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Twilight awakens to find her world in pieces. What happened? Who did this? And where is Princess Celestia? According to a letter she found from her, she was kidnapped from a pulverized Canterlot Castle. Without the Elements of Harmony at hoof, Twilight and the remaining pony posy must journey across Equestria to obtain a greater secret power, and, with some help from a few unexepected allies, circumvent the ominous villain in a battlefield they never anticipated.

Author's Note: Crossovers
- Wishology, the Fairly OddParents special
- Metroid
- Super Smash Brothers Brawl

My Fair Twilie (Part 2): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/70287/my-fair-twilie-book-2-3
Leader of the Pack (Part 3): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/71188/leader-of-the-pack-book-3-3

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 20 )

1742983
Regidar is either doing an experiment on whether his opinion can change a story rating, or he is broken. But I don't blame him. It's 1 am.

Damn stuff gets read fast on this site! I hope to keep up with you guys. I've had this story three chapters long gathering dust in my word processor. So I scratched everything but the first chapter, revised my storyline, and will finally finish this freaken thing! I'm hoping you'll like it as much as Pinkie's Game, if not more so. Feel free to comment on future chapters as well, all! And remember that even though I'm true to the show, I also like to be creative when I can. :yay:

Quite cool, I hate cliffhangers though :( keep up the good work!

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Woah!
What?
:rainbowhuh:
Grrr Cliffhanger

Commence read,
Hmmm, intersting.
TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!

Could do with more description, and everything seemed just too easy.

It was several more minutes before the ponies were face-to-face with the mountains. At the foot of the mountains: a mysterious cavern of some sort. They stood at the entrance to the cavern, all three mares and stallions hesitant to enter, but knowing there was no other way. As soon as Twilight put a hoof forward, a shadow emerged from within the cavern. A dark, shady figure approached the three ponies, its face and its whole appearance in shadow, hidden from sight.

What were the mountains like?
Were they tall?
How big was the cavern?
3 mares?
Was it a confident step?
A shaky step?

Any way, cool story line. You could spend a little more time on it, but you have got me hooked.

EDIT:
Just read your profile,
My brothers autistic and he writes fan fictions too, he wasnt as good as he is now, but the more he wrote the better he got. I think you could improve too! Lovely story and I love it, I cant wait for more chapters!

1762218 Just a little explanation: there is method to my madness. Most of your questions will be answered immediately the next chapter when the metaphorical sun shines on the cavern. The "three mares" line is simply summing up the number of ponies (mares/stallions) in the scene. "And" in this case, is simply treating it mathematically.

Anyway, I've said this once, and I'll say it again: of all the books and novels I've written in the past: fanfiction is my greatest challenge. As much as I watch the show, and as much as it completes me, combining it and literature...not as easy as it sounds. Science-fiction is actually my greatest genre...I've written more science-fiction stories than there are ponies in Ponyville. And I've written two works which both exceed 200 pages, my longest exceeding 250...kinda emphasizes my "fanfiction is hard for me" thing. :facehoof:

So, yeah, I actually write a LOT...just not much fanfiction. So all the wires in my brain which give me my strength as a writer are connected in other areas....But, yeah, I get better the more I write - fanfiction or not - so the only way to get better is to keep writing fanfiction...assuming I keep coming up with ideas. There's so much fanfiction, I fear I'll accidentally plagiarize someone with one of my ideas. :twilightsheepish:

1764145
That amount of pages is a great sucess, way more then I have ever wrote :trixieshiftleft:
but yeah, just keep writing fan fiction, then maybe you will be as good in fan fiction as sicence fiction. I know what you mean with the wires in your brain, somedays i can write on end, other days I forget how to spell 'and'. Still, cant wait for more!

1764468 You know what you're reading of 'All the King's Mares' is a rewrite? The original was lame, and was sooooooo boring for me to write, I would get like three words in every two months. Then I recently had a revelation, fixed it, and now it's totally awesome. So I'm able to get like, well, two chapters a day in (approximately). Oh, and I know all about "wires" in the brain: neurons and synapses and such. My current non-fanfiction novel is about neurology, and I'm also in a psychology class. I literally know how you learn new things. Doesn't make learning for me any easier, though. Ha ha ha! :rainbowlaugh:

Ha ha ha,
Glad you made it better.
Can't wait for more!1765245

1802833 Well, it's almost twice the length of my second-longest fanfiction (Pinkie's Game).

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