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little dashie


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This is my first fan fic so don't go to easy on it... constructive criticism helps writers become better.... And tell me if you would like a push on chapter 2 it is ready for you guys!

but i will try to get chapters out every day or when i have spare time...

127927 Okay why you have adorable picture and name!? That constructive criticism enough for you?. . . No? Oh... Hmmm. . . perhaps it need more Dash of a Rainbow (hint hint).:rainbowlaugh:

Jk But is seems nice, and interesting in a good way.

127954 thanks rainbow will show up later in the story but its still rumbling in my head on what to do with her

i will post chapter 2 in a couple of hours

Chapter 3 will be out tomorrow and four will be a little later that day

Hope you stick to the end!

like the gent above me stated, this fic does need some work, but i have high hopes for it. a track from me, you have recieved.

128990 thank you for the support!

as i have stated earlier chapter three will be posted some time tommorow.... My editor... im afraid has not yet seem the next few chapters.... so any mistakes are all mine and i will take full credit for them....

I also would like to announce those who searched for the clop will not have to wait long but don't go through it just trying to get to it... please take your time... if you miss some details you might just end up getting pissed in later chapters..

Also i would like to aplogize to you who tracked and notice the title change... I was browsing when i noticed some one had already taken the title 'Why me?' and had made a sequel as well... Again very sorry if you get confused :facehoof:

Brohoof to you all ^-^ /)

alright here it is guys! Chapter 3.... sorry if its real early but i spent most of the night working on the 'polt' line and the plot line for the rest of the story.... so hope you guys liked it

dont forget to give me some feedback! :duck:

It's very nice. I like the way you develop backstory for your character. Although at some times the flashbacks seem forced onto the reader, this may just be the way you want it to feel. If that's the case, good job to you. If not, I'd suggest trying different transitions from reality to flashbacks. Other then that, I find this an overall above-par, or decent, read. I look forward to more chapters. :twilightsmile:

129906 The flashbacks are suppose to seemed forced due to the fact he cant remember the night before.... most people ive met tell me this is how it happens... for me not so much i just stop caring after i wake up

Ice

I loved this so far and I'm looking forward to the rest of it.You seem really good at description and despite taking credit for the mistakes the isn't that many.129906Dude this is getting weird.129042Yes I have.

Okay... Confusing but interesting at the same time! Nice one! :raritywink:

Chapter 4 Will be released in 8 hours, i am open to suggestions on what should happen next!

Ice

130276 you should have the kamehameha happen

Here it is guys chapter 4! right on time!

Chapter five will be posted early morn again and six in 24 hours!

I tell you what everpony.... Ill push chapter 5 to a few hours from now, if i get 5 suggestions on what you want or think should happen Best one gets featured later on!

eww... Sex... *pretends to put finger up mouth but ends up sick by accident* WHY MUST I HATE THE JUICY BITS?! :pinkiesick:

130971 i gave you a 'you don't have to read' statement.... also it was outline!!!!

131671 when i said constructive critism i didn't mean for fucking trolls....

on a lighter note chapter 5 in T minus 3 hours

i know i said i was gonna post this an hour from now but im am tired as fuck.... SO you are all lucky!

love you all (no homo0

bro hooves! ^-^/]

"Please leave your reaction to the ending!" ts3.mm.bing.net/images/thumbnail.aspx?q=1544632080690&id=047db1254a49114952c370799dbd96c1 jk! I'll keep my reaction to the ending.

this is pretty awesome! :yay: i like the sexy part

Ice

132778 Fuck you write your own story before you slag other peoples off.

132806 love you bro!!!!!

epicly awsome brohoof
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That came out terrible.... I DONT CARE THOUGH!!!

I was an hour early this morn so i am and hour early today....

Here is the scheldule for the rest of the story!
Central time
Ch 7-3am 1/16
Ch8-5pm 1/16
Ch9-5pm 1/17
Ch10-5pm 1/18
Epilouge-9pm 1/18

Sequel? TBA

Glad to hear the chapters are meant to be fewer and farther between. Now I don't have to go throught nearly as much torture by reading this shit.

As for the sequel, god forbid. If I wanted to read shit, I'd ask Kiernan to file another report.

And I'm going to be nice here. I know your editor. Make him edit the final two on Tuesday. No excuses!

133115 I've kind of had it with your shit.... but i have gone over the material and he will look at it...

as for you either read and enjoy or GTFO.... Tho fluttershy says to love and tolerate.... This is your ONLY post allowed to stay

4.3 rate thanks for the support guys!!!! :rainbowkiss:

Hey chill out....You actually have ok writing. I don't really like second person storyies but this one's a good time burner. Plus it actually has some sort of story. Besides...Bloodstains probably pissed he can't outwrite you:duck:

Ice

133115 Piss off do your own story THEN judge others it's pathetic that you get kicks by picking on really good stories.

Ice

Oc vs Rainbow Dash? pfft it was obvious.

133275 hehehehehe curveball next chapter!!!! tell me it was obvious and i'll grill your flanks and serve them to the diamond dogs

unrelated note: new tag to the story.... not to happy about it but my brain farted and i had a chapter on my hands....

>> Bloodstain Hey, if you want to be a bitch then that's okay. But if you want to be stupid and be a bitch out of your mind(literally) then you can buck off!

bitch thinking: OK
Bitch talking, typing, acting: Buck off!

>> little dashie Remember what Applejack said: "oh c'mon, that's just stinkin' thinkin'"

133466 enough guys as much as i enjoy watching u burn his ass i don't want a war in my comments please tone it down

great story!!!:pinkiehappy: as for the side story with applejack and ditzy i probably wouldn't read:twilightblush:

Early again.... Sorry... Or am I? No I am... I try to stick to the release times I swear... But it was release it now or when I woke up... I couldn't leave you guys waiting that long!!!!

The next chapter will be on time.... Or early? *snister smile* love ya!!! (no homo!!)

I love the story so far! Keep up the good work! My only recommendation would be to watch out for typos. Although they don't affect the story, there are quite a few.

133471 okay, I'll tone it down from now on.

Ice

The suspense meter just burst.

Ice

Wow that was....awesome

Amazing....just spectacular.
I agree with you making a sequel to this.
It would be pretty cool.

And to all the trolls out there: GO FUCK YOURSELFS!!!

Well idk i got three other fics on standby so if you guys want it badly ill be happy to deliver!:twilightsmile:

this will do nicely:moustache:

Your story, fabtacular! You have to make more! I know your finishing up on this story, but please make another! Your doing great. :raritywink:

For the sequel part I got to agree on that.

For the rating I suggest Teen unless you have some "Sex" scenes or a ton load of violence.

I suggest having this uploaded constant with 1k words per chapter.

Unleash the sequel BEFORE your other stories.

Thanks for listening!

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