Daring Do vs Quicksand

Nothing can stop Daring Do, the greatest explorer in Equestria, from retrr... recla... getting the sacred statue back from the Monkey King, and especially not this blue quicksand!

Now with a Czech translation by krysohmyz.

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DubleTruble96

DubleTruble96 #1 · Mar 16th, 2013 · 1 · ·

I dunno what the dislike was for. This was actually pretty funny! Good job! +1 Like!

Moon-Chan

Moon-Chan #2 · Mar 24th, 2013 · · ·

This was excellent! ^^ I applaud you.
There were only two things I really have to critique here, then a few compliments. x3

1. Daring Do's Cutie Mark is a compass, not a treasure chest. But I still applaud you, as many writers wouldn't think to include what the pony's Cutie Mark is in their story.

2. A bit more description on Daring Do would be helpful. Everything else was extended to, and almost past, the limit of the story.

I applaud you in more ways than possible. This was original, hilarious, and very well-written. I really see no true, logical reason there would be any dislikes.

Just one other thing; you might want to add a comedy tag to this. I bet almost all your readers were laughing (or were to the point of laughing) when reading this, especially the ending. You have a like from me.<3

Here, have a mustache.

bahatumay

bahatumay #3 · Mar 24th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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Thanks!
I dunno either... wish they would have explained why.

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Thank you!
The cutie mark part was on purpose. It was supposed to be an early hint that it was all in filly!Daring's mind, along with her inability to say long words like "mercenary". I'm glad you noticed that, though; I was wondering if anyone would.
...you're right. The first draft of the story only had 800 words so I added descriptions to pad it a bit and I kindof left Daring out, didn't I...
Tag added.
Thanks! I shall wear it proudly

CoastalSarv

CoastalSarv #4 · Mar 25th, 2013 · · ·

This is brilliant!

kalash93

kalash93 #5 · Mar 29th, 2013 · · ·

I liked this story. I am disappointed that this hasn't gotten several times more views. Anyway, this is Kalash93 writing up your review.

My initial impressions were positive. There's not a whole lot to review here, so I am going to brief with this story.

It's fun. Really, that's all it is. It is a big ball of fun. Admitedly, I smiled and laughed a few times at it. This is perfection as far as harmless fun stories go. The characterization is still solid, despite the lighthearted approach. Their personalities actually shine through. I like how you develop a warm relationship between Rory and Daring Do. That is the special thing that makes this entire fic work. The childishness of young Daring Do works really well. It's done just enough. It does not feel either excessive or neglected. It was cute to make her struggle with the vocabulary and pronunciations of some of the more difficult words. The mechanics and structure of your story are fine. I didn't notice any errors, but then again, I'm one of those guys who can only spot error when I'm trying to write. In terms of pacing and such, it's just fine. The length is perfect. The idea was innovative. I honestly cannot think of any criticism for it. It's not because it's perfect, but simply because it succeeds perfectly at its goals and is a prime example of what it is. It's insubstantial, but it's that lighthearted kind of insubstantial that comes across as charming and fun. Demanding more out of the story would ruin the magic and levity that makes it so damn good. It's not high art, but high art bores me and is never much fun to read. In conclusion, This is really a great feelgood story. It really deserves much more attention and love.

You win 8/10 flutteryays

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #6 · Apr 29th, 2013 · · ·

*Grins* very cute and fun.

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #7 · Jun 30th, 2013 · · ·

Who's judging? I'd be in the same boat. Heck,i'd probably fake it and then drag people in with me *whistles innocently* This is honestly a fantastic piece, the slight childishness of it adds so much without overwhelming it and fits the tone perfectly. The first time I read it I found myself blinking at the different cutie mark but it naturally made sense by the end. I also love the idea she's keeping count of what Rory owes her

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