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I literally laughed my ass off when I saw that, mate. Bravo. *claps* :rainbowlaugh:

"Equestria: The Alicorn, The Changeling, and The Door", I'm so sorry but I just had to do it.:twilightsheepish:

Octavia approves of this, as do I. You've got me hooked, can't wait for the next chapter! :raritywink:

This certainly seems promising, is Daisy one of the three ponies who pretended to faint?

Also, why didn't Daisy speak up?

I honestly hadn't thought of Narnia when I was writing the Prologue, and now I can't stop thinking of the comparisons! :twilightsheepish:
Why thank you, Octavia, and thank you, Mcayon! I promise I won't let you down! :trixieshiftright:
I hadn't thought of that Daisy when I was writing, so I'd say no. This is a different Daisy. :pinkiesmile: And as for why she didn't speak up, it was because she didn't know how to. How are you supposed to defend a creature you barely even know? :twilightsmile:
You ponies are really trying to win my heart with these alternate titles. :pinkiehappy: I love Coraline.

Thank you all for reading and commenting. You have no idea how much it means to me. Again, thank you.


1782496 Hey how does one do that blue text link thing?

1786322 That does make sense, also while reading it felt like she expected to be laid off. I see that it wouldn't happen but it just felt like it.

Look for the "insert image" button, then make a sharp left. There you go.

Yet another story with the cliché misanthropic depressed human. Hope his friends aren't as doom and gloom as him, and set the record strait that Earth is not a wastlandic dystopian hellhole.

2529467 Wait for the future updates broski. Maybe the story will grow onto you or something. If not, to each their own, I suppose. :twilightsmile:

I will keep reading to see where this goes. But god that cliché is just f*cking annoying.
Hopefully the character doesn't go instant vegetarian. That is also a really stupid, annoying cliché. Plus humans need the protein from meat to stay healthy.

2529589 S'alright, I'm helping with proofreading and whatnot. You won't see anything like that. Adventure and craziness await ya! This is far from most HiE stories posted on here. :pinkiehappy:

I am confused, Jack came off as depressed and misanthropic? He wasn't depressed, he just knows that Earth, compared to Equestria, is way messed up, and he'd rather live somewhere happier. I didn't intend for him to seem misanthropic, either, he doesn't hate the human race, he just hates some of the decisions that they make, like war and such. He believes in peace.

I'm sorry if I made him seem to go by that cliche, I'll try to explain a bit more about him in the next chapter. :twilightoops:

And no worries about the vegetarian thing. I shall try to figure out a way around the Equestrian diet, because I don't like that cliche as well. :twilightsmile:

Oh, this is a nice surprise been awhile hasn't it?

It has good chap, it has. I've gotten better at keeping inspiration by not working so hard, that is for so long at a time. I used to write for 8 hours straight each day, and then I would be inspirationally drained, and unmotivated, but I've gotten into the habit of only writing for two hours every day. I get the work done over a longer period, but I don't lose inspiration, and I can continue writing the next day.

Ao rest assured, I will try to have the next chapter done by next week at the earliest, the week after that at the latest. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, you did. Or you made him very over dramatic, and is blowing the situation way out of proportion. I mean really, who wouldn't think he is not depressed, or hates Earth with the way he talks about it.

"Your majesty, where I come from, hatred, war, and death are common things. I had friends there, sure, but they were but small specs of light in an otherwise dark, hopeless, and lonely land. When you think about just how horrible the land I come from is, it's no wonder why I would want to come here, to a place that is the exact opposite of it."

No. Just no. If I was there I would have called him an over dramatic dumbass. Then would have started listed all of the great things we have done. True there may be a lot of bad, but there is an equal amount of good. Something the character either forgot about in the moment, or just completely ignores.

So like I said, hopefully when his friends come into the story they set the record strait.
Of course it is your story, so just do what you want.
Sorry if I sound too harsh.

Just forget it.

Like horrorgamer01 said, mate, just try to stick through it, and I promise I will try to improve upon my mistakes. :twilightsheepish:

Don't worry. I am still going to be reading. The only thing that could definitely kill a story for me is if the human characters become ponies.
I want to know how this story goes. I especially want to see who the four humans get aired with, and if Celestia, Luna, and Crysalis are part of any of the pairings, since they are character tags.

Well, good luck with all of your endeavors.

You reminded me, I must update the tags, now that I have figured out the exact pairings I want. :raritywink:

Though I do feel bad that I made Jack seem depressed or misanthropic. He was just taking things from his point of view, and the things he has seen and experienced. Again, I am sorry for that, and I will try to explain further why he feels the way he does. :twilightoops:

Thank you for the wish of good luck, I wish you good luck as well.

Oh, and you'll get to meet the rest of the humans in the next chapter, by the way. They all have very colourful personalities, so if you don't like Jack, I am almost positive you will like one of the others. :pinkiehappy:

Just saw the new tags. Should be interesting to read. Plus, it is the first time I seen Berry as a love interest for a human character.
I will trust you on that. Of course I have to. You are the writer after all.
Looking forward to seeing how they are introduced.

Eeyup, when you meet who Berry is paired with, you'll automatically know why. :rainbowwild:

Thank you for the understanding, as well. Rock on, Seraph.

If this character is like Captain Jack Sparrow then I think I will get it, and be very amused.
Your welcome, and you too. And have fun writing.

You'll love him, trust me. :pinkiehappy:

Grah, I want to say more, but I'll just say this: Firewater, Ganja, Ice. :raritywink:

im just glad to see that the story is being continued, and there is only one thing i would like to ask of you, please dont let us wait for the next chapter as long as we had to wait for this one.

No worries mate. I'm at a pony convention right now, today'll be the second day, and tomorrow will be the third, but I'm going to try to take some breaks from all the fun and get out a basis of what will happen in the next chapter by the end of the con, if not the first draft of the next chapter. Then during the week up to Friday or Saturday, I'm going to work on draft one(if it's not finished, that is), and two.

I told me mate(who's character is Jacob), that I want to try to release a chapter every two weeks at least, and by the gods I will stick to my word this time.

Just knowing how much you guys like the story so far from your comments and the like makes me very happy, and determined as all hell to make sure you guys stay happy as well.

Rock on, everypony!

Man I really like this story! :pinkiehappy: Can't wait for the next chapter!

Glad to hear it! :trixieshiftright: Congrats, as well, you are the first person to comment on chapter two! *gives you some cookies* :pinkiehappy:

The story is interesting, and I kind of like it, but there are some things that need work. For example, the first paragraph in this chapter commits two sins: wall of text and purple prose. (However, the wall of text is probably an outgrowth of the purple prose...)

Just a couple of things to keep an eye out for as this progresses. :twilightsmile:

AH HAA!!! First on a chapter once more perhaps?! :pinkiecrazy: Getting some directions I see, Can't wait for the next chapter! :derpytongue2:

Mhhh... This story appears to have a destinct lack of 'Blueblood getting punched in the face by angry human'. Something that'll get fixed in later chapters perhaps? :trollestia:

Yeah, I do tend to get rather fancy when I want something to come out as really meaningful and full of philosophical ideas. :twilightblush: I'll try not to get too fancy later on, but I can't promise there won't be anymore fanciness. Some parts I have planned out just have to be written in a fancy way to portray the feeling of the scene. :twilightoops:

Indeed you are! I'm glad you're liking where this is going, and that you're hooked. :trixieshiftright:

Considering that Blueblood is the arse that I like because he's an arse and it's funny, you're damn skippy that'll happen.

I was wanting to read this. but you haven't been online in over a year. so, i'm removing this from my read later list. if you come back and start updating again i'll re-add it, but a year offline doesn't show much promise.

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