Six years before Luna's return, Ponyville lost an important citizen - Seeking Song, its first librarian. No pony knew why she had left so abruptly but now after a decade she has returned. On her first day back, she finds the one thing she never expected to - an opportunity for closure. In the months left to her, Seeking Song imparts some of her adventures and knowledge in the hope that she will live on in memories and accomplishments of the ponies around her.
After all, our legacies are written by those that survive us.
(A companion story to Aria of the Abandoned)
Chapters (6)
So I am here to make a review,
that will hopefully help you.
So, author, sit back, take a seat,
and I'll show why I'm an elite.
Now, I generally only review stories that have received more downvotes than upvotes. This is why I decided to take a look at your story (At the time I write this review, you have one downvote and no upvotes). I think I understand why that is.
The first thing I noticed, and anyone will, is your summary. It does not leave a positive impression. First off, the first and second sentences should really be combined, as the way they are now, it's pretty awkward. Next, you're talking about an OC, and then with no transition you're suddenly talking about Sweetie Belle being exiled. Now, at the bottom of your description, I see that this is a companion story, so I'm assuming that the readers of the other story would completely understand your description. I, and I believe anyone who is just seeing this story, do not.
Now, I must say I was impressed by the last line of your summary, and I was even more impressed by your story once I actually opened it. I noticed only a few typos, and your grammar was more than acceptable. After reading the first chapter, I must say I am intrigued. The trick is for you to get more people to actually view your story, which I believe can be achieved by improving your summary, and getting a (fitting) cover picture.
There really isn't much more I can say beyond that.
lolcatsmanseven, The Rhyming Battalion leader of the Impartial Investigation Ensemble.
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Thanks for the feedback, summary has been tweaked and a search for a cover pic has begun. Glad you liked the story itself.