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Heavy Rains


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Daniel Calhoun, a factory worker from Albany, New York and former soldier finds himself in Equestria. With his memory lost and a handgun as his only clue, he must find out who he once was before it's lost to him forever.
You should probably read Vehemence's story Scorched if you want some important context for certain events... or something with a bit more... personality.

See that cover art? Done by the one! The only! Vehemence!

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 67 )

I like it! I can't wait to see more of this so keep it up!

1694964 No problem. I aim to please, I'm just a terrible shot most of the time. Good to see someone likes this. :twilightsmile:
Also welcome to FimFiction, if you ever have any questions feel free to ask.

Never enough HiE for me. :twilightsmile:

1696889 Indeed, My metaloid friend... Indeed.

Well lets see what this story will get to. :P I'll be reading the chapters since I think this story will be good. Nice job on the start by the way! :twilightsmile:

1697621 Thank you! I try, albeit not as hard as I should but I try. I hope I won't disappoint! :twilightsmile:

1698649. You read it right

1698734 Hooray for me then. I find that an accomplishment considering it's going on 1 AM and I just spent 3-4 hours on coding... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Coding? What's that 1698778

1698858 Coding as in programming for software. I practice it in my spare time whenever I'm not working or writing.

so he went to Equestria when he died? and still has the bullet hole in his head...nice can't wait for more

When you gonna be updating this? I am liking this story at the moment! :pinkiehappy:

1726680 Well I can't wait for it! This seems like a very promising story.

Nice chapter, you've got FS and RD's personality right.

1728620 Alright I just can't shake the feeling that I'm somehow misinterpreting them... Oh well as long as it's right.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png Thanks for the feedback.

Another brilliant chapter and the slang you use really works well in the story. I have never seen any HiE's set on 1920's earth and you made it work very well. Keep going! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

1732948 Thank you! Comments like that are the greatest thing to read... to me at least. Anyway I shall try to have the next chapters up by Friday.

When you gonna be updating this?

1772036 Hopefully by tomorrow. I had relatives over all week, so I shall be writing for the remainder of the night to see if I can put it up.

Not updated yet? :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

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That saving bug deleted everything I wrote and I forgot to back it up. So as of right now I am rewriting the chapter. Give me an hour.

Oh ok...CAN'T WAIT!!! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Heavy Rains deleted Dec 12th, 2012

Another brilliant chapter! :pinkiehappy: I think Danny should go to the Everfree Forest. I want to see what this guy is made of! :rainbowdetermined2:

Ponyville. DIS GON B GUD

Sweet Apple Acres here

1784528>>1784546>>1784798
Since there is a tie, if there are no other votes by 12:00 PM (EST) tomorrow. I will probably assign numbers to each locale
and roll a die. Which ever it lands on will be the location of choice.
Everfree: 1 & 2
Sweet Apple Acres: 3 & 4
Ponyville: 5 & 6
Objections?

my guess is that you are going to roll a 4. :rainbowkiss:

1786703 I'll take that bet! If you're right; I'll write out all three possibilities. If not then I'll just do the one. Deal? Deal.
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Wait... I challenged myself on your behalf... What ever.

Come on 1 & 2! :rainbowdetermined2:

1786961 Still have a few hours. I'm partial to The Everfree myself but voting would be a conflict of interest. Gotta keep what little professionalism I have ya know?

Yeah I know what you mean. :twilightsheepish: Will danny by any chance have some encounters with thethe monsters of the Everfree Forest if he goes there? :rainbowhuh:

1786974 Without a doubt. Up to this point nearly all story conflict has been internal. We need some external conflict to shake things up a bit.

Sounds good. Although it makes me wonder what conflict there may be in sweet apple acres and ponyville since fluttershy and RD are the only ones to have seen him a few of the locals could be a bit defensive seeing a monster roaming through the streets at night.

1787006 Hush now... Lest the Parasprites catch wind :raritywink:

1787014 Hehe ok:twilightsheepish: As always I can't wait for the next chapter!

1787021 If your itching for something to read. Try my other story, 'The Dark Ones' Ever hear of the game Metro: 2033? Basically it's that with Ponies. It has gotten pretty good response.:twilightblush: Look at me. Self advertising.

Sounds good. I might have a look at it.:pinkiesmile:

Was that little bit with Angel foreshadowing something?:duck:

1795549 Error 404 - File not found...
In all seriousness I'm going to say this now... The Romance tag isn't for Danny... Not in the first Act anyway. But it is foreshadowing something else... so yes.

Another great chapter! Lets hope Danny doesn't get his ass kicked by the stallion! :rainbowlaugh:

1795632You want that stallion's name? :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

Yes please! :pinkiehappy:

1795743 It's Lath[REDACTED]
:pinkiegasp:: You almost spoiled the surprise!
I'm Sorry...

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