have no idea what is up with my mind.
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I aim to please!
Actually, no I don't. I do whatever I want, but I've been stuck on the other end of these cliffs before, and never like it. So, figured I wouldn't keep y'all hanging for too long.
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I know, right? A background pony saves her life? My god!
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Yeah, originally this was going to be part of the next chapter, but... I think it'll have more impact this way.
The fact that she had a near death experience will come up, as well as all the fallout. Even though I don't have a word written towards the next chapter 'Aftermath' or 'Fallout' is the name of it. Ripples will be felt probably for the next half dozen chapters at least, while raising up a whole slew of issues.
I'll have to address the guards and such later. And the doctor hitting on her? rofl!
Commence read.
Well it was short and covered that. Alright.
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Yes Indeedy.
Out for two days? That must have been fun times for Luna. Unless she hasn't heard? Probably has.
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I think the guards are fine. Celestia is a fair ruler even when it involves ponies she cares about. The guards were hit with a massively overwhelming force and were, well overwhelmed no neglect or incompetence involved. The idiots at the weather factory on the other hand...
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Oh yes, lots of scene breaks and many (over)reactions will occur. Should be fun, for once I'm having to outline the events of the chapter prior to writing to ensure nothing slips up.
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I'll make sure that this gets addressed.
I've had this story in my Read Later list for quite some time and now I'm kicking myself for now having read it sooner.
Excellent work so far. I'm greatly looking forward to more!
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Welp, I hope that you enjoyed it. Working on outlining the next chapter now, I've been mostly keeping to a five day-ish release schedule per chapter, hopefully I can keep up that pace. No promises though!
2050991 No rush! I'm looking forward to the next chapter but I don't want to read it until it's finished. I'm sure I'm not the only one that shares that sentiment either.
And yes, I have enjoyed the story quite a bit so far.
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Lol, yeah, I put out half a chapter once, and that was only cause I beat my head against that wall for five days or so. Now I've gone back and put it back together, really no reason to release anything before it's ready. My editor makes that abundantly clear. xD
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Lol, yeah. Still, they show as in the proper place when you look at the story main page. xD And sitting here writing the next chapter, done about... 1200 so far today? Got another 4ish hours of writing left too!
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Glad to know that you've enjoyed it thus far. : )
Love it
(insert luna smiley) curse you fimfiction.
More please.
Would like to see Luna & Celestias reactions, maybe by Spike fire. Me thinks cloud foremens are gona get a visit if they do. Ohhh and Raindrops get thanked by da princesses.
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Don't worry, you will. Next chapter is in the works, just slow going as it's an area I'm not so great with writing, so it's taking me some time to get through it. Lots of reactions next chapter though, for sure.
And glad you've enjoyed it thus far!
damn you raindrops! if you hadn't intervened we would be getting a second "On wings of change" by now!
anyways, great chapter (both the small one and the big one)!
i can't wait to see luna's and celestia's reactions to these events, they ought to be incredibly entertaining.
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Yes, background pony Raindrops, you have done well this day... Yeah, don't need lots of comparisons to major stories while I try to build my own up into one.
Thanks for the praise, I am slowly making my way through the next chap, sitting on 3400 words, and got a few hours to write later tonight. Hopefully... Thur? I'll have the new chapter completed and edited.
For some reason I wanted Luna to appear out of nowhere and save her...don't ask me how it could have happened, just know it would have been awesome.
Then I was also waiting for the, "Twilight saw the ground quickly approaching. She threw her arms up in desperation, if only to dampen the impact by some small amount. Closer and closer a large patch of green began to obscure her vision and until it was completely filled...and then all she saw was white. Twilight burst forth from her bed, the impact of her face hitting the wooden floor of the library being the only reminder that she was indeed safe, and that it was all just a dream."
What? I love me some dream sequences......Anyways, good job on finding a way that wasn't too crazy, but still able to keep the readers attention.
Anyways, looking forward to the inevitable "Fallout".
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How come?
Meh evil trolls saving her in a way i wasnt expecting and i had such a great guess in my head oh well
Why didn't she teleport before hitting the ground? Even if teleports preserve momentum, she could've just teleported upside-down and bled it off with gravity.
6150009 Um. Momentum doesn't work like how I think you're implying. If you're falling feet - first and teleport to the ground upside-down, you land on your head. Perhaps you mean the redirection of momentum, similar in intent to the Portal Gun from the game Portal? If Twilight could exert the force to slow her fall gradually so as to not harm herself, while panicking in free fall, I figure she would. Redirection of momentum seems a needlessly complicated solution, unless a bit more pressed for time.
Unless I've completely misinterpreted your intent, in which case, derp.
6195478 yes he ment like a portal gun portal so when she teleports she goes up instead of down
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I Find it interesting that a flying technicolor horse is the normal way.
I expected Luna to save her.
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Glad I'm not the only one.