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Yet Another Mask


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Ever since Twilight and her friends took up the Elements of Harmony Celesita has been required to meet with her superiors about her progress. Some meetings go well, some... don't.

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Ever since Twilight and her friends took up the elements of Harmony Celesita has been required to meet with her superiors about her progress

Capitalize "Elements" and put a comma after Harmony.

1794504
I see that the Explorers have infected you...

1794602 Actually, I just hate to see improper grammar and punctuation.

1794602
I agree with 1794620, best to put your best foot forward. Good grammar and spelling in the short description make the story appear more polished to anyone taking a quick look for something to read.

1794620 1794662
Oh, agreed. I wrote a blog post all about how to do a good description, and one of the priorities is getting the mechanics as perfect as possible.

As for this story... Short, dark, and VERY effective. There's a LOT of depth indicated here, both in terms of world building, and in terms of relationships between Princess Celestia and *spoiler redacted*

How do I make those new spoiler tags work, anyway? I'd like to say more without spoiling this story.

1794793
Yeah, I figure that if an author can't be bothered to make the description grammatically correct, then I shouldn't bother to read it.
Not to be harsh or anything.

1794858
It's not harsh, it's honest. Poor grammar is harder to read/make sense of, and it's a good guess that the story itself has the same quality of grammar as the description.

Comment posted by Dr. Fumbles deleted Dec 13th, 2012

Ever since Twilight and her friends took up the elements of Harmony Celesita has been required to meet with her superiors about her progress

Celesita has been required to meet with her superiors about her progress

Celesita

Celesita

Celesita

Celesita

1797500 Whatever, Princess.

1797517
I'm one myself. I wasn't condemning, but praising your efforts.

1797707
<The place that will, hopefully, be filled by an iloveportalz0r's emoticon depicting a smiling Princess Cadence>

1797722
I'm using that for all the places I would put emoticons until I can convince him to actually make them.

Yet Another Mask, I am sorry how this slowly spiraled out of control. I am sure you intended none of this. :twilightoops:

"We have come to a... decision."

I read this in the voice of the guy from the council from XCOM.

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