• Member Since 11th Dec, 2011
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I love ponies herpdaderp


Scootaloo and Dinky Cuddling.
Follow's the canon of my blog Mini-Scootaloo.tumblr.com

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 23 )

Aw, thanks!
I'm trying to get this ship a little more known!

I like the story, the characters are portrayed nicely and the plot is enjoyable :)

The formatting is not all that great, but that's something you can work on in time.
Keep up the good work.

And you're the second person to say that but, I dunno how to change it to look better, not does my editor sooo :applejackunsure:

Take a look at a Harry Potter book, notice how they separate dialogue and the happening events. If you don't have a Harry Potter book handy, some other book like that.

That's basically how your formatting should look. Also, formatting involves spelling and grammar.

Formatting is something that will always be hard to get perfectly right, but you just have to try your best and work hard to improve. Constructive criticism is a good place to start. If I'm the second person to mention something, then it may be worth taking a look at. Keep it up, and always try to improve.

Oh, also, formatting may be the "make or break" on someone's decision to read your story at all, so trying hard is very important.

That felt a bit rushed.

It wasn't really suppose to be a long fic.

And ill say this again, writings a tiny hobby, I draw I just write sometimes to express something better then a picture can. So I'm not trying nor every will be a perfect or even that great of a writer.

It was rushed and there were major formatting problems, but it was a good, original piece of creative work.

Because I just really like foalshipping, I think I'll try my hoof at Dinkyloo. Creative idea, even though my favorite is Scootabelle. Up-thumbed! :scootangel:

Whatever makes you happy. Just keep in mind that if you want your audience to grow you'll have to work out your flaws as you go along. I've been writing a bit of original content myself, and I keep going back and fixing things as I go because I want it to be enjoyable for others as well as myself. Just a thought though.

Try to accept help for what it is though, most people are truly just trying to help when they critique stories and other forms of art.

Good luck on your stuff.

Well that first person wasn't.. the nicest.
And I REALLY don't want to take the time to go find some editor and wait for god knows how long for them to even think of helping, So it's not worth the wait, So unless you want to or someone else in the comments, it's staying as it is.

That's awesome! but I don't think I need more then one person saying the formatting sucks.

Yeah, sorry about that. Some writers need a stampede of Pinkie Pies to get them to know something. But I am serious; I'm gonna try my hoof at Dinkyloo, even if it's just friendshipping. :scootangel::unsuresweetie::eeyup:

The cuteness almost gave me Type 2 Adult Onset Diabeetus, and the idea of Dinky + Scootaloo is very adorable.

But in actual critique, the story is moving perhaps too fast, and the formatting could be much better. I'd suggest indenting the paragraphs, and making the paragraphs more like.. y'know... paragraphs.

:rainbowkiss: Awesome!

XD thank you, they're just too freakin cute!
And I know.

Thanks! I'll notify you when it's done. :pinkiehappy:

This is the only Dinkyloo fanfiction I'd seen. She (and this ship) need more love.

This.....This is.......AWESOME!!!!!:pinkiehappy: It's just plain amazing, even though it is short.:pinkiesmile:
Mustache for you.:moustache:

:heart: This is the very first shipping story that's about Dinky that I've read.

Very short but sweet as a piece of candy.:twilightsmile:
Good work.:pinkiehappy:

It's ADORBS x 2 but a bit too fast for my taste. :heart:

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