PS: Formerly 'Jonshine' - changed to match an available email address, JonOfEquestria [at] googlemail.com
Element of Magic, Librarian of Ponyville, Faithful student of Celestia... well, one of three ain't bad. Now the Great and Powerful Trixie herself is coming to visit, and she has a present for Twilight... one that might just cost her that one last thing she has.
Tragedy and comedy? Well, Trixie thinks it's hilarious... and Twilight doesn't - let's say that it's only funny if you're laughing at Twilight with Trixie.
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That is the best reason for a set of tags I have ever seen.
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lousy imagery and no logic
Tag this appropriatly, please. I expected some comedy and got nothing. I don't care how funny Trixie might find this situation.
Judging by your description, you're misusing the term 'tragedy' rather badly, which makes me reluctant to actually read the story. Tragedies are not simply stories in which tragic things happen. Tragedies are stories in which flawed characters fail because of their flaws. A tragedy paints a story of the blunders of its protagonist. They may or may not deserve what they get, but the story should give it plenty of leadup and plenty of hints that the main character was going about things the wrong way.
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I think... I have to have either tragedy or sad, and based on that description, I'm more convinced by tragedy, even though it is not a perfect fit. We more see Twilight's errors through her discussion of their consequences, which are bad, and then additional consequences happen to her. But that she doesn't see it coming is where the humour lies, and why it is tragic, because it is her own lack of empathy, of understanding of Trixie, that brings her to that place where she can be shocked.
Yours,
Jon
Well, that was dark. Well-written and interesting, but exceedingly grim.
I'm going to strongly suggest dropping the "Comedy" tag, as there's really nothing funny here. "Trixie thinks it's funny" doesn't really do it. The Joker thinks murder is a laugh a minute, but that doesn't make Batman a comedy.
I also feel "Sad" is more fitting that "Tragedy," as there's no final twist to wrench our expectations. Twilight's situation is bleak, it remains bleak, and we never really see a suggestion that it will . . . unbleakify.
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All true... but it is a story which defines a level, and then becomes much, much worse (for Twilight) towards the end.
As to funny... well, Twilight's expecting changelings to come out of the walls, and instead Trixie's nice to her... then finally comes around the back and gets her in a way that's just Kafkaesque. It's funny because it's ridiculous.
But I'm not unwilling to change it, as such. If anyone wants to fight for Tragedy vs. Sad, then please do so, and similarly if anyone wants to fight for the Comedy tag... plus, the tags is only a rough guide to the top-level description, which I think describes this story much more accurately.
Jon
Your rating is equal, I think you're doomed now. People will make an effort to keep it this way instead of a proper rating, at least that's how it goes on YouTube.
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wait, this place is YouTube? Where be CaptainSarklez's channel? anyways, this is alright, not amazing, but I will be reading it.
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I have to agree, if Trixie thinks something is hilarious, it must be.
I would have liked to see what happened to Celestia, Luna and Cadance. Along with Rainbow Dash's crimes. Since Twilight said 'her victims'.
Its a good story with 2 good messages.
1) Attention to detail is important. "you'll be able to pull this 10 miles tomorrow"...Trixie sets 'em up and knocks 'em down.
2) If you mess with the bull, you're gonna get the horns.
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Thank you! You may be interested in Madame Butterfly, which is an unfinished story of mine also heavily featuring Trixie.
JoE
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I put it on my 'read it later' list a while ago.
Chillingly effective, with tantalizing sequel and prequel hooks.
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Thank you! That's exactly the feel I was going for.
JoE