First! Yay!

Well, this is very well written, to say the least. Good job!

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eeyup

i'm a good writer
praise me

thanks for prereading and stuff

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ALL HAIL THE PARASPRITES

You're welcome

I love sex between rainbow dash and pinkie pie
I dont like violence and gore

It's good... Lots of cumcame

Given how muh species-jargon you put in, this almost felt like it should have been Twilight/Dash. It was interesting, but really interrupted the flow. While its unique and I've not seen anything quite so... bondage, I feel like these two were so ooc they could've been replaced with anypony and it still would've felt the same.

I like the story. Good details and explanations. Hope to see a part 2 soon.

Damn good job! Words fail me right now on how great this story is!

That was interesting. Also that second Q&A in the authors nots made me choke on my own laughter.

Moar sub RD. Who doesn't like a good sub RD?

Well, a better question is who enjoys a well-written sub RD? I love it when writers can go into the psychology behind certain acts. The fact that you were able to make this both a convincing argument using factual information species-wise and still keep it erotic gives me no other stronger inclination than to tell you so and favorite this story.

'a bit like a prismatic .'

A prismatic what? Sandwich?

Oh... Woooooow
Can we have a prequel too? I would love to see how these two got together, and how their relationship slowly developed to this

This was really good. I love the transformation and personality changes. It felt like a very natural progression.

I'm commenting for the sequel
And also, nice.

Hmm 100 comments? I'm going to need to think of a lot of things to say it looks like. Because i want that damn sequel!

Can I comment a hundred times? Because if it means a sequel I will.

sequel? SEQUEL!

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your pussy is happy

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i probably could have integrated that stuff better
if i tried

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me too

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go fuck a horse
oh wait...

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yeah i always pictured dash as being one of those guys that acts tough to everyone
and then likes to get spanked in the bedroom
like a republican politician

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yes

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yeah that would be pretty cool
i'll keep that in mind

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Loved it

Am i the only one who imagined the whole story with pinkie's mane down, pinkamena style ? It's so much sexier.

And yes, we need a sequel.

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Ha, jokes on you cuz I already do that!

This is very good written ^^

Wow that was better than I thought it was going to be. It was a very interesting delve into the psyches of these characters. You really should do one on Pinkie because this was was very interesting. As what I am sure was the intention the Rainbows thoughts and her psychology was the actual story and the sex was just a back drop for it.

I'm honestly having trouble putting how I feel about this story into words. I didn't really find it all that erotic, but I don't feel like I wasted my time reading it.
It's like... It was a character study that just happened to involve sex, and in that regard it was very well done!
It just didn't do much for me in the way of wanting to clop to it.

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you guys are right
this was meant less as clop and more as an exploration of how i characterize rainbow dash--she's outwardly confident and egoistic, but she acts that way because she's actually very insecure. she's caught between an inability to trust others and a burning desire for intimacy, which is part of why she's so loyal to those she cares about but tries to hide every negative emotion from everyone, afraid of being too open with them

if i do one for pinkie, it would revolve more around responsibility. but you'll find out more if that comes to pass

also i just wanted to write something that showed people/ponies having sex in a way that wasn't just rauchy lolporn.
actually i can only think of four other stories that actually bother exploring psychological interactions in relationships with power imbalances (spike's really, really, really bad day, risk aware consensual pony, rainbow/Dash, and competent villains).

god damn i sound like a fucking egghead
analyzing the fuck out of this shit
who cares

oh and also stealing harmony is really good but that's technically a rape fic so it doesn't count
but rapetrain-express is good at feels and psychology

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I care, and fuck you for thinking I don't.
You're an awesome writer,
and I look forward to seeing that Pinkie study,
and I'm going to look at those other stories you linked,
but fuck you.

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fair enough, yo

Ill help!

all the explanations are good and all but you told the emotions at first then you showed us next time just show also good story

A sequel would be AWESOME!!! :D

I can't seem to express properly how much I enjoyed this story.

Surprisingly good, I liked their interactions *I mean their social interaction, though the physical was pretty good too* and my only real complain as you've probably seen more then enough times is the need of a proof-reader. You had some interesting takes on the Pegasus and Earth Pony Societies when it came to how it affected their sexual nature and details like that always make a story more interesting; at least to me.

Best. Clopfic. EVAAAHH!!!
Srsly I liked the whole aspect with Pinkie's and Dashie's alter-ego's!

Daaaynum, this was well written and,
DAAAYNUM this is sexy!

And then Pancakes made comment contribution because author is good writer

I don't read clopfics unless they're done horribly or when they're just plain funny, but after being told repeatedly that i need to read this, i sat down and immediately had my face melted.

Seriously, this is one of the most emotional and thought provoking things I've ever read. It's taken something usually used purely for sexual uses and made it completely and utterly emotional. Allowing someone to take everything you are and pulling you apart and trusting them to put you back together is the apex of intimacy and affection.

The greatest thing i can say about this fic is that I can't get it out of my head.

Bravo.

Very nice...

It's very good, almost like you wrote a script for an episode.

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hey thanks i'm glad you enjoyed it
and i'm pleased that it turned out so well
i wasn't really going for a porn story
well i was in the beginning
but clop honestly doesn't do much for me
so i only like clop stories if they're
1) emotionally engaging
or
2) extreme enough to provoke an emotional response
and i leave the second one to guys like rapetrain and anongladje

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pretty sure an mlpfim episode wouldn't include graphic bondage porn
but thanks i like the way it turned out

Today, on a VERY VERY special episode of My Little Pony...

Wow... okay then I think bondage actually makes sense to me now...

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Oh wow......that was....intense so very intense... I have yet to see dash played like this....to so fully give up everything to be so totaly controlled takes an insane amount of trust on both parts

This is so amazing I was pleasantly surprised at how in-depth this got with the details; it looks like you put a lot of thought into the pony psychology. Simply fabulous job! I can't wait for 100 comments cause I would love to see more of this Pinkie!

This is a fantastic look into loyalty, Pegasus psychology, bondage, and trust. This is how BDSM fics should be done, right here. Every moment was sweet in its trust-building way, and I... should probably go to sleep instead of spending half an hour finding ways to express how happy this story of yours made me. Suffice it to say that it was incredibly obvious throughout how much the two of them love each other, and that's beautiful.

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MOAR

"Do you trust me... with your life?"

Holy fuck that is fucking hot as fuck.

I think I remember reading somewhere that the most erotic words anyone can say are: "I trust you".
I happen to agree.

Anyway, this was amazing. I love clop that isn't just mindless fucking but has some kind of relationship and meaning backing it. This had that in spades. Wonderful depiction of Dash's psychology; it's very believable. I'm always impressed when a story can temporarily convince me of a ship that I don't support (PinkieDash in this case), and this one certainly did. I really felt the love between these two ponies. Great job.

There were a few odd typos (missing words mostly) but I couldn't even keep track of them because I was too engrossed in the plot. I might re-read this later.

Comment, you're amazing

This takes S&M to a whole new level. Great story

Wow, Just wow. Never have I read a more emotionally engaging, extremely powerful story on this website. Hay, you were even able to make the clop emotional! Your expertise in psychology really supported the Dash's transformation into such an emotional state.

A few typos, misspellings, forgotten words here and there, but I honestly don't think you would need a proofreader; the point gets across just fine, and if you read though the text one more time looking for mistakes, you would be able to find them all.

It's rare to find an S&M clopfic (or any story, for that matter) that focuses so heavily on the feelings of the characters, but you raised the bar tenfold.
Keep it up; I'll be watching.
--Warlord

Wow, this story was absolutely amazing, I loved the pacing, the range of emotions in both of the characters, annnd of course, the clop itself was excellent, I really really hope you expand on this story, it would make me so so happy