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Akela Stronghoof


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Dipper finds a cave in the woods. When Mabel joins him to investigate, ponies ensue.

Cover art is this until I can find something better.

Written because of a complete sudden obsession with Ken Ashcorp's "Supernatural," as well as the excellent Disney show "Gravity Falls."

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 74 )
Comment posted by Akela Stronghoof deleted Dec 14th, 2012

Gravity Falls: now with twenty percent more pony.

We all knew THIS would happen at some point or another...

If there's one crossover that needs to happen more often, it's Gravity Falls and ponies.

Also Grunkle Stan in Equestria because that would be hilarious.

Nicely done so far, faving to track. Watch the repeated usage of "the messy-haired boy" in an attempt to mix up your protagonist's descriptors; it's a very noticeable and obtrusive phrase, and too much usage becomes grating. I know it can seem like you're overusing your protagonist's name when you keep talking about it, but overuse of the same descriptor lends undue gravity to that particular detail of Dipper's appearance.

I love the bits with the Gravity Falls folks; I have to withhold judgment on the Pony part to see if anything they're saying in the conversation over lunch becomes relevant to the overplot because barring that I think a single scene at the restaurant establishing "normal day in Ponyville" might have been enough. Can't tell yet.

Otherwise, the prose is strong and pretty engaging, and I haven't even watched very much of the crossover property, so I'm not in it for the character familiarity; I guess that's a good sign, right? Hope you keep up with it!

gravity falls and my little pony friendship is magic...........now 20% cooler:rainbowdetermined2:

You are the king of crossover. BTW, Supernatural is an awesome song.

YES definitely tracking this.
I mean, it's my two fave cartoons AT THE SAME TIME! :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Frostanimal12 deleted Dec 15th, 2012

SO... MUCH.. GOD DAMN YES!!
I luv Gravity Falls. :3

Oh god I've heard so much about this show. I must watch this!
Figured there would be a crossover coming along.

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"undue gravity"
I see what you did there.:rainbowlaugh:

So I'm guessing this is a variation of the Growth/Shrink Crystal Dipper found in the woods? I could totally see this happening in a Gravity Falls episode.

Wow, this looks so good! I've only seen a few episodes from Gravity Falls, but I can already tell that it's a great series. And every unicorn gets affected by the Pines siblings and the crystal appearence? :rainbowderp: You're giving a very interesting start.

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Oh god now I need to do that.

"Kids!"

"Grunkle Stan! What are you doing he--"

"Nevermind that, it doesn't matter! We gotta go! The locals use gold coins, and I may have accidentally permanently borrowed a few. Oh no, here's one now! Kids, cover me!" *throws Dipper and Mabel at an unsuspecting Twilight*

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Fun fact: First attempt to submit was denied due to not enough ponies. Author may have gone overboard in adding ponies.

Fun fact #2: Author may have also had lesson on Homeric epithets in school. Author will attempt to rectify problem in future installments

Thanks for the advice :twilightsmile:

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Why thank you!

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That's actually a really interesting idea, but no. The Crystal is just Applied Phlebotinum, and it will recieve an explanation when it needs it and when I come up with one.

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It's not as much "affected-by-Pines-twins" as it is "Crystal-giving-off-huge-pulse-of-unfocused-magic." Specifics will be explained next chapter.

I kinda knew that the first chapter was going to end with Dipper and Mabel landing in Equestria. However I did not expect the Twilight and other unicorns reacting to the teleportation like that. Can't wait to see Mable choking all the ponies with love! Squee:twilightsheepish:

MUST HAVE CHAPTER 2 !!!!!!! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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Feel free to steal it. I have ideas, but no motivation. Also, I think Old Man McGuckins (from The Legend of the Gobblewonker) could be coerced into making a trans-dimensional portal, should Gruncle Stan, Wendy (The Princess of Love desire shipping? Nahhh-Yes), or Soose notice Dipper and Wendy missing.

WHO IS THE ONE WHO HAS DISLIKED THIS!WHO!!
*gets out hammer that says : Hammer for pwning dislikers*

Comment posted by Theclockmaker deleted Dec 31st, 2012

just goina leave this here

:twilightsheepish:YesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesYES!

This story finally updated!

Kudos for making one of the few "My Little Pony" "Gravity Falls" crossovers on the internet!

I, sir, applaud you.

Also,

FIRST!!!

{By the way, for the people who watch the show, we know who has the second and third journals. But if that's the case, who has the first? It might be a good plot twist to see Princess Celestia holding the first journal in her possession, as well as having met the creator of said journals before.}

Interesting first impression.

you sir, are awesome.

Really good so far; excellent idea as well, crossing two of the best cartoons currently on TV right now.

Everyone is in character, the OCs are interesting, your descriptions of the scenery and action are very well done and unique.

That cliffhanger was cruel man, way too cruel. Hopefully the next chapter is well on the way to completion.
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Lol, they say "duty" :rainbowlaugh:.

So Dipper made first contact...by slamming face-first into Twilight.

Great first impressions we got here. XD

I'm expecting Mabel to some how both simultaneously ruin this first encounter (after dealing with the timberwolves of course) and make it work in the kids favor as well. She'll also try to ride on Rarity's back screaming "YAY, a unicorn!"

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Dipper is one for good first impressions, ain't he?

Nice bridge chapter, here, with some good basic narrator's insights into Twilight, Dash, and Dipper. Keep it up!

if we just keep going straight we’re bound to find a town eventually!

Finally someone understands!

Still don't know much about Gravity falls, but this is good. And I want MORE. (because that's how you ACTUALLY spell it):pinkiehappy:

I'd like at least 5 chapters down before I start so I can go on a reading binge. How long would that take you?

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You should take some time to watch the cartoon, it's hilariously endearing and surprisingly poignant.

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Thank you very much! Characterization for those three isn't hard, given that between them there's only really two distinct personalities (Smart yet neurotic - Twi and Dipper, hotheaded and impatient - Dash). The real problem will come when I have to write for Pinkie and 'Shy, because they're just so hard to nail down. It's reaaaaaally hard to capture Pinkie's bubbly, perky mode of speech in text, and with Fluttershy I never know if she's being too forward or too much of a shrinking violet.

EDIT: I might have come off there implying that those personalities were ALL that those characters were. My mistake. I meant to say that Twi and Dipper are similar on the surface. I do realize that Dash isn't always "rah let's go I'm impatient rah," and Twi and Dipper aren't always "blah blah pessimism this will end badly," but these are the first two chapters and I'm just showing some fleeting moments of gung-ho machismo and logical cynicism before I actually attempt to flesh out their characters more.

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I don't know if I've said this before, but I absotively posilutely LOVE your avatar.

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Hmmm. . . Five chapters? Probably mid-to-late February, given that I have midterms in a few days and I only really get to write at my free periods in school.

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Such a long wait till Feb 15, when Boss Mabel airs :fluttershysad:

1964112 Thanks, I saw the picture... somewhere. And I knew I just had to use it.

Aw yiss! New Chapter :raritystarry:

And for future reference, I'd patiently wait for a long chapter if the quality is great. Not that yours isn't, but the wait would be worth it.

Hooray for caffeinated Twilight!
Also, you might want to cut back on Twilight's posturing around Princess Celestia, she seems to be a little more comfortable with her in the show now. Scraping her horn on the ground (almost) seems a little much, though the babbling can be blamed on the coffee.

Ah, so Equestrian is a different language in this fic.
It'll be interesting to see how they'll get around that...unless it's just "use spell, sudden understanding".

Good chapter. I like the cameo's to anime Mabel is making. Interesting english and Equestrian are two different languages in this fic. How will they get around this? Will anyone or anything else from Gravity Falls show up?

2042450 i'd acctully be okay with ''use spell,sudden understanding'' if twi had to work on lerning the spell or tweaking it to work right.

Goddammit! Equestrian and English are basicaly the same thing ;~; Y U NO RESEARCH! lol jking but if you want it that way im fine just slightly dissapointed...

Nice work, and glad to see this story continuing. Check tense:

They looked kind of like Diamond Dogs, actually,

The quote above is presented in italics, which, at least in your style, is analogous to the quotation mark when the character is doing internal narration. Twilight would not actually be thinking these words in the past tense in this situation. She's musing to herself the words "They look kind of like Diamond Dogs, actually". Either lose the italics or put it in present tense. Either would fix it and the latter is more clear.

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You updated!!!!!!!!

Twilight took a sip of coffee and let out an involuntary yawn, clamping her muzzle shut instantly so as to not let the offending sound go. If she let herself yawn once, it would make her even more tired, and she would yawn even more, and so on in a vicious cycle until she fell asleep and then she wouldn’t be the first one to talk to them and somepony else would write a paper on them and get it published, and it would become famous and she’d live the rest of her life knowing that she had been so close and eventually she’d despair so much that Princess Celestia would ban her from magic for being too much of a buzz kill and she’d end up living alone on the outskirts of Hoofington with three hundred cats—

YES. I agree.

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