• Member Since 5th Aug, 2012
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Grayson Gears

Not at all the person you probably think I am.

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Reads description, "Awww that is awesome!":twilightblush:

This story is absolutely adorable. The characterisations are flawless and, overall, it's just a beautiful piece. Well done! :)

Comment posted by LonMcGregor deleted Jan 9th, 2017

Okay so only one mistake and

He dad followed about a minute after, probably making sure the kitchen was in good order before he left.

He dad? I think you meant her dad.:pinkiehappy:

This is just. d'AAW it's so cute
My brain can't handle anymore cuteness. First all the cute pic people are sending me, then I'll Dash taking a nap on my screen and now this.
Cuteness meter is in the Red zone abandon ship. ABANDON SHIP!!

Reading this sweet story has put a smile on my face :pinkiesmile:

Thanks for writing this, my friend. I couldn't have asked for a better way to start my day :twilightsmile:

Because Family

Best Reason

This is a good story. It's simple and easy for us to connect with. "Because family". Indeed, and the feeling persists after reading.

There are some spots where you forgot a letter to a word or had the wrong "your/you're". They are easy fixes, so it didn't detract from the story at all. But if you went back again you'd probably catch them.

I enjoyed this a lot, thank you for writing! It's a great idea, having Dashie's father still alive. But what I liked about it even more is that you made Dash's father sort of inept at flying, which is something Dash would reject, but she still loves her father regardless. That's a great idea.

Keep writing!

- Church

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