• Published 16th Dec 2012
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A Colt to Forget - CptBrony



When a man rips away all that the boy loves, the boy must choose; revenge, or escape?

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and now this song is to
Act Now (Arkasia & Pixl) Arkasia

im absolutely speechless :rainbowderp: :applejackunsure:
you sir ned millions of mustaches or this

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Thank you, good sir. And keep an eye out for anything in the future.

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Thank you. I'm also working on the next story now, and I hope that you like the rest of this one and then the next one.

I get the idea that you are part of the U.S. military and im going to take a shot in the dark and say your a navy SEAL. If you are indeed a military man I just want to take my time and give you my deepest respects and I give you a salute for having the courage and will of commitment to join the armed forces to help defend our values and way of life.:twilightsmile: From a 14 yearold Brony who has his sights set on joining the United States Marine Corps. You deserve a BROHOOF!! /)

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Thank you so much, but I myself am not in the military just yet. My goal is to be a SEAL, and I'm training hard for it right now.
To you my friend, Semper Fidelis and thank you for your kind words.

2285634
Do not worry. There will always be people to help out with such trauma. And you never know where you might get help from.

Comment posted by CptBrony deleted Mar 27th, 2013

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Thank you! I do my best.

With my new writing skills and knowledge of structure, I am going to go back into each chapter of this story as well as its sequel to fix everything to make it properly laid out. It is not being updated.

oh my god this story is so good

DAMN THIS IS GOOD...

2728112>>2728184>>2729205>>2729256>>2729437
Wow, thanks!
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I'm actually in the process of doing just that; I'm just busy with Final Exams at the moment. (*_*)

2729827 Dude, oh my god you have no idea how much I love this story, and the sequel is just as good

:fluttercry: tears of overwhelming :fluttercry: Well done sir:fluttercry:

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Thank you! It took me a while to write this and its sequel, and it feels great to know that people like it.

2729967 heaps keen to see where it goes

Almost done fixing it up; just four more chapters to go.

It is completely fixed, as is the sequel story! Finally, got that done. So happy.

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It feels good to make people feel the feels. I feel like your feels make my feels feel stronger.

10/10 would read again!

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Thank you! It was really enjoyable to write.

Comment posted by hs0003 deleted Jul 31st, 2013

Well, after reading my own story legitimately for the first time, I spotted a good number of errors in the writing, mostly typos. I'll be working on fixing them for a while.

Ewwww Luna! Get those out of your mouth, you walk on those.
Epic story dude.

Wow. Just wow. To think that I passed up this story over a couple months ago. I really enjoyed this, and am going off to read the sequel. Oh, and about what I said last chapter...

Called it, motherfucker.

Overall I enjoyed this story. The philosophy, the justifications, the development of the various characters, the reactions that people have in the everyday world. Whether it's Luna's belief that more needed to be done or Harris' beliefs or Discord's beliefs about the events. You also do well with the one liners and interactions between characters like Discord and Ryan.

My only major complaint is during the buildup for the climax, there's a little bit too much naval gazing on the way to Vietnam. Otherwise, I don't really have any good complaints. :)

3331595 where's your profile picture from? :pinkiecrazy:

4120646 What happens when logic is awesome?

Comment posted by CptBrony deleted Mar 24th, 2014

*Finishes amazing story, goes to authors profile to favourite, See's the sequel*
"...so long sleep my old friend"

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I'm glad you like it!

4196786
Don't they have the most people trying to enter their country illegally in the world or something?

4207151
I had actually considered having an Australian SASR team looking for them, but decided that wouldn't add enough to the story. A couple of things later sort of imply that there's a search, but I opted not to address it.

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God, I hate counter fitters.

I just realized....... if you took out all the "copyrighted" aspects of this, or hell, just put new characters in their place, this could be a novel. Like, an actual novel you'd read in a library. It's that good.

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Thank you! I'm glad you are liking it.

4485676

kk

EDIT: How did you get footage of my acid trip?

5328671
Hope is never gone, but at what point does it do more harm than good?

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What defines right and wrong depends on who you are, and what defines whether or not something goes perfectly right or terribly wrong is even less dependent on external factors. Whatever happens, it goes exactly as it does.

Well read the first few chapters. Only things that really got to me were:

-Stupid Cruelty by cruelty's sake
-Sexual Harassment on criminal level
-Idiotic Choices in name of drama

I am really in the edge here and thought to ask if those are what drove me up, should i carry on reading?

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The story is meant to be dark and gritty, so if that isn't your thing, I would say no. As far as dumb choices, it's meant to be inexperienced people in a scary situation, so they will consistently make bad choices (some turn out okay, others don't). Everything I put in the story serves a purpose, but this story isn't meant for everyone.

6447764 And THAT kind of mentality allows for war criminals to walk free and human trafficers to get out of prison. Eye for an eye has no bearing here. If people in an area are so apathetic to their fellow man that they allow this kind of rampant barbarism to continue (effectively supporting it) then they have forfeited their status as human beings and need to be put down like the animals they are. These days we make far, far too many allowances for 'moral perspectives' and many criminals get away with their crimes scott-free. What, are you going to argue that the victims of human trafficking were somehow 'asking for it' the same way people used to view rape? The perpetrators of these kinds of crimes deserve any and all horrors laid on them and I feel honest joy when I hear about people like them being subject to horrors of punishment.

Your first story but easily my favourite story

Even though I knew the tragic ending, I still suffered from the feels. Excellent story and worth my time.

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Thank you! This story was enjoyable to write.

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