• Member Since 24th Jun, 2012
  • offline last seen Mar 4th, 2016

Ninjayorkshire


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After an unfortunate accident, that leaves one of Twilight's friend heavily injured, the unicorn start having doubts about her magic and the value of her friendship.
light dark for injuries description.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 10 )

Interesting. Does not flow, though. Needs more cider. Hard c; :ajsmug:

Twilight should kill Rainbow Dash. I want to see what happens next, can't wait for more

(Joke) Alt. Title: No More Sad/Dark, Please

Damnit Dash get the whole story of things before doing something like that.
Please let karma bite her hard.

I like it so far. Keep going!

So could you guys say what are liking in the story? what is lacking ? where i could get better ?

as a inhabitant of a non speaking English country i have some problems with sentence making, a feedback would help me immensely
:twilightsmile: :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

1863888 Well your English is very good. Perhaps a couple of little mistakes here and there, but nothing to be worried about. Perhaps find a reviewer on ponychan or something. I do like the story so far. I will be sticking this in my favorites. Can't wait for the next chapter, since this one really peaked my interest.

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