When one of Twilight's spells goes horribly wrong, the implications prove disastrous. Her horn is damaged, one of her friends is sorely affected, and the rest of Ponyville may be at great risk. It's now up to Twilight to figure out how to fix everything before it's too late.
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Oh wow. That... that was great.
Seriously. Thank you for making me giggle like a maniac.
oh my....
I'm okay with this.
Loved it.
Okay, wow, just wow - that was awesome! A ton of laughs with plenty of saucy (and even naughty) thrills, we need more!
"It was just, after all the places it had been, she wasn't sure it would ever be clean again." - this had me staring at the screen, utterly dumbfounded, for a minute or two. Best line ever. Great work!
Please feel free to write about Twilight accepting Luna's invitation! :D
AWESOME!!!
"Did you see her?!"
"She went that way!"
"I can't wait-"
"-grab her tail and-"
"-gonna play with her wings-"
"-heard she tastes like cupcakes!"
Am i the only one that noticed this cupcakes reference?
This story was fucking fantastic. XD I'm not sure I've read a better "Twilight messing up a spell" fic. Not that I've read many, but still...
Cheers!
And that's how Ponyville was saved!
This is a really great story! Love the idea for it (I'm gonna be annoyed if Princess Molestia appears though).
Great story, just one critique: you seem to have a slight problem with homophones. For example, you used mote when you meant moat and site when you meant sight. Not something that spellcheck will pick up but to me it breaks the flow of the story. Other than that, I look forward to seeing more from you!
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Great observation! I'll be sure to keep a close eye out for those as I comb the rest of the story! (One of my other stories also had a problem with cue vs queue, and gorilla vs guerrilla, so I totally concur that this is something I have to work on in general!)
I'm just...
I don't know. A lot of this just seems so overly complex. Did it not occur to her that maybe Princess Celestia knew exactly what spell was cast since she showed up at the site of a banned spell being cast by her personal student? I don't know, asking the Princess doesn't seem like such a bad idea. Certainly not worse than breaking into her freaking castle.
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It's true. That seems to be the bane of stories like these. The cop-out of "just ask the Princess" keeps popping up.
But then again, you have to ask yourself. Why didn't the Princess just fix the darn thing when she was there the first time? I actually address this issue in the third chapter directly.
A lot of errors with punctuation, but still fucking awesome
Speaking of homophones, the letter from Princess Luna:
"I thoroughly enjoyed your visit hear in Canterlot"
>hear
That's the only one I actually caught while casually reading.
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Fixed. Thanks.
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Isn't this the third chapter?
While I agree that this is the sort of situation that should be easily solved by "talk to the Princess and explain the situation," I can also see that Twilight wouldn't want to do that. I mean... after all, she is the pony who came up with the whole "banished and then imprisoned in the place that you were banished to!" idea. It just wouldn't occur to her that this is the exact sort of situation that Celestia doesn't have banned books destroyed for.
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. Sorry!
Ah, okay. I see. It wasn't the third chapter. I'm just
Wait, wait... uhm....
What ever happened with the wedding that Twilight was prepping for in the first place? Did that still go off?
(I know, I know - of all the things to think of....)
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Yeah. The wedding wasn't for another week or two, and all these events happened in ~3 - 4 days. But yes, the wedding did eventually happen.
Oh, good. It was just the only loose end that stuck out in my mind when we hit the end there.
Well written though! Certainly one of the most enjoyable "spell gone wrong" fics I've read, and it 'felt' more reasonable to me than some of the other "love spell gone wrong" ones.
I loved your story. So much I can't wait for more. Please keep being awesome.
*wild applause!*
Both well-written and VERY funny. You did a great job! Thank you for the excellent story!
Hehe, loved the story, and I knew after a short bit of reading there was going to be a Love Potion #9 reference in it at some point.
Great Celestia! That story is just wonderful!
In some places I was just rolling on the floor from laugh
You know what's funny as Hell, right now there's an ad on the bottom of my screen that says "Free shipping every day."
Also: "COME BACK, TWILIGHT! Widdle Wawwity needs to cuddle..." Best. Line. Ever!
wow that was an amazing story, i laughed so much and i LOVED the end
<3
This kinda seemed overly complicated and very confusing in parts. In some areas, I found myself skimming a bit, since it just didn't make a lot of sense or it was just a bit overkill for an otherwise simpler answer. Plus, I was disappointed in a lot of parts, such as Rarity never really getting any real attention other than their mating session that kept Spike away. It just seemed kinda rushed. Sure, Twilight would most likely be in a hurry to fix everything, but...well, I just think you could've done a lot more to make the story either funnier or sexier. Poor Rarity; I felt really bad for her. And...that's another thing; was there, like, three different spells used near the end? That part REALLY confused me. Rarity tried, then Twilight tried, then Celestia told her she didn't need her horn to use her magic...what?!?! I really don't know what happened in a lot of parts.
Rarity being the one to start off the chain of events near the end felt so sad; her "last" words were "you're breaking up with me" or something like that...just seemed so cruel. Sure, I suppose she kisses Twilight afterwards, but even that's kinda vague with what her thoughts were. Then the whole scene with Luna; didn't make a lot of sense to why Twilight suddenly fell for the spell and attacked her in a crazy love spurt. Oh, and let's not forget Trixie; that's just a personal annoyance to me, since I hate it when poor Trixie is cast aside and forgotten or hurt. But, then again, I love Trixie, so ignore that if you wish.
Sorry for basically going on about all the "negative" things I saw. I honestly did find that this was a well-written story, with a good (if not confusing) plot and storyline, good length, all the characters were pretty much in-character (for who they were when in their love mode), and it was a nice idea.
I actually had a suggested story called "Rarity-Behind Bars"...
Twiarity (TwilightxRarity) and twiluna (TwilightxLuna) are my 2 favorite Twilight shippings.
please tell me there's going to be a follow up story, please ?
this was so awesome, i want more of this
I was sorta iffy about the whole thing. Right up until the end.
That last paragraph, the letter from Luna though... that made the whole story.
Twiluna sequel?
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I approve the motion. A Twiluna has been requested!
I just spent the past hour reading it, and gosh, did I laugh a lot. This was great, I didn't expect this at all! Amazing, amazing read. I knew Celestia was going to laugh about it at the end. 5 stars, and fav'd. I think this is some of the best writing I've seen yet, everypony was perfectly in character. Great job.
Also, pretty much every part with Rarity was hilarious, she's such an odd pony.
33,333 words
I haven't even read it yet, but I am rating it up just because this is exactly 33,333 words. You are a boss.
You know, this didn't really seem like a "spell gone wrong" to me. The spell did exactly what it was supposed to; it just wasn't what Twilight thought it was.
Perhaps, next time, Twilight will check some of the other spells in the book and notice the suddenly inconsistent writing style.
Oh man, I was cracking up laughing at this story!
A TwiLuna sequel would be high on my to read list! Just saying.
Congratulations on making exactly 33,333 words of it.
It was also pretty funny to read. 
Well done.
Heh. Poor Twilight.
Very good story. Hope the rest of yours are just as good.
Its cliche, over used and so appropriate.
Me Gusta
The BUCK AM I READING?!
I think I'm gonna be sick... so much romance...
The trick to magic being worked in their was funny, though. Decent story... even if the material was distinctly away from my personal tastes.
33,333 words exactly?
I say
Sequel, please!! Cause this was pretty good. And the TwiLuna clifhanger left me wanting more....