• Published 23rd Sep 2013
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Alone With Myself - TheExhaustedBrony



An earth pony becomes trapped in a cave, but he's not alone

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Day 14

I'm not hungry anymore. Yet, I feel somewhat empty inside. It's probably nothing. I've never tasted anything like it before in my life. I bet I'm the first pony to spoil my taste buds on such a treat. I'm sure he'd be flattered to receive such a compliment. I can't stop thinking about it. The flavor, the texture, the way it feels as it slides down my throat with ease. I need more. I know how to get it. I know the rhyme Mrs. Pie taught me like the back of my hoof. As long as im here, I'll never go hungry again! Once they come out of the pool, I'll wait until he falls asleep. That's when I'll smash him and enjoy my feast. Dearest sister, you were right about me. I am a monster! My actions are unforgivable, but if you were in my situation and had a taste, you'd probably love it. I know you will.

Comments ( 6 )

Man, this is dark! Yet, I really like it.

There are some grammatical mistakes, and the fanfiction is a bit short for several journal entries. Perhaps you can add some more in these chapters?

3244900 I suppose I could, however, with the 31shot challenge, I might have to get to this one at some other time.

That was dark indeed but good.

Saw it coming about halfway through. I can't say that ruined it, though... :pinkiecrazy:

The ending was a bit too abrupt to really hit home (he jumps from "horrified" to "I love eating ponies" in a single chapter? Come on...), but the overall tone and pacing is still pretty good. A fine example of the kind of dark story that I like. Good job! :duck:

Oh. That was simpler solution (but for cost of his soul... I wonder if that's how windigos are born).
I thought he would make clone so he wouldn't be lonely. Eventually he would starve and die. Clone would make his own clone so he also wouldn't be lonely, and die weeks later. Clone of the clone would make own clone, etc. for eternity, or until ceiling would collapse enough so 1M generation clone would get free. (Of course, it's assuming that Mirror Pool is rounding age every time. If it copies age perfectly, then chain of clones would eventually die from old age)

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