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Rainbow Dash isn't Scootaloo's only hero. Can three intrepid fillies cut their teeth as Superheroes and earn their cutie marks? Is Pinkie Pie really the notorious Okie Dokie Loki Pie-Smith? There's only one way to find out... CUTIE MARK CRUSADER CRIME-FIGHTERS, YAAAAAY!

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greatest sound effects! SNIKT!

:rainbowkiss:

That was rather cute.

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That was sort of the reaction I was going for...

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...but that works for me too :yay:

Now, I'd be happier if the people downvoting it would also leave comments. I mean, what did I do wrong? :unsuresweetie:

Obviously the forces of E-vil are striking the thumbs-down button in their rage at being defeated...er...dehooved! Or is that hooves-down?

I can not believe how good this is. This is the kind of realistic absurdity I try for, and you have done it perfectly. I must now worship you. Also moustache :moustache:.

Yeah, I definitely got enough laughs out of this one.

Iron mare having more than one special somepony, Pinkie's mask at the end, Lightning.:rainbowlaugh:

"Thor? Really?" was pretty much my childhood reaction to learning that there were Thor superhero comics.

My only criticisms:raritydespair:: Rarity and Fluttershy's dialogue seemed a bit off, as compared to Pinkie who was spot on. Pinkie's ending with the mask was hilarious, but her saying "I'm breaking the fourth wall" to Twilight detracts from the joke IMO. Having her reveal the mask that is oddly Loki-approriate, walk back in and reveal a mask underneath is perfectly meta-Pinkie and funny, but I think you overexplained the joke there by having her explain anything to Twilight.

Still, very funny. It made me smile, smile, smile. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

This story has been reviewed by: The Equestrian Critics Society

Story Title: The Cutie Mark Crusaders: The Mighty Hoovengers

Author: Squirrelloid

Reviewed by: Shahrazad

The Cutie Mark Crusaders: The Mighty Hoovengers is not an action story as one might expect. It’s a comedy going for laughs. Elusive, slippery, hard to catch laughs. It’s fortunate that this story can get the reader to laugh without being too random. It’s short but gets several laughs before the final word.

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Score: 7.5/10

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Thanks for the review. It seems to me that most of the review focuses on what I did right, but of course there's another 2.5 points I failed to achieve. Don't suppose you'd care to share what it is I've done wrong or simply failed to do?

(I'm guessing a little bit of confusion as to who is speaking doesn't account for all or even most of that... but time to reread and see if I can figure out where you were confused).

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I'm going to point you to Shahrazad for that, seeing as he was the one who reviewed your fic.

I'm just a simple admin/messenger :twilightsmile:

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