my little pony: tails of the devil fruit

by negativezero

intro

It was a pleasant day for Sweet apple acres; the sun was bright but not overwhelming and the sound of the birds flapping their wings and singing would have made almost anybody in a bad mood cheer up. Applejack was as busy as always, bucking apple trees with her powerful back legs and watching as the buckets below slowly filled with brightly coloured apples ready to pursuit in whatever their profession would be.

Applejack was a rather pleasant pony, if you knew her personally you would know why, she was generous and was always there to help anybody in need she also had a real no nonsense attitude and didn’t stand for any rudeness towards her, her family and especially not her friends.

After an entire morning of seemingly endless apple bucking in the field of infinite apple trees, all standing tall and proud across the land, Applejack came across something bizarre, a tree, not that a tree amongst many other trees would be a bizarre thing to see, in fact it’s quite a common thing to see, but this particular tree was different then all the others, it certainly wasn’t an apple tree.

It was a different kind of tree, a tree Applejack had never seen before, it was covered in patterns of blue and grey and was misshaped in a rather unsettling swirly kind of way, but the strangest thing about the tree was what was growing off of its branches, dangling from each of its branches was a strange looking fruit, none the same shape or size as each other, but all different, they all resembled different kinds of normal fruit like strawberries or bananas, but were made odd by their patterns and miscoloured skin.

Applejack, curious, walked towards the tree and stared at it for a few seconds trying to figure out what it was doing there, and then went to buck the tree lightly with one of her back legs causing one of the fruits stem to snap and the fruit to fall onto the ground. Applejack picked the strange looking fruit up and examined it with her big eyes
“It certainly ain't no apple!” she thought to herself pulling a confused face.

Comments

[Zobeid]

Heaven help us!

[finesthour]

"It was a pleasant day for Sweet apple acres"

Already off to a bad start.

"Applejack was a rather pleasant person, if you knew her personally you would know why, she was generous and was always there to help anybody in need she also had a real no nonsense attitude and didn’t stand for any rudeness towards her, her family and especially not her friends. "

No, I don't know why, You need to explain better. Think of us as people who have no idea what MLP is.

"After an entire morning of seemingly endless apple bucking in the field of infinite apple trees, all standing tall and proud across the land, Applejack came across something bizarre, a tree, not that a tree amongst many other trees would be a bizarre thing to see, in fact it’s quite a common thing to see, but this particular tree was different then all the others, it certainly wasn’t an apple tree, it was a different kind of tree, a tree Applejack had never seen before, it was covered in patterns of blue and grey and was misshaped in a rather unsettling swirly kind of way, but the strangest thing about the tree was what was growing off of its branches, dangling from each of its branches was a strange looking fruit, none the same shape or size as each other, but all different, they all resembled different kinds of normal fruit like strawberries or bananas, but were made odd by their patterns and miscoloured skin."

Longest, painfullest, biggest run on sentence i have ever seen. Imagine saying that in one breath. So why make us read it?

"“It certainly no apple!” she thought to herself pulling a confused face."

Just... huh?

You do not pull a confused face. You put it on. And "It certainly no apple!" Is not even a sentence.

[Lunafan1k]

Uhm... Wut

[Blue Breeze]

i had always wanted a one piece crossover, but i dont know if this is it

[Guesswork]

Don't listen to the haters. Keep writing, keep practicing, you can do it!

[Lunafan1k]

might be a troll fic... but if not there is defiantly a lot of work to do, everyone starts off somewhere. you have to mess up to get better sometimes.

[NecromancerX69]

Ok I only has 2 complains:
1.- "Applejack was a rather pleasant person" So the story is mane 6 humans or just a mistake?
2.- Blocks of Text! try 2 eliminate them.

other than that this story sounds interesting... I will track and see what happens next.

[Wild Wisp]

Oooh, this gona be good. oh want to hear a crazy idea, come up with your own curesed fruit, like...how about......THE MULTIMULTIFRUIT, yes the multi-multi-fruit, like the name sake the eater is able to make multible copies of them selfs, it could look yellow with black dot, and bulges like a grape but all the same size shape a texuer. i know that was random but...hey.....pinkiepie cant have ALL the fun.

Great job by the way bucko.

[Your Antagonist]

Awwww.... I was gonna do a one piece cross over... You beat me to it though, not bad.

[avatoa]

Oh this is gonna be so EPIC!

[Tonto the Trotter]

bit of a short intro, but I am intrigued to see what heppens next.

Nice idea for a story, this isn't the first MLP/One Piece cross-over I've read, (FanFic.net crossover page) but the other one was Human-in-Equestria bassed. I like whara this story is headed, I kind of have a thing for Supper-Powers. the discovery, the emotion, lerning the extent of your new power and deciding what to do with it, all greatly interest me.

I like your description of the tree the cursed fruit grows on, it's not exactly how I thout it looked, but it works just like I imagined. When I read your description the name "Tree of illusions" came to mind, I don't know if this is a canon name I read some whare, or I made it up some time in the past, but it is what I remember it being called. Name at your discretion my friend, this is new territory for pony's and names like Devil Fruit or Cursed Fruit don't seem to fit them, so I'm excited to see what thay call it.

rule of thum about Devil Fruit:
1) thay tast horrible 2) after one bite the power is absorbed, and the rest of the fruit is powerless, awfull tasting piece of fruit
3) the power of the fruit will make it's self know shortly after you eat it 4) if you eat two, you explode (and not in a good way)

good story so far, pace it out a bit and your golden.
yours trully:
J-Rook

[leonveltis]

good story! moar!!

[doctor_n]

When did applejack get infinite apple trees?