A guy. A guy who writes stories. Stories about ponies. (And sometimes robots).
There are all kinds of treasures to be found in Canterlot's antiques district: out of print books, out of fashion clothing, baroque-styled furniture...and the occasional object of unimaginable magical power.
Fortunately, one of the Elements of Harmony has found it.
Unfortunately, it's Rainbow Dash. Can the pegasus be trusted to wield such power responsibly? Can anypony?
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Rainbow Dash, the Element of Responsibility!
I foresee lots and lots of shenanigans coming up here.
an then she found out that all Djin´s are Assohles....besides Norm and Genie
Yay, new Tumbleweed fic!
*Reads*
Firstly, this;
"I've got nothing but your best wishes at heart, Miss. In fact, I am here to serve you."
"You're going to challenge me to a dance off?"
That cracked me up good and proper
It could do with a couple of editing read-throughs though as I did notice a few bits of dialogue that were off punctuation wise with fullstops instead of commas, a 'Rainbow dash', a double space, etc. just to pick a few examples.
Still great use of Rainbow Dash and very much a fave and thumbs up already
Oh, this is gonna be good -- I'm glad you started to write pony again!
Reminded me of this fic. Btw, the oncoming Wonderbolt episode could interfere with what you're planning here. Just a thought.
(But psst, Rarity's mane is not blue, it's purple!
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Ahahah this will be entertaining.
Hi,
In overview, I think this story starts out well, there's a bit of scene-setting with some nice interaction between Rarity and Rainbow Dash before getting straight onto the premise. It's a bit wobbly in the middle (see below for my feelings on that, although I'm well aware that some of the notes I think are 'missed' with be pitch-perfect for other readers), then it tilts downwards into a rip-roaring ride in the last page that leaves me panting for more.
That said, and past the first flush of excitement, let's go back to the top and explore some of those niggles I mentioned - the story is well written, and yet, somehow, it didn't quite feel that way. I found myself checking whether the plural of 'curio' was really 'curios' (which it seems it is). There are moments that seem a little forced. I recognised that they were funny without actually laughing at them. For example, Rainbow Dash wilfully misunderstands the djinn's name as 'Gin', which is right, then comments on Applejack's name, and points out that it's not that strange. Writing this, I now realise that my problem is I don't perceive Rainbow Dash as having that level of introspection: To say something and then immediately consider whether or not she's right, and decide she wasn't... that feels wrong to me. I'm not sure what would've been more 'right' here - maybe Rainbow continuing her mistake in that direction, and 'Gin's' stuck making ongoing and ignored corrections would've been funnier. But maybe it would've been bucking a dead tree, instead, and the more eloquent version chosen here is correct. I don't know. Niggles aside, I liked this one very much.
This has been a Orient Express Explorers review.
Looking forward to this.
Oh boy. Dash is not going to enjoy this, I can tell that much. I look forward to the trials and tribulations.
oh this is going to be good.
This story ISGOOOOOOOOOOOD
And then, SHENANIGANS!
Gee, this isn't gonna backfire on Dahsie, no sirree! [/sarcasm_over_9000]
Wait -- was that wrong? Should I not have done that?
Heheheh, that escalated quickly.
god fucking damit.hold on.(unleashed a lightning storm( from infamous)upon Twilight,Applejack, Rarity, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie and they all on the ground.barley alive.)RUN rainbow dash RUN.
And... Dash is totally bucked, isn't she.
Hah. Didn't see that one coming.
Hmm. I wonder if her friends are intelligent enough to realize that, while fast enough to break the light barrier, Dashie DOESN'T have the power to screw around with reality... Or Celes for that matter? I'm guessing they're not.
Hi!
Er, you ARE working on the next chapter, right? I mean, it's not on hiatus or anything. It would be such a shame if you didn't finish it. We like your stories.
So it doesn't have to be *that* way... so what way is it?
Or did you just forget to mark it complete?
I too, am perplexed. It appears that this story is over, yet it is still marked as "incomplete." Is there more to this tale? If it is, I enjoyed it! A quick little read, and enjoyable to boot!
The very last line was a nice little bit of attention to detail, although I imagine that several historians would be interested as well.
Huh. Well, that was surprisingly easy. Hooray for the reality-altering potential of a wish!
Okay, great way to get 'out' of the whole wishes thing. Actually kinda brilliant.
So Dash and the djinn are free. Good! 
Another great story, Tumbleweed. How do you do it?!
No, seriously. How? I wish I was a fifth as good as you.
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Pshaw, flatterer. I suppose there's just the standard writing advice of 'read lots, and write more,' or something. Though honestly, I haven't been writing very much as of late- I had to really buckle down to wrap this one up (as one can tell by the gap between the last two chapters).
That reminds me, I should go read some more of your stuff and- holy crap, that "Savior of Worlds" fic of yours is over 100k! Looks like you've certainly got me beat when it comes to persistence. :)
Really rushed that ending too hard, but a good laugh overall. I give it three Pinkies!
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I'm going to have to disagree with the "Norm" part of that sentence. Norm is definitely an asshole.
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yeah but he is a cool one
And then Rainbow Dash gets arrested for stealing a cupcake, then permanently kicked out of the Wonderbolts. Or did that last wish undo Rainbow's wishes too?
I think my favorite part was Dash's description of Rarity. "Kinda snooty, but in a good way" is a very amusing way to put it.
A hilarious tale about the old stand by of the evil genie. Rainbow was quite a goof ball but it was funny the whole time.
Nice job
2340817 Well...there is this one fic...
Phazon had me read this story, and I'm very happy I did.