The names Earthen Bonfire. My great, great, grandparents created one of the greatest devices of the pre-war world. unfortunately before the unveiling the balefire began. Eventually the Steel Rangers found us and teamed up with the stable's inhabitants. Now the head scribe Cotton Candy and I are alone on a mission that may change our outlook on life, family, and factions.
Written as a tribute to the device that let me truly become a member of the FoE community. LONG LIVE THE KINDLE!
Chapters (2)
"Now me and [P2] are alone on a mission..."
Not sure whether you should use "me" or "I"? It's easy! Remove the other subject and read the sentence again: "Now me am alone on a mission..." You will clearly see that "I" is correct in this situation.
"unavailing" Did you mean "unveiling"?
"stables inhabitants" In a possessive case, you should usually use an apostrophe.
"that may change out outlook" Typo here as well.
Hope you found some part of this comment useful!
COMPLIMENT: Er... I liked FoE as well?
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Sorry I wrote this pretty late they should be fixed now. Aside from the typos in the description how did you like the story?
liking story so far... have a fav and i would like to ask you something in private...
whens the next chapter? and can i also be a prereader?
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First off sorry I took so long to reply
Next I'm not sure I have a general plan for what's going to happen but I need to write it.
Lastly yes you can pre-read just send me a note with your G-mail and I'll let you comment when it's on G-doc so you can tell me what to do to make it better.
1812342 ok
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No my laziness did. It's almost there (same with the Sky's Heart) but I don't sit down and write. Doesn't exactly help that Conception's more addictive then crack, I mean it I haven't obsessed this much on a game since X and Y, I didn't get to sleep till like 5:30. Atlus did to good.